Interlude
An Idyll Poem85 total reviews
Comment from bayoupoet
This is a beautiful poem from beginning to end. It is well written with vivid imagery. The rhyme, rhythm and flow is is perfect. I love the artwork you chose to enhance your poem.
Blessings!
sandra
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
This is a beautiful poem from beginning to end. It is well written with vivid imagery. The rhyme, rhythm and flow is is perfect. I love the artwork you chose to enhance your poem.
Blessings!
sandra
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much sandra, for your great review...blessings.
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Carolyn 12
This is a beautiful poem that matches the picture perfectly. I love the way this poem tells a great story in so few lines. Wonderully done. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
This is a beautiful poem that matches the picture perfectly. I love the way this poem tells a great story in so few lines. Wonderully done. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much Carolyn 12, for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
Walking in a meadow painted with green,
very nicely done,
but i've a couple of prompts
for you to use or not as you see fit:
A willow tree stands, alone and serene. (improves flow)
Colorful wild flowers sprout here and there,
The scent of lilacs envelopes the air. (purple is redundant)
Warm sunshine bathes as I lift my face, (me is redundant)
To feel Mother Nature`s peaceful embrace.
A light breeze caresses my sun washed skin
As I meet your eyes, desire stirs within.
You capture my mouth in a lover`s kiss,
And I fall into passion`s sweet abyss.
muchly good luck!
regards, eph.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
Walking in a meadow painted with green,
very nicely done,
but i've a couple of prompts
for you to use or not as you see fit:
A willow tree stands, alone and serene. (improves flow)
Colorful wild flowers sprout here and there,
The scent of lilacs envelopes the air. (purple is redundant)
Warm sunshine bathes as I lift my face, (me is redundant)
To feel Mother Nature`s peaceful embrace.
A light breeze caresses my sun washed skin
As I meet your eyes, desire stirs within.
You capture my mouth in a lover`s kiss,
And I fall into passion`s sweet abyss.
muchly good luck!
regards, eph.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing ephraim crus, COS., I appreciate your suggestions...blessings.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is a very lovely poem and I enjoyed reading it very much. You created a lovely picture with your words. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
This is a very lovely poem and I enjoyed reading it very much. You created a lovely picture with your words. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much Piggies Grandma, for reading and reviewing...blessings.
Comment from Chris Tee
This is indeed a serene poem we have here old sport.
The conclusion makes this a striking piece and an excellent entry in the contest here.
Well done indeed and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
This is indeed a serene poem we have here old sport.
The conclusion makes this a striking piece and an excellent entry in the contest here.
Well done indeed and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much Chris Tee, for your great review...blessings.
Comment from Spencerpenrod
This is very good. I fin d a lot of poetry is too long to hold my interest, but this is of a perfect length. There is plenty of description and it paints a vivid picture in my mind as I read. Fantastic
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
This is very good. I fin d a lot of poetry is too long to hold my interest, but this is of a perfect length. There is plenty of description and it paints a vivid picture in my mind as I read. Fantastic
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much Spencerpenrod, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This starts with a beautiful picture and then wonderful descriptions of nature and love. Willow trees are my favorite. Good luck in the contest!!! DEbbie
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
This starts with a beautiful picture and then wonderful descriptions of nature and love. Willow trees are my favorite. Good luck in the contest!!! DEbbie
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so muc Debbie, for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...I love willow trees too...they are so beautiful...blessings.
Comment from DALLAS01
Your poem definitely evokes a mood of contentment. The rhyme and flow seems effortless. Only suggestion I would make is that a lilac background might add to this peaceful scene.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
Your poem definitely evokes a mood of contentment. The rhyme and flow seems effortless. Only suggestion I would make is that a lilac background might add to this peaceful scene.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much DALLAS01, for reading and reviewing...I appreciate your suggestion...blessings.
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you're welcome
Comment from ulster3
Hello, author.
This work is well thought out and downright beautiful! The beauty of nature gives a lovely build up to your petic words of love.
I wish you well in this contest.
Warmly, Rebecca
Hello, author.
This work is well thought out and downright beautiful! The beauty of nature gives a lovely build up to your petic words of love.
I wish you well in this contest.
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011
Comment from oNray
This is a very well presented poem. Appears that the poem was written to match the picture. Nice content, flow from rhyme and rhythm. This was a pleasure to read. :)
This is a very well presented poem. Appears that the poem was written to match the picture. Nice content, flow from rhyme and rhythm. This was a pleasure to read. :)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2011