2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "haiku(soaked earth smells like rain)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Soaked Earth Smells Like Rain, takes a lot into consideration as we see the rain, which both denies and allows our enjoying the sun's rays. It is all congruent to the smile on a little face. Nice.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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This haiku, Soaked Earth Smells Like Rain, takes a lot into consideration as we see the rain, which both denies and allows our enjoying the sun's rays. It is all congruent to the smile on a little face. Nice.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Very simple, yet elegant. I love your double rainbow picture. The rainbow fonts are cute, but a bit distractive. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing your poem with me.
Peace, Jesse James
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Very simple, yet elegant. I love your double rainbow picture. The rainbow fonts are cute, but a bit distractive. Good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing your poem with me.
Peace, Jesse James
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Domino 2
I can't resist $1:15 for reviewing 13 words. :-)
With respect, I'm not sure about 1st line, as it's written as a simile, though seems like a metaphor, as I don't think rain smells of anything - apart from 'soaked earth' on this occasion.
I particularly like the imagery of the 2nd line, and the satori is excellent.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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I can't resist $1:15 for reviewing 13 words. :-)
With respect, I'm not sure about 1st line, as it's written as a simile, though seems like a metaphor, as I don't think rain smells of anything - apart from 'soaked earth' on this occasion.
I particularly like the imagery of the 2nd line, and the satori is excellent.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Very good poem. You said a lot with only a few words, and that says a lot. A nice aura of peacefulness ripples throughout. Nice work.
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Very good poem. You said a lot with only a few words, and that says a lot. A nice aura of peacefulness ripples throughout. Nice work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Ulla
Oh, this is very cleverly done and a very clever write. I liked this short poem that showed the rainbow and the child's delight. Best of luck in the contest. Ulla
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Oh, this is very cleverly done and a very clever write. I liked this short poem that showed the rainbow and the child's delight. Best of luck in the contest. Ulla
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from lightink
This is probably the most colorful haiku I ever read! Stunning presentation! I love the smell of the soil after rain! It creates a child-like wonder indeed! Good luck at the contest!
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This is probably the most colorful haiku I ever read! Stunning presentation! I love the smell of the soil after rain! It creates a child-like wonder indeed! Good luck at the contest!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :) You got it! it is a child-like wonder
Comment from tfawcus
I rather envy your presentation skills - most effective in enhancing your poem! The smell of damp earth must rank among life's greatest sensory pleasures. Your central line links beautifully both ways - a bridge back to our childhood and simple pleasures.
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I rather envy your presentation skills - most effective in enhancing your poem! The smell of damp earth must rank among life's greatest sensory pleasures. Your central line links beautifully both ways - a bridge back to our childhood and simple pleasures.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery Author, this really is an excellent entry for this particular competition, a well written and very colourful haiku which should do well with its well chosen words. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Mystery Author, this really is an excellent entry for this particular competition, a well written and very colourful haiku which should do well with its well chosen words. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your excellent review and kind words. :)
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Lena Borghi
Love the letters in different colors to echo the rainbow theme.
Your haiku is in good form with two grammatically connected lines (even if with a preposition)and a beautiful satori. Excellent and vivid concrete imagery.
Good luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
Lena
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Love the letters in different colors to echo the rainbow theme.
Your haiku is in good form with two grammatically connected lines (even if with a preposition)and a beautiful satori. Excellent and vivid concrete imagery.
Good luck in the contest!
Best wishes,
Lena
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, I really appreciate it. :)
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You are very welcome :)
Comment from frogbook
Lovely thought process and liked the lettering. Much said in your few lines of this poetry type. Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Lovely thought process and liked the lettering. Much said in your few lines of this poetry type. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, I really appreciate it. :)