All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Butterfly in a Box"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from sunnilicious
I enjoyed your poem. The analogies hold much wisdom about couplehood. We all want happiness and joy, but there are so many other emotions and responsibilities that come along with the relationship. Excellent work.
Forgive me for running out of 6's. Peace, love and much happiness always.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I enjoyed your poem. The analogies hold much wisdom about couplehood. We all want happiness and joy, but there are so many other emotions and responsibilities that come along with the relationship. Excellent work.
Forgive me for running out of 6's. Peace, love and much happiness always.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thanks sunni! Virtual '6' is always good my dear! :) Sharyn
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how DO you do those little flower doozies!?? they're GORGEOUS!
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Glitter Graphics - Search Flowers (cut & paste code(s)). Here's the url
http://www.glitter-graphics.com/gallery.php?tags=flowers
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oh what fun! thank you so much sunni! I noticed you'd put it on one of your poems, too, and thought it looked so sweet. I'm a total computer idiot of course ... but I'll see if I can get it to work (not your signature flowers of course ... but something else!) So sweet of you to share that info. :) Sharyn
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Sorry for the late reply. I ran to the market. Did groceries this weekend, but forgot breakfast. Anyways, once you get the hang of C&P'ing graphics it becomes addictive.
Highlight HTML Code... to cut press Ctrl and C at the same time. To paste press Ctrl and V at the same time. Waah-Lahh!
Have fun!
Comment from Patti R.
Indeed, a very dark write - I enjoy learning of all the different sides of you, Sharyn! You are incredibly multi-faceted and your writing reflects that. This poem is kinda scary - very cool - and I have no doubt you are the mutant butterfly!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Indeed, a very dark write - I enjoy learning of all the different sides of you, Sharyn! You are incredibly multi-faceted and your writing reflects that. This poem is kinda scary - very cool - and I have no doubt you are the mutant butterfly!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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grrrrrrrrrrrrr! :) thanks Patti - yes, there are many sides of me - for many years I skittered along the surface of life, till I learned that I HAD to go deep, or not survive. Very character-building, though not always pleasant!
Comment from jjstar
Absolutely brilliant! I hope your message of strength and vitality is delivered to all out there who have had the light sucked out of their lives!
I have news for you.
I poked holes in the box,
so light can filter in, and
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Absolutely brilliant! I hope your message of strength and vitality is delivered to all out there who have had the light sucked out of their lives!
I have news for you.
I poked holes in the box,
so light can filter in, and
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much jj - and a special thank you for the magic '6'! You have the picture exactly - it's often a case of self-preservation, yes? Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from artemis53
I remember my sister going to a movie called "The Collector." That's what this makes me think of. Of course, I have an ex kind of like that (good reason to keep my distance) and I've got to say that this write gets me "creeped out" maybe because it's so true. "you feed off the light of others
because you, yourself, have none." Isn't that the truth.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I remember my sister going to a movie called "The Collector." That's what this makes me think of. Of course, I have an ex kind of like that (good reason to keep my distance) and I've got to say that this write gets me "creeped out" maybe because it's so true. "you feed off the light of others
because you, yourself, have none." Isn't that the truth.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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yep - there's meant to be a "don't screw with me" tone to it Diane ... enough already!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
This poem is delicious in its darkness. I often write dark poetry which for some strange reason comes easier to me than a happy poem. I hope this isn't true of your situation but if so I m glad you got away from such a controlling man. You have used superb words to express yourself and your phrasing is exceptional. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Hi Sharyn,
This poem is delicious in its darkness. I often write dark poetry which for some strange reason comes easier to me than a happy poem. I hope this isn't true of your situation but if so I m glad you got away from such a controlling man. You have used superb words to express yourself and your phrasing is exceptional. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx Chey - yes, I probably need to write "dark" more often, because it's something I tend to avoid ... grrrrrrrrrr!
Comment from the Rambler
Top quality writing. I so love the ending. A passionate, multi layered piece of poetry that instantly grabs the reader and draws them into your world.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Top quality writing. I so love the ending. A passionate, multi layered piece of poetry that instantly grabs the reader and draws them into your world.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Rambler, for reading & understanding this piece. Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from MissMerri
This is certainly a thought-provoking poem, full of strong metaphors and some great relationship advice as well. I like how you wrote this, almost
like a little story. Very enjoyable read. I learned something, which is always gratifying.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This is certainly a thought-provoking poem, full of strong metaphors and some great relationship advice as well. I like how you wrote this, almost
like a little story. Very enjoyable read. I learned something, which is always gratifying.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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thx MissMerri!
Comment from JennyB32
I adore this poem so very much. I was cheering on the butterfly the entire time and glad that about the ending. Thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I adore this poem so very much. I was cheering on the butterfly the entire time and glad that about the ending. Thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thanks Jenny - there does come a time occasionally where one draws a line of defense around oneself and says "cross at your own peril"! thank you so much for reading & reviewing! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from PedrosA5LeggedDonkey
In the box, plotting... He's in for a shock when he opens it again. Very nice example of how women plot with patience for that right moment.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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In the box, plotting... He's in for a shock when he opens it again. Very nice example of how women plot with patience for that right moment.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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We do indeed Pedros - but only if abused (at least from my perspective) - grrrrrrr! Thank you so much for reading & reviewing! Best wishes, Sharyn
Comment from cce29
Great title and pic for yur poem. I love the use of metaphores, and other poetic devices. So sorry, if you went through this, that yu were with some one like that. Unfortunately there are a lot of people that love to "feed" off people. Yu need to enter this into a contest. I look forward to reading more of your work
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Great title and pic for yur poem. I love the use of metaphores, and other poetic devices. So sorry, if you went through this, that yu were with some one like that. Unfortunately there are a lot of people that love to "feed" off people. Yu need to enter this into a contest. I look forward to reading more of your work
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and for your awarding of the special '6' cc - I did, indeed, go through this - but it's not necessarily a negative in the long run, because it forced me to look at how I tied my self worth to another. An interesting lesson! Thank you so much for keying into this one! Best wishes, Sharyn