How This Critter Crits
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Micro-Critting"GROWTH? ADULATION? HURRY -- CHOOSE!
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Comment from nora arjuna
Hi to you, Jay. Thanks a lot for this chapter. I found it very useful as a guideline for all writers, and me especially, working on my novel at the moment. I liked the way you gave examples by relating your own experience in other line, and of course the bits and pieces as well. I'll try to remember what's required at the beginning and ending of each chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2006
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Hi to you, Jay. Thanks a lot for this chapter. I found it very useful as a guideline for all writers, and me especially, working on my novel at the moment. I liked the way you gave examples by relating your own experience in other line, and of course the bits and pieces as well. I'll try to remember what's required at the beginning and ending of each chapter.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2006
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Bless you, arjuna. You do know, don't you, that I don't consider one of my chapters a successful "run" until I get my crit from my little love, Arjuna. Thank you so much.
Jay
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Ah.. what a sweet thing to say, Jay. What you're doing here, posting these chapters have been a great help indeed.
Check on me some time. :)
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Hi Jay:
You've presented choice food for thought in this chapter. Unquestionably, a writer must give the reader reasons to care what happens to the protagonist starting with the opening sentence, then constantly reawaken a reader's hunger to learn more about the story and the characters involved in its development.
All too often, I forget to set hooks; to pose questions that will draw a reader back into the story for answers should they set the book down for any reason. Also, I must work harder to keep whetting their appetite enough to interest them in reading on. Hopefully I learned the messages in this chapter's lessons and managed to absorb it so I'll be able to employ your valuable wisdom.
I saw no spags and although it's a little drug out, the piece is very enlightening, Jay. I'm happy I had a chance to read it.
Sue-z-Q
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2006
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Hi Jay:
You've presented choice food for thought in this chapter. Unquestionably, a writer must give the reader reasons to care what happens to the protagonist starting with the opening sentence, then constantly reawaken a reader's hunger to learn more about the story and the characters involved in its development.
All too often, I forget to set hooks; to pose questions that will draw a reader back into the story for answers should they set the book down for any reason. Also, I must work harder to keep whetting their appetite enough to interest them in reading on. Hopefully I learned the messages in this chapter's lessons and managed to absorb it so I'll be able to employ your valuable wisdom.
I saw no spags and although it's a little drug out, the piece is very enlightening, Jay. I'm happy I had a chance to read it.
Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 13-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2006
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Thank you, Sue, for your kind words and for such a close read of the material. It was long. I had a terrible time writing it and keeping all the pieces strung together. Unfortunately, it sagged a bit, as you (very tactfully, thank you) pointed out.
Jay
Comment from cutie
it's very very important work to read and think about it a long time to decide many things....
for a better productions to submit fanstory.
more than a treasure and very well written, full of details and informative sentences with strongly useful examples.
unique style to be listened by the audience, neat and elegant.
given messages are so valuable and even in bookstores not easy to find this kind of things.
need to be printed out so I can remember when I forget :)
no any problem or error,
cheers!!!! kisses!!!! mucx!!!!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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it's very very important work to read and think about it a long time to decide many things....
for a better productions to submit fanstory.
more than a treasure and very well written, full of details and informative sentences with strongly useful examples.
unique style to be listened by the audience, neat and elegant.
given messages are so valuable and even in bookstores not easy to find this kind of things.
need to be printed out so I can remember when I forget :)
no any problem or error,
cheers!!!! kisses!!!! mucx!!!!
Comment Written 12-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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I always look forward to your crits, Charmy, and am much indebted to your kindness and patronage. Thank you for the visit.
Jay
Comment from SpicyMamacita
"...or any of probably scores of emotions." Did you mean "probable"?
This is the first "critting" piece that I have read, and I was not disappointed! Your style is so conversational, I felt like I was listening to the words roll right off my screen! It rings with a Dr. Phil-like common sense, and got the wheels turning crazily in my head. This is great advice without being preachy, and thank you for putting it out there!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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"...or any of probably scores of emotions." Did you mean "probable"?
This is the first "critting" piece that I have read, and I was not disappointed! Your style is so conversational, I felt like I was listening to the words roll right off my screen! It rings with a Dr. Phil-like common sense, and got the wheels turning crazily in my head. This is great advice without being preachy, and thank you for putting it out there!
