All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Dancing With Your Shadow"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very lovely free verse poem for the happy contest. Iy sounds so lovely to play at the beach so carefree. Good luck in the contest!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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A very lovely free verse poem for the happy contest. Iy sounds so lovely to play at the beach so carefree. Good luck in the contest!!! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thx so much Debbie! those were the days, hmm?
Comment from Rondeno
This is beautiful. It contains both the rush of a happy memory, and the lingering aftertaste of regret, of something lost. I love the way you make your images "crowd" the first part, suggesting exhilaration, then allow the poem to peter out in sadness.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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This is beautiful. It contains both the rush of a happy memory, and the lingering aftertaste of regret, of something lost. I love the way you make your images "crowd" the first part, suggesting exhilaration, then allow the poem to peter out in sadness.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thank you so much Rondeno!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Such a fun and uplifting poetic work. The artwork is precious! The well written descriptions brings back youth and fun on the beach under the sun. Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Such a fun and uplifting poetic work. The artwork is precious! The well written descriptions brings back youth and fun on the beach under the sun. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thx MW! :)
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from misscookie
I love the picture of that sweet happy child that you cghoose to go with your poem' it truly set the mood.
You had my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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I love the picture of that sweet happy child that you cghoose to go with your poem' it truly set the mood.
You had my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thank you so much misscookie!
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Your very welcome.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice piece of writing that is full of nostalgic sentiments. The images you employed are very strong and vivid. The picture is lovely. kudos
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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This is a nice piece of writing that is full of nostalgic sentiments. The images you employed are very strong and vivid. The picture is lovely. kudos
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thx perp!
Comment from Charlene0513
This is quite the poem that captures the innocence of a child at play and as their coy and enthusiastic ways to bring a smile to your day.
Good alliteration noted.
Charlene
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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This is quite the poem that captures the innocence of a child at play and as their coy and enthusiastic ways to bring a smile to your day.
Good alliteration noted.
Charlene
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Charlene ... so glad you came to the beach with us!
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. Nice writing here and great on recalling a memory. Your choice of words gave the photo life. I really liked how you concluded with dancing in the spiral of the leaves as I can imagine the child making his own wind and the leaves just flutter. Keep writing and cheers.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Hello. Nice writing here and great on recalling a memory. Your choice of words gave the photo life. I really liked how you concluded with dancing in the spiral of the leaves as I can imagine the child making his own wind and the leaves just flutter. Keep writing and cheers.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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thx so much Ben!
Comment from McMurry903
This is a very happy poem and fits the prompt perfectly. I love the imagery and reading flow in this piece, as I read aloud and with a smile. Excellent presentation, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Brian :)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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This is a very happy poem and fits the prompt perfectly. I love the imagery and reading flow in this piece, as I read aloud and with a smile. Excellent presentation, I wish you the best of luck in this contest! Brian :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much, Brian!
Comment from doris1022
very beautiful poetry of a wonderful time childhood and the beach. my two favorite things. well written and i will give you my precious vote today.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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very beautiful poetry of a wonderful time childhood and the beach. my two favorite things. well written and i will give you my precious vote today.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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Bless you Doris - have a happy and wonderful day yourself, my dear!
Comment from ann33
I liked the structure of your poem as it spiralled down to the end. Your words not only echoed this structure but you also painted a beautiful picture playing freely in the sun and sand, oblivious to anything or anyone around. "Cradled warm", "humming in ecstasy" and "full content" illustrate this last point.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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I liked the structure of your poem as it spiralled down to the end. Your words not only echoed this structure but you also painted a beautiful picture playing freely in the sun and sand, oblivious to anything or anyone around. "Cradled warm", "humming in ecstasy" and "full content" illustrate this last point.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2012
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thank you so much Ann - what fun to write about happiness, hmm?