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Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I'm trying to take it with me"A collection of award winning poems
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Comment from LG Wolfe
Hello contest author,
I found this to be a very funny take on the issue of hoarding, along with being a great contest entry and technically sound rhyming scheme.
I like the self-deprecating pokes. Really made me smile the whole way through.
LG
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Hello contest author,
I found this to be a very funny take on the issue of hoarding, along with being a great contest entry and technically sound rhyming scheme.
I like the self-deprecating pokes. Really made me smile the whole way through.
LG
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you LG. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, I like the subject you chose for your topic of Not Perfect! Now, do you watch the TV show??? Or are you really a hoarder? Last summer, or was it the one before... I cleaned out a lot of my house. It took a couple of truckloads to do it, maybe 3 or 4... that were taken to my sister's house... she had a dumpster going over there as she was replacing a deck. I couldn't believe how much garbage had accumulated in my house over the years! I never toss anything either, until I realized just how much crap I was holding on to for no good reason! LOL, of course, I still am! A fun write :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Hello Author, I like the subject you chose for your topic of Not Perfect! Now, do you watch the TV show??? Or are you really a hoarder? Last summer, or was it the one before... I cleaned out a lot of my house. It took a couple of truckloads to do it, maybe 3 or 4... that were taken to my sister's house... she had a dumpster going over there as she was replacing a deck. I couldn't believe how much garbage had accumulated in my house over the years! I never toss anything either, until I realized just how much crap I was holding on to for no good reason! LOL, of course, I still am! A fun write :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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No Susan I don't watch the show, I live it. Congratulations on conquering your hoarding issues. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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Oh My Word Earl!!! Haven't you heard??? You can't take it with you!!! LOL
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very good and entertaining poem. I can certainly relate to it as I am alsoa hoarder. I wish you lots if luck in the competition. Cheers Jen
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is a very good and entertaining poem. I can certainly relate to it as I am alsoa hoarder. I wish you lots if luck in the competition. Cheers Jen
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Jen, i appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from tfawcus
It sounds as if you've got it real bad. Me, too! I wondered about the shift from 'my' to 'we' in the first line, especially as the whole of the rest of the poem is in the first person singular.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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It sounds as if you've got it real bad. Me, too! I wondered about the shift from 'my' to 'we' in the first line, especially as the whole of the rest of the poem is in the first person singular.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Congratulations you're the only one who has caught the shift. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from TPAC
I feel your statement in this write conveyance, finding myself in the process of moving, discovering years of accumulated items of my past collected that time. A good read in my opinion, capturing aspects of this event completely in my opinion. A great write.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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I feel your statement in this write conveyance, finding myself in the process of moving, discovering years of accumulated items of my past collected that time. A good read in my opinion, capturing aspects of this event completely in my opinion. A great write.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Bicpen
Cool ... Try metre or possible fix of the rhymes and the lines to make a more appealing and fitting finish. Other than that it has a clear message with good vision and leads quite well.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Cool ... Try metre or possible fix of the rhymes and the lines to make a more appealing and fitting finish. Other than that it has a clear message with good vision and leads quite well.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LIJ Red
My house and garage- well, Estate Recovery can sort it out, or not. as long as I can push through the tangle...looks like an excellent entry for the I Am Not Perfect contest...
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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My house and garage- well, Estate Recovery can sort it out, or not. as long as I can push through the tangle...looks like an excellent entry for the I Am Not Perfect contest...
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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I feel the same way, let my kids sort through it. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Aussie
Excellent writing prompt entry. So many people are secret hoarders. I liked your merry sense of humour, one should be able to laugh at oneself when one is, er... collector of precious commodities?
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Excellent writing prompt entry. So many people are secret hoarders. I liked your merry sense of humour, one should be able to laugh at oneself when one is, er... collector of precious commodities?
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, yes I am a collector of precious commodities- comic books, beer steins, key chains, and t-shirts. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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We collect egg cups! Had to buy a cabinet to fit :-)
Comment from Heather Knight
Your poem is hilarious. I had a great time reading it. It seems you and I are opposites. I can't stand hoarding...
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Your poem is hilarious. I had a great time reading it. It seems you and I are opposites. I can't stand hoarding...
Thanks so much for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LisaMay
I love it, i love it! Sounds like my place. I HATE minimalism.. show me a home where interests are to the fore (as long as I can get in the front door).
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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I love it, i love it! Sounds like my place. I HATE minimalism.. show me a home where interests are to the fore (as long as I can get in the front door).
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.