Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Doppelganger"A collection of short horror fiction
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Comment from emrpoems
Didn't get the music Dean but the story was chilling. Don't know how you survived it. I suppose like those Dracula stories you must perpetuate yours
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Didn't get the music Dean but the story was chilling. Don't know how you survived it. I suppose like those Dracula stories you must perpetuate yours
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Yeah, it helps to get these sorts of stories outta my head and written down somewhere, Erica, that's for sure! I survive only by the grace of God and His goodness, my friend. Otherwise I would have been dead a long, long time ago.
Much obliged for your review. :) ~Dean
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Dean. I enjoyed this one on the doppelganger. Surely a scary thing--which one is real? I've heard it said that if you meet your doppelganger face to face, both will annihilate. (You may want to write about that sometime.) Best, Marilyn.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Hi Dean. I enjoyed this one on the doppelganger. Surely a scary thing--which one is real? I've heard it said that if you meet your doppelganger face to face, both will annihilate. (You may want to write about that sometime.) Best, Marilyn.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Marilyn, I probably will write about it sometime, LOL. That is what the myth claims, however. That's why Edgar's young daughter crawled beneath her bed, I suspect. She may have...sensed that.
Much obliged for your review, my friend. :) ~Dean
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A very enjoyable read.
Comment from Linda Engel
Oh ! for the love of God, Dean . That literally sent chills down my body. And I am at work and did not turn on the music. (will do when I get home). Nothing scarier than thinking something under the bed or in the attic.
I bet a psychiatrist would have a field day with you. My childhood dreams would come true several weeks or months after I dreamt them.
My husband and I had an experience once with a shift changer. THAT was scary.
Too many weird things floating around this world.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Oh ! for the love of God, Dean . That literally sent chills down my body. And I am at work and did not turn on the music. (will do when I get home). Nothing scarier than thinking something under the bed or in the attic.
I bet a psychiatrist would have a field day with you. My childhood dreams would come true several weeks or months after I dreamt them.
My husband and I had an experience once with a shift changer. THAT was scary.
Too many weird things floating around this world.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Yes, there certainly are, Linda. But you can't make a lot of people believe that, not until they've seen something they can't explain away themselves. I've seen more weird things that I care to mention. Who knows why some do and and others don't?
So, you could relate having had a similar experience. That's very scary, my friend. Good thing you both came through your encounter unscathed.
Thanks a million for your stellar rating and helpful comments. I'm really happy to know that you're enjoying the series. Now, if you'll kindly excuse me, I have more writing to do...heh-heh. ~Dean :)
Comment from royowen
A lot of children are afraid of these things, both of our girls. both slept with my wife and I in their junior years, and when they finally left our bed, the slept with one another in the same bed for years, even though they had their own beds. But they grew up nice and normal, but at the time I wanted them to be secure, and they are, this well written and imaginative story, and your notes reminded of this. Well done, Dean, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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A lot of children are afraid of these things, both of our girls. both slept with my wife and I in their junior years, and when they finally left our bed, the slept with one another in the same bed for years, even though they had their own beds. But they grew up nice and normal, but at the time I wanted them to be secure, and they are, this well written and imaginative story, and your notes reminded of this. Well done, Dean, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Roy, I appreciate you reading it. I wasn't so much as terrified as a kid of what was under my bed as I was what was in my closet after the lights went out. That's where Mr. Grimm stayed, remember him? The Dark, Macabre Mr. Grimm? Yeah, that thing horrified me, whatever the heck it was! It's hard to even think about it without getting cold chills. For me, that's saying a lot, heh-heh!
Thanks again, Roy. I hope you have a fantastic weekend, my friend. :} ~Dean
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You too Dean, well done, Roy.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Great short, Dean. As always, well written and chilling. I like the way you left us to wonder exactly which child was the real deal.
I also liked the intro music, even though it was a bit of a surprise, which is the greatest intro to terror stories, I suppose as the scariest I've gotten was a talking goldfish.
I thought the story after the short story was just as intriguing as the story itself. Somehow I'm not the least bit surprised that you had multiple nightmares as a child...
Rhonda
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Great short, Dean. As always, well written and chilling. I like the way you left us to wonder exactly which child was the real deal.
I also liked the intro music, even though it was a bit of a surprise, which is the greatest intro to terror stories, I suppose as the scariest I've gotten was a talking goldfish.
I thought the story after the short story was just as intriguing as the story itself. Somehow I'm not the least bit surprised that you had multiple nightmares as a child...
Rhonda
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Hah, yeah, not too many are surprised where that's concerned, Rhonda. I still have nightmares from time to time, but I use them to my advantage and write poetry about them. Hey, it's helped me get a publishing deal, so at least I'm puttin' 'em to good use, right?
Thanks a bunch for your feedback on the story -- what worked for you. That's the thing about flash fiction, to do it right I feel it's best not to make everything in defined shades of black & white. Sometimes it's best to let the readers decide what happened.
Thanks again, Rhonda, and have a great weekend. Much obliged. :)
~Dean
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Just so you know, I think "Dean" is another alter ego for Stephen King.
