All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Pull Up a Blue Chair"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Cumbrianlass
Quite the format. I can see the loud, fast and angry. Some AMAZING lines throughout. Fantastic read. Almost a rant, but it goes beyond that, somehow.
no Pied Piper needed
Great statement. Sums up the human race very well, I think. We do tend to follow blindly.
This should be set to rap music.
I'm not American, but I can already see that it's going to be a very interesting and 'fired up' election.
Av
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Quite the format. I can see the loud, fast and angry. Some AMAZING lines throughout. Fantastic read. Almost a rant, but it goes beyond that, somehow.
no Pied Piper needed
Great statement. Sums up the human race very well, I think. We do tend to follow blindly.
This should be set to rap music.
I'm not American, but I can already see that it's going to be a very interesting and 'fired up' election.
Av
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Av! I'd love someone to set it to rap (though I must admit, I HATE rap - but the subject matter seems ripe) - :) Sharyn
Comment from donaldww
This poem allows the reader to escape from the world of numb. The way to accomplish this is to build a wall, plant a garden, pull up a blue chair, and ask someone in to nurture. Or if you're not comfortable with people, build a wall of flowers and invite in the butterflies and bees.
Tell me with whom you associate, and I will tell you who you are.
--Goethe
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This poem allows the reader to escape from the world of numb. The way to accomplish this is to build a wall, plant a garden, pull up a blue chair, and ask someone in to nurture. Or if you're not comfortable with people, build a wall of flowers and invite in the butterflies and bees.
Tell me with whom you associate, and I will tell you who you are.
--Goethe
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx DW! love your Goethe quote!
Comment from justatuna
I knew I was going to give this a 6 half way through. This was a really powerful write. Very well done. Flowed very well and was full of passion. This is a new style from you, at least for me. This was indeed exceptional.
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I knew I was going to give this a 6 half way through. This was a really powerful write. Very well done. Flowed very well and was full of passion. This is a new style from you, at least for me. This was indeed exceptional.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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hey thanks so much jt! I'm having fun playing with this style, can you see? A special big thank you for your magic '6'! :) Sharyn
Comment from mumsyone
Hi Sharyn, I notice that the blue chairs in the photo are also "empty" chairs--maybe Clint Eastwood could do some real double-talk? I enjoyed reading your slam poetry. Some of it says what a lot of people are thinking right now. As for me, I'll stick with the butterflies and the bees and let God handle the rest.
Hugs,
Lois
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi Sharyn, I notice that the blue chairs in the photo are also "empty" chairs--maybe Clint Eastwood could do some real double-talk? I enjoyed reading your slam poetry. Some of it says what a lot of people are thinking right now. As for me, I'll stick with the butterflies and the bees and let God handle the rest.
Hugs,
Lois
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Lois! I much prefer the butterflies & bees myself! :)
Comment from rod007
Your message of the poison, corruption and evil in this World is clear in this unique style free verse. You talk of building your garden as the world should be built and redeemed. Great write.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Your message of the poison, corruption and evil in this World is clear in this unique style free verse. You talk of building your garden as the world should be built and redeemed. Great write.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx rod! :) Sharyn
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
homeless hopeless faces
displace the spaces
in my wall
often not even asking for any help at all
rat-red eyes blank, dead-dank
bled
to the end of their hope
sub-human
they masturbate
intubate
shooting up
into incisor'd rage and frenzy
instant quick-fix climactic satisfaction
the only possible escape from
the
world
of
numb
I'm thinking to myself, "This is some SLAMMING shit, man!" and then I come to the author's notes and I'm like, "Oh yeah!"
CUTTING EDGE! SEVENTEEN HUNDRED THOUSAND STARS!
Still thinking... blink!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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homeless hopeless faces
displace the spaces
in my wall
often not even asking for any help at all
rat-red eyes blank, dead-dank
bled
to the end of their hope
sub-human
they masturbate
intubate
shooting up
into incisor'd rage and frenzy
instant quick-fix climactic satisfaction
the only possible escape from
the
world
of
numb
I'm thinking to myself, "This is some SLAMMING shit, man!" and then I come to the author's notes and I'm like, "Oh yeah!"
CUTTING EDGE! SEVENTEEN HUNDRED THOUSAND STARS!
Still thinking... blink!
cheers
js
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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well I KNEW you'd like this one!! :)
Comment from Kirrily Morris
I like the way you ended on a positive note. We can all have a good attitude when everything around us is chaos. I like the easy style you write with, and enjoyed the way you wrote this. I'm not a poetry person, but I enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I like the way you ended on a positive note. We can all have a good attitude when everything around us is chaos. I like the easy style you write with, and enjoyed the way you wrote this. I'm not a poetry person, but I enjoyed this.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Kirrily - I do believe in the positive and don't believe in depressing reads my dear, so great - stop by again! :) Sharyn
Comment from juliedickson55
Wow, very effective and profound!
I love the Slam format that you presented this information in. Too many people believe that all is lost, they can do nothing. Yes, it's frustrating that there is no one to vote for; we probably won't see change for the good. But, walling oneself off with barbs and guns won't do much good.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Wow, very effective and profound!
I love the Slam format that you presented this information in. Too many people believe that all is lost, they can do nothing. Yes, it's frustrating that there is no one to vote for; we probably won't see change for the good. But, walling oneself off with barbs and guns won't do much good.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Julie - can't stand people who moan and groan and have pity parties - so glad you enjoyed and a HUGE thank you for the magic '6' - IT MEANS A LOT TO ME! blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Dawn Munro
OO WOW! This is powerful free verse and alliteration at it's best! You have mastered this category, this form and the contest I'll bet! Great, simply outstanding! And I love your blue chair metaphors! Exceptional!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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OO WOW! This is powerful free verse and alliteration at it's best! You have mastered this category, this form and the contest I'll bet! Great, simply outstanding! And I love your blue chair metaphors! Exceptional!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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hey Dawn - I was hoping you'd get this one! yeah! glad you enjoyed and bless you for the magic '6'!
Comment from EMB
You know, I can actually hear this on stage. This is intense. I'm just wondering, do you slow down the speech during the vertical wording to make an emphasis on each word? That's how I re-read it aloud to myself. (My cats were wondering what the hell was wrong with me to, talking nonsense at this hour.) LOL
Well done, Sharyn.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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You know, I can actually hear this on stage. This is intense. I'm just wondering, do you slow down the speech during the vertical wording to make an emphasis on each word? That's how I re-read it aloud to myself. (My cats were wondering what the hell was wrong with me to, talking nonsense at this hour.) LOL
Well done, Sharyn.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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it's meant to be performed Ed, you have that right - thanks for 'getting' it! and yes, you do slow down at the vertical wording, so you've got that too. Bless you! :) Sharyn