Twin sisters
Very different lives55 total reviews
Comment from Craigitar
Ha ha! Good surprise at the end--I didn't see that coming. Well written and for the most part, a smooth read. Rhyme is solid. Your little story in a poem pulled me in, kept me interested right through the unexpected finish. Good job and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Ha ha! Good surprise at the end--I didn't see that coming. Well written and for the most part, a smooth read. Rhyme is solid. Your little story in a poem pulled me in, kept me interested right through the unexpected finish. Good job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from Artasylum
I am completely enchanted by this story poem contest entry... I couln't wait to find out when Jane did something, what Joan. That led me to the perfect ending. thanks great entry. yours, diana
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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I am completely enchanted by this story poem contest entry... I couln't wait to find out when Jane did something, what Joan. That led me to the perfect ending. thanks great entry. yours, diana
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thanks Diana for the great review. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Maybe they could reach an agreement and trade places every Wednesday. At the end of the day, they could check the receipts and determine who was best at their job.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Maybe they could reach an agreement and trade places every Wednesday. At the end of the day, they could check the receipts and determine who was best at their job.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Very good idea, Thomas. I will suggest it to them. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
your story/poem shows me of how some folks believe that twins think alike in your story with such good rhyme of how Joan and Jane have opposite opinions what they want to do in their
Life
Gert
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Hello author
your story/poem shows me of how some folks believe that twins think alike in your story with such good rhyme of how Joan and Jane have opposite opinions what they want to do in their
Life
Gert
Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your comments.
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Smiles you are welcome
Gert
Comment from phill doran
Arf! Arf! Arf!
I assume you ran out of space and metre and it was to end "longs for a lay preacher..."?
Very good work in a short space of time. I know the subject isn't for everyone, but just considered on time available to you vs. end result you've yielded, this is a fine effort. Has pace, it is engaging, it is witty and a story in a ripping sea-shanty-esque style.
I wish you well in the contest: thanks for the laugh
cheers
phill
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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Arf! Arf! Arf!
I assume you ran out of space and metre and it was to end "longs for a lay preacher..."?
Very good work in a short space of time. I know the subject isn't for everyone, but just considered on time available to you vs. end result you've yielded, this is a fine effort. Has pace, it is engaging, it is witty and a story in a ripping sea-shanty-esque style.
I wish you well in the contest: thanks for the laugh
cheers
phill
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018
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Thanks a lot for the witty review. Glad you liked it.