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Comment from Insider98
I mean it's true. When you gotta go...you gotta go. Bathrooms are really essential though. Who would say no to them, but the circumstances may not be that great. Good job with the rhymes and the flow! I wish you good luck!
Insider98
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I mean it's true. When you gotta go...you gotta go. Bathrooms are really essential though. Who would say no to them, but the circumstances may not be that great. Good job with the rhymes and the flow! I wish you good luck!
Insider98
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks Insider. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author! I have to say, this post, "When You Gotta Go-You Gotta Go" sure brings back memories!!! (and the not-so-sweet smell of Lysol covering the stench!) I only have one recommendation for you:
Your line with "flexible" is a bit awkward and may work better if you reword it to read more like, "If my living arrangements were flexible"
Your poem is definitely funny and should do well in this contest, good luck!
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Hello Author! I have to say, this post, "When You Gotta Go-You Gotta Go" sure brings back memories!!! (and the not-so-sweet smell of Lysol covering the stench!) I only have one recommendation for you:
Your line with "flexible" is a bit awkward and may work better if you reword it to read more like, "If my living arrangements were flexible"
Your poem is definitely funny and should do well in this contest, good luck!
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Susan I appreciate your suggestion. Was the awkwardness of the line worth a one star ding.
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It's a promise I made to myself this year. Trying to be pickier about the star thing, still working it out.
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(at least it wasn't personal, I just got 2 stars for what someone decided were my political views.) lol, there was no criticism on the actual structure of the work itself. hahaha! Gotta love it!
Comment from Jaye Bennett
I have been there, done that. I am all for modern conveniences. The poet did a well in using the words in the prompt. Using eight disparate words in a poem is quite a challenge, one the poet dispatched with apparent ease. The poet also gave us a look on where some still are today, but definitely back a century. The humor is handled very dexterously. Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I have been there, done that. I am all for modern conveniences. The poet did a well in using the words in the prompt. Using eight disparate words in a poem is quite a challenge, one the poet dispatched with apparent ease. The poet also gave us a look on where some still are today, but definitely back a century. The humor is handled very dexterously. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Jaye for your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
Humanity has embraced vanity, with euphemisms for the rich and cultured.
For the rest of us, it is still: "As Time Goes Bye."
"A turd is still a turd, no matter what the word, we all remain the same, as time goes bye."
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Excellent.
Humanity has embraced vanity, with euphemisms for the rich and cultured.
For the rest of us, it is still: "As Time Goes Bye."
"A turd is still a turd, no matter what the word, we all remain the same, as time goes bye."
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for honoring me with a six star rating. I think you really got the point of my poem. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A clever write about the dunnie and you managed to use all the words very cleverly and I wish you luck with the contest, a unique and fun write, love Dolly x
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A clever write about the dunnie and you managed to use all the words very cleverly and I wish you luck with the contest, a unique and fun write, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you Dolly for your kind words, I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.