Comment from Taurean Monkey

Excellent

It is dark, Steve! I don't know the poem, but I shall certainly have a look at it now you've mentioned it. Great quatrains, ominous in nature, culminating in an outright threat! I certainly wouldn't #...go down to the woods today...# if you invited me lol. Well done on writing this sinister poem! TM

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thank you - that's the exact mood I was looking for. Compare Frost's gentler version...
Steve

Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.

My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.

He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.

The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

Very clever. You've created quite
a different mood and story with
your version. I enjoyed reading it
and I'm sure Mr. Frost is smiling.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thanks, nancy.
Steve

Comment from jgirlie152

Exceptional

Wow, this is certainly a powerful poem, pulling no punches.
Your great imagination and prose make this an outstanding
work, a bit scary, but not so much that I couldn't have a secret smile at the end. Good work, good reading.
Joan

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thanks, Joan
Steve

Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.

My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.

He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.

The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.

reply by jgirlie152 on 21-Jul-2012

love this poem. nice.

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

Read some of the reviews Steve (not all). I have always loved Frost but this twist is superb. I'm not getting into punctuation for I don't scour works for mistakes. I base them on content and this is outstanding.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thank you.
Steve

Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening
Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.

My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.

He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.

The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.

Comment from Inky Cat

Excellent

Definately one of my favourite poems (Frost's) and I love your take on it. Chilling! I actually did get chills. Especially twisting the original lonely wanderer's thoughts into an evil jealous murder story ... cool idea!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thank you - glad you got the plot (some missed it).
Steve

Comment from Maustin

Excellent

A very nice creative twist on a classic indeed. I really was pulled into this darker version of your work. The last stanza is so impactful. Great rhythm throughout. Nicely written. I enjoyed. Recommended read. Great art choice.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thanks for the great review.
Steve

reply by Maustin on 21-Jul-2012

Steve, so welcome :). ~Miracle

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Well, it IS one of MY favorite poems. The lines "I have promises to keep and miles to go before I sleep" got me through a lot of lonnnggg days at work in my lifetime. I really love your dark version! LOL! So very clever and well written too. :)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thanks, Phyllis - glad you enjoyed my piece of subversion - what icon shall I attack next?
Steve

Comment from squid152

Excellent

Nice take on Frost. Great picture. Looks a personal pic. I liked:

It hides the fact that I am here
Your little horse knows danger's near

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thanks, Squid.
Steve

Comment from ekpoet11

Good

Its an quirky little twist on Frost's poem, but not original enough for me to give five stars. too much like Frost's poem. I know that is central to your idea here, but i'd like to see some more creativity. ekpoet11

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 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Fair enough - thanks for reviewing.
Steve

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

How romantic and so different than robert frost, ( I made a copy and compared), In places better others worse , it will not at all affect your purse.
snow or frost or secret door will robert now come back for more?cool.Z.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2012

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2012

Thank you Zelick.
Steve