Winds of Change
A Minute poem for the contest71 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Tony,
It took me a minute (get it?) to understand this poem is positioned in a different time. Here we are at the end of summer, while your poem seems to mark the brush of spring.
Spring is mostly my favorite time of the year. (I am enjoying this moment quite a lot, I must say.) When the dead things vanish and the new things burst forth.... ahhhh! Who cannot love that?
Your poem holds some of those things up for view - and delightfully. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Tony,
It took me a minute (get it?) to understand this poem is positioned in a different time. Here we are at the end of summer, while your poem seems to mark the brush of spring.
Spring is mostly my favorite time of the year. (I am enjoying this moment quite a lot, I must say.) When the dead things vanish and the new things burst forth.... ahhhh! Who cannot love that?
Your poem holds some of those things up for view - and delightfully. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Robyn. I appreciate your comments. I like spring, too, but will have to wait a month or two yet. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lightink
I wish I had a six left, Tony!
How can you even pack so much into a minute?
You open with a stunning image,
'cleansing breath' is amazing referring to the wind...
but you take it a step further - you give it a voice (even if it's only in the observer's mind: "Away with death,"
And then you present a lovely fall scene:
"as brown leaves sway.".
We get to witness the the full shedding:
"It gives a tug and sets them free
of winter's tree,"
Emphasizing the change again:
"transformed, at last;"
And then the satori line worthy expression (my favorite line):
"tomorrow's past"
Then, you introduce the Mythological rebirth, the second 'wind of change'
"Persephone will bring fresh birth
and springtime mirth"
And you close with the thought of freedom that comes with BOTH changes(for you used 'also')
"a warmer breeze
that also frees.".
Absolutely stunning range of topics in such a small form. You didn't waste a single syllable in this...
You put the bar impossibly high for everyone else!
Well done!
Warmly,
J
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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I wish I had a six left, Tony!
How can you even pack so much into a minute?
You open with a stunning image,
'cleansing breath' is amazing referring to the wind...
but you take it a step further - you give it a voice (even if it's only in the observer's mind: "Away with death,"
And then you present a lovely fall scene:
"as brown leaves sway.".
We get to witness the the full shedding:
"It gives a tug and sets them free
of winter's tree,"
Emphasizing the change again:
"transformed, at last;"
And then the satori line worthy expression (my favorite line):
"tomorrow's past"
Then, you introduce the Mythological rebirth, the second 'wind of change'
"Persephone will bring fresh birth
and springtime mirth"
And you close with the thought of freedom that comes with BOTH changes(for you used 'also')
"a warmer breeze
that also frees.".
Absolutely stunning range of topics in such a small form. You didn't waste a single syllable in this...
You put the bar impossibly high for everyone else!
Well done!
Warmly,
J
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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You write such eloquent, supportive and perceptive reviews, Jyoti. I truly enjoy them. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sally Law
I bet you are chomping at the bit for warmer weather. A fine poem to welcome in springlike warmth and newness. With the virus, fresh air is needed, and the glory of nature.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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I bet you are chomping at the bit for warmer weather. A fine poem to welcome in springlike warmth and newness. With the virus, fresh air is needed, and the glory of nature.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Sally. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes to you, too. Tony
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I love a minute poem; I like and have enjoyed the read, thoughts are so minutely progressed; winds of change is always welcoming; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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I love a minute poem; I like and have enjoyed the read, thoughts are so minutely progressed; winds of change is always welcoming; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, ALCREATOR. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Fred Berg
I enjoy this poem quite a bit. Something so revitalizing about the imagery you used. Air and the seasons: the oldest metaphors in the book, but they never seem to tire :)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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I enjoy this poem quite a bit. Something so revitalizing about the imagery you used. Air and the seasons: the oldest metaphors in the book, but they never seem to tire :)
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Fred. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from poetwatch
Persephone the queen of Hades, a good choice to scare death away, Tony. :) That is what we need, women with power, for we men have not done too well. We destroy and end life, whereas, women bring to birth new life into the world. This is a good offering for the Minute poem contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Persephone the queen of Hades, a good choice to scare death away, Tony. :) That is what we need, women with power, for we men have not done too well. We destroy and end life, whereas, women bring to birth new life into the world. This is a good offering for the Minute poem contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Poetwatch. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mary Furlong
A beautiful entry in this contest. The rhymes add so much to syllabic poetry. The entire poem has a graceful and seemingly effortless sound. You have a wonderful "ear" for poetry. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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A beautiful entry in this contest. The rhymes add so much to syllabic poetry. The entire poem has a graceful and seemingly effortless sound. You have a wonderful "ear" for poetry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Mary. I appreciate your very kind comments and good luck wishes. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
This brought to mind the old adage 'If winter comes, can spring be far behind.' Here in the UK it is most unseasonal weather with strong gusty winds and sharp showers so, although high summer it feels decidedly autumnal - for a minute!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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This brought to mind the old adage 'If winter comes, can spring be far behind.' Here in the UK it is most unseasonal weather with strong gusty winds and sharp showers so, although high summer it feels decidedly autumnal - for a minute!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Jim. We're creeping towards spring here, but winter is no great hardship. Often, it seems much the same as an English summer.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written minute poem about winds that bring change mostly winds bring also devastation. In a bad situation we can only hope the winds of change will bring something better for all.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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A very well-written minute poem about winds that bring change mostly winds bring also devastation. In a bad situation we can only hope the winds of change will bring something better for all.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Sandra. I appreciate your comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You've written a minute poem worthy of a six, and I hate to say it but I'm already out. I love the wind, it has so many moods, I've written one about it, too, gathering dust in my MS folder. Yours includes the Greek Goddess of vegetation, who rightly has her place in your poem. A lovely minute poem for the contest, Tony. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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You've written a minute poem worthy of a six, and I hate to say it but I'm already out. I love the wind, it has so many moods, I've written one about it, too, gathering dust in my MS folder. Yours includes the Greek Goddess of vegetation, who rightly has her place in your poem. A lovely minute poem for the contest, Tony. Good luck! :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Sandra. I quite like the wind in its softer moods, but it unsettles me when it gets up.
I've just been reading Robert's new book and his splendid tale of Veronica and Mildred!