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Get Well, Brooke!

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Comment from Dean Kuch
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Wow, Sharyn. I sure "fiercely loved" this bright & cheery presentation. I am quite sure that Brooke will too.

Such a wonderfully composed and uplifting sonnet, for the most part, tinged with a just the right amount of melancholy. Time goes by so quickly, it seems. One day, you're young, alive and in love. Then you wake up one sunny morning to find it's all disappeared, seemingly in the blinking of an eye.

Wonderful writing, Sharyn. I'm sure Brooke will absolutely love this!

~Dean

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Yep - sorta sucks is my philosophy Dean - thank you dear! ;)S
reply by Dean Kuch on 31-May-2015
    It was a pleasure, "S". ~Dean :}
Comment from Dawn Munro
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...Sigh...Sharyn, would that dance could once again stir for me, and yet, "I'll fiercely love the sunlight" inspires...

This is a most beautiful sonnet, and will comfort and please our dear Brooke, I'm sure. It's so wise, and so very lyrical.

Thankfully you've posted when I can rate such a masterful poem as it deserves...

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thank you so much for your lovely sixer Dawn! :)S
reply by Dawn Munro on 31-May-2015
    You are most welcome, my friend.
Comment from catch22
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Hi Sharyn, this is a lovely sonnet for Brooke and pays homage to her love of dandelions, sunflowers and faith. I think everyone was taken by surprise and thrown for a loop when her health situation was discovered. I think this outpouring of love and support is just what she and her family need right now.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thanks so much Gail! :)S
Comment from Curly Girly
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You wrote a beautiful poem for Brooke, one I am sure she will enjoy reading. Your words tell about an unpredictable life journey, but there is hope in the mind. We can still see the sunlight and dance in there...

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thanks Nicole! :)S
Comment from Delahay
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This expresses such lovely sentiments and confronts the fact that we all must face the fact that we will all eventually fade away. It seems strange not to see Brooke's poems posted.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Yes, I miss her postings too Dela ... that's what made me ask questions as to her whereabouts. So sad.
    thank you for reading :)Sharyn
reply by Delahay on 31-May-2015
    I only just found out yesterday what happened after reading poems dedicated to her.
Comment from amahra
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I'm really loving on all this attention and focus on Brooke. I didn't know she had taken ill until I began reading all of the Ode and tributes to her. I really love you tender poem and pray that Brooke returns to us soon.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thank you amahra :)Sharyn
Comment from tfawcus
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Though inspired by sadness, this is a most beautiful sonnet. Your use of enjambment is so wonderfully assured. Perfect, in fact. One never knows when that cloud shadow is going to obscure the rainbow for us. The only thing that is sure is that one day it will. Your final couplet sums up a great philosophy! May the brightness keep the three spinners busy weaving the golden threads you supply!

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thank you Tony - and bless you for the lovely six! :)Sharyn
Comment from Deborah Marie
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Lovely sonnet for Brooke's book; wonderful chapter addition. Lovely presentation from artwork to color scheme to progression, rhythm and flow as well as clever wording... Thanks for sharing and keep 'em coming. God luck in the contest you entered, Deb

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thanks so much Deb! :)Sharyn
Comment from rose42benn
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When I read poems such as yours, I smile, for I am reminded that there are true poets out there! I don't mean to sound unkind to others, but I am being truthful in that many are not so talented. I myself, am able at times, to produce moments worth a read, but strive to come to a level such as this. I also know the poet for whom this is written is among the artists most gifted.
rose

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thank you so much Rose - and I know EXACTLY where you're coming from. And thank you, even more then, for your wonderful six! :)Sharyn
Comment from Eternal Muse
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What an incredible entry into the sonnet contest! A paean to our dear friend Brooke, who loved the form so much. Excellent use of iambic meter, great flow and cadence. A lovely picture. Brooke told me she loved putting pictures in her poems. I do too, they liven the rhyme (smile).

It may be a personal thing, but while I compliment you on the use of enjambment, it is a bit overdone when it cuts into the final couplet. Again, it may be just me, and I am only one reviewer.

I think Brooke would enjoy this poem very much when she is well and comes back on the site.

Love, Y.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015


reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Thanks Sally - I do hope she's able to return. Like you, I started reading sonnets and not particularly liking a lot of enjambment, but I guess I've been won over a little. Look on the bright side - at least the last line of the couplet wasn't enjambed, right? he he he ... but yes, a matter of personal taste, I know. :)Sharyn
reply by Eternal Muse on 31-May-2015
    Sharyn, I am Yelena, not Sally (smile). Enjambment is a matter of preference and personal taste; I use very little of it in my sonnets.
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Ohhh I do apologize Yelena - I've always thought of you as "Sally Yeltel" ... go figure where my brains have been! :):):)
reply by Eternal Muse on 31-May-2015
    There is Sally Yocom here - a brilliant poet, one of my favorites.
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
    Oh yes - l'il ol' dyslexic me - I've been talking to both of you all this time thinking you're one and the same! Wow! better get some more sunlight into me!!!!