All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Beginnings and Endings"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Joan E.
I admired your alternating rhymes and varying rhythms. I could imagine the poem and its refrain with the waltz music. I appreciated the dynamics' glossary as well. Thanks for the memories, questions, reflections and vivid metaphors. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I admired your alternating rhymes and varying rhythms. I could imagine the poem and its refrain with the waltz music. I appreciated the dynamics' glossary as well. Thanks for the memories, questions, reflections and vivid metaphors. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Bless you Joan - I'm so glad you enjoyed this one - and a special BIG 'mahalo' for your lovely six!
:0Sharyn
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It was my pleasure to read your splendid poem, particularly after my travels. Happy first Sunday of summer- Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am NOT a poet, but I love to read poems. I got hung up on the first stanza. I keep trying to pronoun sure and more so they rhyme. I'm sure there must be a dialect for something. Oh well, I'm sure it's just me. Anyway, I loved your poem and it flowed like music, Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I am NOT a poet, but I love to read poems. I got hung up on the first stanza. I keep trying to pronoun sure and more so they rhyme. I'm sure there must be a dialect for something. Oh well, I'm sure it's just me. Anyway, I loved your poem and it flowed like music, Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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"Aloha" Barb - another author note coming up! In Australia, 'sure' and 'more' are pronounced as perfect rhymes, with no final 'r' even pronounced - so think SHAW AND MAW! Thanks for the comment - I'll make sure I add that! :)S
Comment from kiwijenny
I like the imagery...so gyred and whorling, we're here by design
.............................we're helixes, vortexes, one giant wheel...
I love the spiral image...and I never really knew what a vortex was ...
Thanks for author notes
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I like the imagery...so gyred and whorling, we're here by design
.............................we're helixes, vortexes, one giant wheel...
I love the spiral image...and I never really knew what a vortex was ...
Thanks for author notes
God bless
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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My pleasure kiwi - thx so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from Opal H.
I think we all wonder what life is and why we're here, at some point in our lives, don't we? It's one of those everlasting questions cuz it never gets answered.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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I think we all wonder what life is and why we're here, at some point in our lives, don't we? It's one of those everlasting questions cuz it never gets answered.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thus the circles, Opal - yep - right on! :)S
Comment from 3boysrule
Excellent job on this one! It gave me cold chills as the complexity and depth is so true. I really enjoyed it.
Plus, CONGRATULATIONS! I've read you won 2 contest in the last week. Excellent job!
Dee
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Excellent job on this one! It gave me cold chills as the complexity and depth is so true. I really enjoyed it.
Plus, CONGRATULATIONS! I've read you won 2 contest in the last week. Excellent job!
Dee
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thx so much Dee - yes, I was surprised! :))))S
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
What can anyone say about the meaning of life and why we are on the earth. I made up a quote that satisfies my 'need to know', "In life we learn, in death we understand." As to the piece, it goes in verbal circles like a dog chasing its tail not knowing why but knowing that it must. As humans, the unknown must somehow be defined or else we live in fear of it..thus the concept of God, Great Spirit, Zeus etc. was conceived. A whorling of images suffices here. As to the technical aspects as defined by the author, I remain woefully ignorant and now take my leave.
Regards:
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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What can anyone say about the meaning of life and why we are on the earth. I made up a quote that satisfies my 'need to know', "In life we learn, in death we understand." As to the piece, it goes in verbal circles like a dog chasing its tail not knowing why but knowing that it must. As humans, the unknown must somehow be defined or else we live in fear of it..thus the concept of God, Great Spirit, Zeus etc. was conceived. A whorling of images suffices here. As to the technical aspects as defined by the author, I remain woefully ignorant and now take my leave.
Regards:
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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well, you THINK you'll understand - fingers crossed on that one Stephen! but you go the whole idea of the poem - it's all a circle, one way or the other, yes? :))S
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sharyn,
beautiful construction of this poem in the form of ABAB. You had me remembering the same questions and wondering about the future answers. You put so much wonderment in your write that even the dread sounds a tad romantic. Best of wishes for this contest. Was hoping your sixes were back, bloody quota's
Kindest thoughts,
James xxx
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Hi Sharyn,
beautiful construction of this poem in the form of ABAB. You had me remembering the same questions and wondering about the future answers. You put so much wonderment in your write that even the dread sounds a tad romantic. Best of wishes for this contest. Was hoping your sixes were back, bloody quota's
Kindest thoughts,
James xxx
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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thank you so much James - I was hoping you'd like this one - pretty sure you would! :))Sharyn
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the picture like an eastern promise the earth moved on the blue skies upon the grass you drew a very beautiful picture I enjoyed
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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from the picture like an eastern promise the earth moved on the blue skies upon the grass you drew a very beautiful picture I enjoyed
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thx so much Dh! :))S
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a very nice poem to read on Sunday with eternal implications. I see you indeed have mostly anapestic meter to get that "waltz" feeling you were aiming for. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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This is a very nice poem to read on Sunday with eternal implications. I see you indeed have mostly anapestic meter to get that "waltz" feeling you were aiming for. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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to be exact, Crystie, each line starts with an unaccented syllable (think of the first note of "Blue Danube", then launches into DUM da da from there) - but of course as a song, I'd shorten it considerably :)))S
Comment from Kingsland
Life in a cycle, it meets itself coming back around again. So in reality there is no beginning or end. It all just revolves in cycles my friend. I liked the thoughts in this poem .It was well written and opens the mind for thinking. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Life in a cycle, it meets itself coming back around again. So in reality there is no beginning or end. It all just revolves in cycles my friend. I liked the thoughts in this poem .It was well written and opens the mind for thinking. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Lovely! I'm so glad you liked it John!
:)Sharyn