The Secret of Happiness!
A 15 Word Poem; Give, but expect nothing in return132 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
If you have expectations you will always be let down. However, if you go in expecting nothing you won't be disappointed. Anything in return is simply a gift. I once heard someone say that if someone asks you for money you should ask yourself will I be mad if they don't pay me back. If the answer is yes then you shouldn't loan them the money. Even if it's a loan, because how many times do people mean to pay someone back. Getting paid back is nice but if you need them to, will miss the money, be mad if they don't pay you back, it's not worth it. You have to go it willing to get nothing back.
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If you have expectations you will always be let down. However, if you go in expecting nothing you won't be disappointed. Anything in return is simply a gift. I once heard someone say that if someone asks you for money you should ask yourself will I be mad if they don't pay me back. If the answer is yes then you shouldn't loan them the money. Even if it's a loan, because how many times do people mean to pay someone back. Getting paid back is nice but if you need them to, will miss the money, be mad if they don't pay you back, it's not worth it. You have to go it willing to get nothing back.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from Kelly Grim
Nicely done! This prompt is so restrictive, 15 words, 25 syllables... AND two required words to boot! I think you did a good job given this, and what a lovely and generous message... that giving to others will make one happy - yes! Good luck in the contest!
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Nicely done! This prompt is so restrictive, 15 words, 25 syllables... AND two required words to boot! I think you did a good job given this, and what a lovely and generous message... that giving to others will make one happy - yes! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from penniless pen
Well written and well said for such a short poem. Good advice and truth throughout. This looks to meet the requirments. Best of luck with this contest entry.
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Well written and well said for such a short poem. Good advice and truth throughout. This looks to meet the requirments. Best of luck with this contest entry.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from Dawn Munro
A word of wisdom in poetic form, this little gem. I DO believe the secret to happiness lies in genuine selflessness. It makes me happy when I know something I have said or done pleases or helps someone else... Good luck in the contest!
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A word of wisdom in poetic form, this little gem. I DO believe the secret to happiness lies in genuine selflessness. It makes me happy when I know something I have said or done pleases or helps someone else... Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, truer words were never spoken - I agree completely. This smoothly accurate write is in full compliance with the prompt and says it all, succinctly and in an excellent presentation, with the image of the rose. Good luck in the contest...
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In my opinion, truer words were never spoken - I agree completely. This smoothly accurate write is in full compliance with the prompt and says it all, succinctly and in an excellent presentation, with the image of the rose. Good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
What a complicated promt and you have done it so very well. I enjoyed this one. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
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What a complicated promt and you have done it so very well. I enjoyed this one. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from mackenzietastan
Good job on this poem! I'm always impressed when someone can follow all the rules of a poetry contest and still say something meaningful. I hope you take your own advice and are happy forever!
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Good job on this poem! I'm always impressed when someone can follow all the rules of a poetry contest and still say something meaningful. I hope you take your own advice and are happy forever!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from bhogg
Nice sentiment, one hard to live by. Small suggestions...Bit of an echo on ever and forever. In the last line, would read better as 'Says the Seer'. Good luck in your contest! Bill
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Nice sentiment, one hard to live by. Small suggestions...Bit of an echo on ever and forever. In the last line, would read better as 'Says the Seer'. Good luck in your contest! Bill
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from jusylee72
when we truly give with nothing expected an amazing reaction in the universe happens. We once again get a surprise somewhere in the universe. It is truly a universally true statement that is lived in your poem.
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when we truly give with nothing expected an amazing reaction in the universe happens. We once again get a surprise somewhere in the universe. It is truly a universally true statement that is lived in your poem.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
Wise, prophetic words here, writer. Love the image. It is so difficult to review shorter writes with so few words, but when their meaning is as thought provoking as this, it makes for an easy sell. This is a solid penning with excellent message...LOVE WHOLLY and BE HAPPY! Nicely done and good luck in the contest with this piece. I love the image also.
Janelle
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Wise, prophetic words here, writer. Love the image. It is so difficult to review shorter writes with so few words, but when their meaning is as thought provoking as this, it makes for an easy sell. This is a solid penning with excellent message...LOVE WHOLLY and BE HAPPY! Nicely done and good luck in the contest with this piece. I love the image also.
Janelle
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
