All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "We'll Take Two!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from terry drake
I liked your repeat line throughout the various verses but I did not understand it. What is meant by lets take two? Your cadence was good and the rhyme scheme well chosen.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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I liked your repeat line throughout the various verses but I did not understand it. What is meant by lets take two? Your cadence was good and the rhyme scheme well chosen.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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two summers of course! :)
Comment from 4hisglory
I don't know about the rules of this poem, but it seems like you did a good job. I do like the words of your poem! I,m all for having summer again or unending! I do think that the Lord has His reasons, though, for having seasons. Some we will never understand right now.
Good poem, good flow and nice message. Blessings, LaVonne
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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I don't know about the rules of this poem, but it seems like you did a good job. I do like the words of your poem! I,m all for having summer again or unending! I do think that the Lord has His reasons, though, for having seasons. Some we will never understand right now.
Good poem, good flow and nice message. Blessings, LaVonne
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx LaVonne!
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Very fun and uplifting piece about love and trying to outrun the season. Nice rhythm to the piece- of the tropical elements or calypso music with a lovely picture to boot. Great work and good luck! holly
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Very fun and uplifting piece about love and trying to outrun the season. Nice rhythm to the piece- of the tropical elements or calypso music with a lovely picture to boot. Great work and good luck! holly
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx so much Holly! :)
Comment from simonbagh
Do not so much attention to the things that have passed because all are being gone on the flitting time, but it is written nicely enough to be gifted a 5, well done, Simon.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Do not so much attention to the things that have passed because all are being gone on the flitting time, but it is written nicely enough to be gifted a 5, well done, Simon.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx!
Comment from mermaids
Your poem is a perfect fit for me, I do not want summer to end. Your poem captures the feel of wanting summer all year long. I like the part about going south to continue experiencing summer.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Your poem is a perfect fit for me, I do not want summer to end. Your poem captures the feel of wanting summer all year long. I like the part about going south to continue experiencing summer.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx Mermaids!
Comment from EMB
Even though this was a very nice piece, I'm not so fond of summers. I love fall and spring, when mosquitoes have yet to gain a stronghold on my back yard.
Still, I'm not gonna let that distract me from appreciating a great poem when I see one.
Very nice, my friend.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Even though this was a very nice piece, I'm not so fond of summers. I love fall and spring, when mosquitoes have yet to gain a stronghold on my back yard.
Still, I'm not gonna let that distract me from appreciating a great poem when I see one.
Very nice, my friend.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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aaah, but you're critiquing the poem, Edward, and not letting your personal feelings get in the way, right? And mosquitoes you can keep all for yourself my friend!!! Blessings!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes I agree why should summer ever end my friend although here ours never started sorry lol you have done really well I agree with the sentiment of your poem well written good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Yes I agree why should summer ever end my friend although here ours never started sorry lol you have done really well I agree with the sentiment of your poem well written good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx Jill!
Comment from Crystal Carey
Great job, there are places that summer is all year long right? I don't know if I could live there, I love my seasons, winter could be a bit shorter though!
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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Great job, there are places that summer is all year long right? I don't know if I could live there, I love my seasons, winter could be a bit shorter though!
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2012
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thx Crystal - when you live in one of these "all year long" places Crystal, there are fine distinctions between the "seasons" which you notice after a while. But I must admit I DO love to go play in the snow occasionally!