Comment Written 12-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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Oh, Spicy, you don't know how much your commentary means to me. It makes me want to launch right into the next chapter. It is wonderful to be appreciated and know that I'm turning some crazy wheels. Bless you...
Jay
Comment from mrmonkey1980
An interesting read. You raise some good points and you are so right about chapters in novels. I know I only read a chapter or two at a time (because I tend to read most just before sleep) so I always write mine with this in mind; each one is a little episode with a hook at the end to make sure you return. You make some clear comparisons and it reads like you are having a conversation with the individual reader which is engaging. Excellent stuff.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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An interesting read. You raise some good points and you are so right about chapters in novels. I know I only read a chapter or two at a time (because I tend to read most just before sleep) so I always write mine with this in mind; each one is a little episode with a hook at the end to make sure you return. You make some clear comparisons and it reads like you are having a conversation with the individual reader which is engaging. Excellent stuff.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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Thank you so much, mrmonkey; what a wonderful way to have my computer greet me this morning. I am so glad you liked this segment. More to follow. If you have any interest you may want to sample some of the past critting fare. Thanks again...
Jay
Comment from bookishfabler
I was waiting to see what happened to you. I saw your name and wondered. What did he write about again? Ah ha, now I remember him. The critter guy. Though you do tend to go on, I like the way you write. I feel like you are talking to me. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Peace
book
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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I was waiting to see what happened to you. I saw your name and wondered. What did he write about again? Ah ha, now I remember him. The critter guy. Though you do tend to go on, I like the way you write. I feel like you are talking to me. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Peace
book
Comment Written 12-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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Yes... I do go on, don't I, book? But thanks to people with patience like yours I can keep my face warm by flapping my lips. Thanks for being there and I, too, look forward -- to reading your crits.
Jay
Comment from Louisa_ZA
Interesting read. I would love to read the other chapters as well. Good examples given of opening paragraphs. I love the way you compared selling insurance to selling stories on fanstory.
Regards,
Louisa
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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Interesting read. I would love to read the other chapters as well. Good examples given of opening paragraphs. I love the way you compared selling insurance to selling stories on fanstory.
Regards,
Louisa
Comment Written 12-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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Louisa, thanks for your kind comments. If I were a butcher, I suppose I would find ways of comparing it with laying out the steak on its little trays in the display case. It's all presentation, isn't it? Thanks for your interest and welcome aboard, Louisa.
Jay
Comment from bookwormgirl
you won't get in front of a customer until you first get his attention, and then his interest.
So true!!! This is a very intense work of writing and seemed to jump around an awfull lot, I am no writing expert by no means. However, this seemed to capture a variety of thoughts and intricities that a person may not even be aware of.
Thank you for sharing this work of art.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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you won't get in front of a customer until you first get his attention, and then his interest.
So true!!! This is a very intense work of writing and seemed to jump around an awfull lot, I am no writing expert by no means. However, this seemed to capture a variety of thoughts and intricities that a person may not even be aware of.
Thank you for sharing this work of art.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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Thank you so much for your kind words, boodwormgirl. I appreciate your observation of its jumping around a lot. I struggled through this. Hopefully you'll like the rest of them as well and I'll be able to work out some of the flab by then. Bless you...
Jay
Comment from mmichelle97219
I found this very insightful, and a great help. I found a lot of very helpful information, and discover a few things I never even thought of. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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I found this very insightful, and a great help. I found a lot of very helpful information, and discover a few things I never even thought of. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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No, thank YOU for your kind thoughts and compliments. I appreciate it.
Jay
Comment from LittleEmpress
So very true. I did that with my third chapter and people are waiting for the 4th b/c of what happened. Now if I have your interest, you are more than welcome to read. You have read the first chapter I believe. I turned it into a book "Learning to Live with Humans". Anyways. You brought up some good points that I will use in my writing. Thank you!
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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So very true. I did that with my third chapter and people are waiting for the 4th b/c of what happened. Now if I have your interest, you are more than welcome to read. You have read the first chapter I believe. I turned it into a book "Learning to Live with Humans". Anyways. You brought up some good points that I will use in my writing. Thank you!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2006
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I put it on my list of chapters to read. . . just as soon as my reviewing is completed. Thank you for your vote of confidence. Stay tuned for coming installments.
Jay