You have a great weekend, too,
Rhonda
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He has talked to me on occasion, believe it or not. That's one dude I would definitely like to hang out with for just a day, to pick his brain a little -- if he didn't have me laughing the whole time that is. He's a very funny guy! ;) ~Dean
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I am not surprised in the least that you have met. My sister is a huge fan of his. Me, I'm just a fraidy cat who goes for Kool Aid fiction. Now some of my books lean towards the dark side, with vampires, werewolves, mummies, etc, but I stop short of scaring myself too much.
Oh, and I never would have guessed Stephen King for a humorous fellow, although I think, "In a Cat's Eye" was a bit tongue-in-cheek. I think you have a bit of that side to you as well.
Rhonda
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Thanks, Rhonda, I appreciate that. Just Google a Stephen King interview sometime -- it doesn't matter which one -- and you'll see what I mean. He could be in stand up comedy of it weren't for writing novels all the time, LOL. ~Dean
Comment from MoonMuse
Love it, Dean! I usually stick to reading poetry, but I couldn't pass up the chance to read a little flash fiction of yours. I'm now grinning ear to ear. Thanks for the pick-me-up this morning! Cheers...
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Love it, Dean! I usually stick to reading poetry, but I couldn't pass up the chance to read a little flash fiction of yours. I'm now grinning ear to ear. Thanks for the pick-me-up this morning! Cheers...
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Hey, that's what we're all here for, MoonMuse, to entertain, enlighten and inspire. Or, in my case, to scare the livin' daylights out of readers (hopefully!), and get their hearts goin', heh-heh. That's what it's all about, making people feel something....anything. Not easy to do these days, but it ain't impossible either.
Thanks again, my friend. Much obliged for the great positive feedback. :) ~Dean
Comment from Dustybones
I like the backward N as your signature. I got a big kick out of the ending which to me is funny backwards too, with the question of whose's who?
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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I like the backward N as your signature. I got a big kick out of the ending which to me is funny backwards too, with the question of whose's who?
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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I've always said that you were a very perceptive reader/guy, Dustybones. And it is comments and observations like the one you made here about the backward letter "N" that makes me think so about you. I am a bit backward, and so is the dark humor in this story you've just reviewed.
Thanks or the stellar rating, DB. But even more than that, thanks for a great assessment of my tiny terror tale. I really appreciate that, my friend. ;}
~Dean
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh absolutely the best twist I was not expecting.
Absolutely , absolutely.
I love these little bits and pieces you are writing and the twists you insist making. Just to claim our souls. LOL
You are addicting
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Oh absolutely the best twist I was not expecting.
Absolutely , absolutely.
I love these little bits and pieces you are writing and the twists you insist making. Just to claim our souls. LOL
You are addicting
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Hey, but it's a good addiction, right? Heh-heh...
Thanks a bunch for supporting this series, Barb, I'm very grateful. I just hope I can keep coming up with ideas that will resonate (and strike fear) with the readers.
Much obliged, my friend, and have a fantastic weekend. :}
~Dean
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Dean, that is some scary bloody stuff mate. The intro, the story and the notes all make up one very, very scary package. Well done mate as always, I respect your work buddy. Cheers Fez
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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G'day Dean, that is some scary bloody stuff mate. The intro, the story and the notes all make up one very, very scary package. Well done mate as always, I respect your work buddy. Cheers Fez
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Fez, that's very kind of you to say, my friend. I respect what you do here on FanStory as well. You keep up the great work with your epic poems, and I'll keep tryin' to scare the living daylights outta folks, heh-heh.
Thanks again, mate! ~Dean :)
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Deano.
You switch to present tense in 5th line, whereas the rest is written in past tense.
Maybe, with respect, convert it ALL to present tense, as I think that usually makes a story more 'here and now' and therefore more dramatic.
GREAT turn at the end, from 'cute and normal' to horrifying.
Maybe the kids were twins. ;-). Just kidding. However, on 2nd thoughts, in case anyone else is as cynical as me, maybe 1st line;
'Edgar hugged/hugs his only daughter...'
Cheers, Ray
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Hi, Deano.
You switch to present tense in 5th line, whereas the rest is written in past tense.
Maybe, with respect, convert it ALL to present tense, as I think that usually makes a story more 'here and now' and therefore more dramatic.
GREAT turn at the end, from 'cute and normal' to horrifying.
Maybe the kids were twins. ;-). Just kidding. However, on 2nd thoughts, in case anyone else is as cynical as me, maybe 1st line;
'Edgar hugged/hugs his only daughter...'
Cheers, Ray
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Ray, you got it, buddy. I'll get on that right away. I really appreciate your taking a look-see at this, as well as your suggestions.
Much obliged, mate!
~Cheers...DeanO ;}
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No probs, Deano - this is MY length of prose. :-) Ray.
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Heh-heh, you're not alone, Rayman. I think there are many here who would tend to agree with you. Depraved Stories for the Attention Deprived...how's that for a title, LOL?
All the changes you've suggested have been made. Thanks again! :)
~DeanO
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Great title, and I'd sure buy that one, Dean...if I REMEMBERED to. ;-)
I'm VERY flattered you thought my suggestions helpful.
Cheers, Ray