What You Mean To Me.
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Comment from KathyH
This is really lovely. The poem has an easy flow and a comfortable rhyme. Your message of love is gentle and compelling. Nice job.
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This is really lovely. The poem has an easy flow and a comfortable rhyme. Your message of love is gentle and compelling. Nice job.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, Kathy, thanks for your wonderful comments and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from mumsyone
Ver cleverly done. Good twist on "If I should die before I wake..." which is what most of us learned growing up--not sure about kids today. Rhyme and meter are both good; enjoyable reading.
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Ver cleverly done. Good twist on "If I should die before I wake..." which is what most of us learned growing up--not sure about kids today. Rhyme and meter are both good; enjoyable reading.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Thank you, mumsyone, for those kind comments and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Rama Rao
It is indeed a novel idea to write a love poem speaking of death, coma and such repugnant things. Your poem flowed smoothly, rhymed well and made fascinating reading.
Yes, we forget until the last minute to say several things which we ought to have said earlier.
A great job.
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It is indeed a novel idea to write a love poem speaking of death, coma and such repugnant things. Your poem flowed smoothly, rhymed well and made fascinating reading.
Yes, we forget until the last minute to say several things which we ought to have said earlier.
A great job.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Yes, Ramarao. I think on a daily basis we are busy and forget to always tell people how we feel about them. I hope we all take the opportunity to tell our loved ones how we feel before it is too late. Thanks, my friend, for your kind review. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment from Suzie Q
Absolutely beautiful! Really tugs at the heart. Feelings such as this should never go unspoken and you expressed yourself perfectly. I especially liked " If I should wake from coma deep, I'll let you know that in my sleep, I sensed your presence and your love, twas you that I was dreaming of" Well said! Bravo!!
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Absolutely beautiful! Really tugs at the heart. Feelings such as this should never go unspoken and you expressed yourself perfectly. I especially liked " If I should wake from coma deep, I'll let you know that in my sleep, I sensed your presence and your love, twas you that I was dreaming of" Well said! Bravo!!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, Suzie, thank you so much for those wonderful comments and for your generous six star rating. You are right, these should never go unspoken, but often in the business of our lives, we do at times forget ... Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxx
Comment from jmshumate
This is a very touching poem, and a pleasant read. There is a good flow from beginning to end, and some good rhyming. Excellent job overall.
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This is a very touching poem, and a pleasant read. There is a good flow from beginning to end, and some good rhyming. Excellent job overall.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, jmshumate, thank you so much for those wonderful comments and for your generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxx
Comment from ejebb1951
Most touching fionageorge. I really enjoyed reading this work. We need to tell our loved ones daily just how much we care for we know not the hour of our departure. Everything flows beautifully.
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Most touching fionageorge. I really enjoyed reading this work. We need to tell our loved ones daily just how much we care for we know not the hour of our departure. Everything flows beautifully.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, ejebb, thank you so much for those wonderful comments and for your generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxx
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My pleasure Marijke. Edie
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My pleasure, Edie
Comment from Shirley McLain
How wonderful. That poem touched my heart. It was so nice to read such a wonderful love poem. I gave you the six because you deserve it for this poem. Great job.
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How wonderful. That poem touched my heart. It was so nice to read such a wonderful love poem. I gave you the six because you deserve it for this poem. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Wow, thank you for those wonderful comments and for your generous six star rating. I am thrilled this touched your heart. Warmest regards, my friend. Marijke :o) xxx
Comment from Artasylum
beautiful thoughts... must be quite the book and the beauty of the words is leaving the thoughts and wishes forever to be known... yours, diana
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beautiful thoughts... must be quite the book and the beauty of the words is leaving the thoughts and wishes forever to be known... yours, diana
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, Diana, thank you for those wonderful comments and for your generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxx
Comment from Matoshka
This was so beautiful and tender. I could see you telling your love goodbye, all the things you wanted to say. I enjoyed this so much and the love that is there. Blessings and good luck in the contest.
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This was so beautiful and tender. I could see you telling your love goodbye, all the things you wanted to say. I enjoyed this so much and the love that is there. Blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, Motoshka, thank you for those wonderful comments and for your generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxx
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You are so welcome Marijke. It was beautiful. Blessings.
Comment from Writingfundimension
An absolutely gorgeous poem! Each stanza is heart stirring; and the sentiments expressed so thought-provoking. I loved stanza #3, although they are all wonderful. Good luck in the contest...Bev
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An absolutely gorgeous poem! Each stanza is heart stirring; and the sentiments expressed so thought-provoking. I loved stanza #3, although they are all wonderful. Good luck in the contest...Bev
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2011
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Hi, Bev, thank you for those wonderful comments and for your generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke :o) xxx
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You are most welcome Marijke.