Unforgotten
true love83 total reviews
Comment from LaFrance
You wrote such a vivid image with such a small amount of words. Great comparison true love to a movie that gets played over and over, maybe like "Gone with the Wind". I enjoyed the straight speed through the poem.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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You wrote such a vivid image with such a small amount of words. Great comparison true love to a movie that gets played over and over, maybe like "Gone with the Wind". I enjoyed the straight speed through the poem.
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hi LaFrance, thank you so much for a wonderful review...I am so glad you like it...love Linda xxoo
Comment from karenina
I LOVE THIS> It doesn't have to be long, or rhymed, or metered...it has to be impactful, as this is. The image, your poem...it struck me square in the heart and I FELT it through and through. What a clever line :
"memories become a movie
never forgotten
only to be replayed
at a one seated cinema"
Got a six from me my friend.....Karenina
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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I LOVE THIS> It doesn't have to be long, or rhymed, or metered...it has to be impactful, as this is. The image, your poem...it struck me square in the heart and I FELT it through and through. What a clever line :
"memories become a movie
never forgotten
only to be replayed
at a one seated cinema"
Got a six from me my friend.....Karenina
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hi Karenina, smiling big sweet girl...thank you so much for a wonderful review...and all your wonderful stars...so glad you like it...have a wonderful day...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your verse paints a clear and lonely picture.
Nicely written and well said.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Your verse paints a clear and lonely picture.
Nicely written and well said.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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HI Sharon, thank you for a great review sweet girl...I am so gad you like it...and you are so very welcome...love ...Linda xxoo
Comment from kahpot
Wow, with your beautiful words, great artwork and your notes ( true love stays with you a lifetime) you have won me, I only know what I like and sometimes have trouble reviewing and or understanding, but this is excellent to me, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Wow, with your beautiful words, great artwork and your notes ( true love stays with you a lifetime) you have won me, I only know what I like and sometimes have trouble reviewing and or understanding, but this is excellent to me, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hi Kahpot, so good to see you...thank you for a wonderful review...and all your wonderful stars...I am so glad you like my sweet friend...thank you...God Bless....love Linda xxoo
Comment from krys123
Cheers, L. Raven;
-What a beautiful tanka where everything is followed perfectly as I am a tanka freak, I love writing tanka's. In fact I found finally after searching for a good definition of a tanker I found one if three researches in Wikipedia;
Tanka CONSISTS OF FIVE UNITS (often treated as SEPERATE LINES when romanized(ENGLISH WRITEN or translated) usually with a pattern of 5-7-5-7-7 sounds (onji is an inaccurate term for this). The group of the first three, 5-7-5, is called the kami-no-ku ("upper phrase"), and the second, 7-7, is called the shimo-no-ku ("lower phrase").
-I I have seen and read many tankers where the lines do not stand alone. Yours however, all makes sense of dread alone and standing alone.
-On top of that creative visual impact with a pivot line that holds together the first to enlist to lines of the poem.
-I think I found one issue, look below-
true love
never washes away
memories,(comma?) become a movie
never forgotten
only to be replayed
at a one seated cinema
-Thanks for sharing this, Linda, and take care and have a good one my dear friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 31-May-2018
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Cheers, L. Raven;
-What a beautiful tanka where everything is followed perfectly as I am a tanka freak, I love writing tanka's. In fact I found finally after searching for a good definition of a tanker I found one if three researches in Wikipedia;
Tanka CONSISTS OF FIVE UNITS (often treated as SEPERATE LINES when romanized(ENGLISH WRITEN or translated) usually with a pattern of 5-7-5-7-7 sounds (onji is an inaccurate term for this). The group of the first three, 5-7-5, is called the kami-no-ku ("upper phrase"), and the second, 7-7, is called the shimo-no-ku ("lower phrase").
-I I have seen and read many tankers where the lines do not stand alone. Yours however, all makes sense of dread alone and standing alone.
-On top of that creative visual impact with a pivot line that holds together the first to enlist to lines of the poem.
-I think I found one issue, look below-
true love
never washes away
memories,(comma?) become a movie
never forgotten
only to be replayed
at a one seated cinema
-Thanks for sharing this, Linda, and take care and have a good one my dear friend.
Alex
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 31-May-2018
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Hi Alex, thank you for the help my sweet friend...and it is so good to see you...thank you for a wonderful review...and you are so very welcome...you take care as well...have a wonderful evening...love Linda xxoo
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You're very welcome, Linda, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
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you do as well...and have a wonderful evening...love xxoo
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Thank you, Linda, may you have a pleasant and blissful evening.
Alex
Comment from Mame
Terrific 'marriage' of thoughts and picture here. Simple words to express a complex meaning. Yet I wonder if the tape in our mind is that reliable or corroded by time. Well done!
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Terrific 'marriage' of thoughts and picture here. Simple words to express a complex meaning. Yet I wonder if the tape in our mind is that reliable or corroded by time. Well done!
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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I Mame, I think what we do in our past...is remembered in our future...some I never want to forget...some I never want to remember...sigh...thank you for a great review...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Suzie Q
Wow! I really liked this! This is so true. What a great photo to accompany your poem. I loved the idea of " memories to become a movie to be replayed at a one seat cinema" Very well said. Great job!
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Wow! I really liked this! This is so true. What a great photo to accompany your poem. I loved the idea of " memories to become a movie to be replayed at a one seat cinema" Very well said. Great job!
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Hi Suzie, thank you so very much sweet girl for a wonderful review...I am so glad you like it...love Linda xxoo
Comment from kiwijenny
Movies of love replay in your mind...that memory is strong...it grows with shared experiences and right choices made..
Well penned...cinematic
God bless
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Movies of love replay in your mind...that memory is strong...it grows with shared experiences and right choices made..
Well penned...cinematic
God bless
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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HI Jenny, thank you so much sweet girl for a great review...God Bless you as well...love Linda xxoo
Comment from Mastery
Wow! How very impressive this poetry truly is, Linda. You use a king-sized metaphor to describe the way love stays with you. Life is truly strange, isn't it, my friend? :) Good job. :) Bob
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Wow! How very impressive this poetry truly is, Linda. You use a king-sized metaphor to describe the way love stays with you. Life is truly strange, isn't it, my friend? :) Good job. :) Bob
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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HI Bob, yes life is truly strange my sweet friend...and I guess we are lucky to have are memories...some I would want to keep for a life time...but some I wish I could forgot...sigh...thank you for a wonderful review...smiling back at you...love Linda xxoo
Comment from nancy_e_davis
So true Linda. We live in reverie remembering
what was and what might have been. That guy
looks so alone setting there waiting for the
movie to start over. Well done dear. Nancy
reply by the author on 31-May-2018
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So true Linda. We live in reverie remembering
what was and what might have been. That guy
looks so alone setting there waiting for the
movie to start over. Well done dear. Nancy
Comment Written 28-May-2018
reply by the author on 31-May-2018
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Hi Nancy, be it good or bad...true love is never forgotten...sigh...thank you for a wonderful review sweet girl...love Linda xxoo