Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Great Escaper Caper"A collection of my poems
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Comment from vapros
Mercy! What a rhyming marathon you have undertaken for this writing prompt. This is a precise and entertaining construction - without a glitch, as far as I can see. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Mercy! What a rhyming marathon you have undertaken for this writing prompt. This is a precise and entertaining construction - without a glitch, as far as I can see. Well done.
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you!
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Thank you!
Comment from RYME4U
This is very funny all the way through. I love the way you have rhymed this poem and the rhythm and beat are great (the style is a little like E.A.Poe's poetry)I love all the rigamarole you went through to secure the property. These playfull little creatures really "got your goat"
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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This is very funny all the way through. I love the way you have rhymed this poem and the rhythm and beat are great (the style is a little like E.A.Poe's poetry)I love all the rigamarole you went through to secure the property. These playfull little creatures really "got your goat"
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you - you are the second reviewer to point out a similarity to Poe - I had to go and check 'The Raven' to make sure. Mine has a similar start to each stanza but is different after that - it's a compliment anyway.
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Thank you - you are the second reviewer to point out a similarity to Poe - I had to go and check 'The Raven' to make sure. Mine has a similar start to each stanza but is different after that - it's a compliment anyway.
Comment from lorijean
A great and funny poem all that work and yet they will always get to whatever they want to eat, love or hate em'..I loved this, thank you for sharing.....
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A great and funny poem all that work and yet they will always get to whatever they want to eat, love or hate em'..I loved this, thank you for sharing.....
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you, LJ.
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Thank you, LJ.
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, poet, you are no mystery man to me. First I love the title, and the references to the WWII escape attempts.
As always you employ unexpected and playful rhymes.
Love the line about their 'beards together, plotting'.
Best of luck, mate.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Ah, poet, you are no mystery man to me. First I love the title, and the references to the WWII escape attempts.
As always you employ unexpected and playful rhymes.
Love the line about their 'beards together, plotting'.
Best of luck, mate.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks, Lee.
I wonder what gave my identity away. Was it the fabled resemblance to Brad Pitt?
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Thanks, Lee.
I wonder what gave my identity away. Was it the fabled resemblance to Brad Pitt?
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Don't you mean ZaSu Pitts?
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Thanks for sharing this humorous poem. One can sense the emotion behind the words which adds a lot of meaning to it. Well done and thanks once again! R
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks for sharing this humorous poem. One can sense the emotion behind the words which adds a lot of meaning to it. Well done and thanks once again! R
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you, Raoul.
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Thank you, Raoul.
Comment from visionary1234
I can tell your stuff a MILE away and now I have a face (sort of) to put with the name - it was the Queen Elizabeth plus your fabulous rhythm that gave you away - I always think of Henry Kendall when I read you - but you're much, MUCH funnier kiwi! this one deserves a six, just because! :)))Sharyn
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I can tell your stuff a MILE away and now I have a face (sort of) to put with the name - it was the Queen Elizabeth plus your fabulous rhythm that gave you away - I always think of Henry Kendall when I read you - but you're much, MUCH funnier kiwi! this one deserves a six, just because! :)))Sharyn
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you - did I mention Queen Elizabeth roses once before???
To my shame I have had to go and google Henry Kendall - interesting life and possibly ahead of his time with some of the pieces I read - and yes, I found the rhyme/meter interesting.
The photo was a bit of a joke set up for my former colleagues at my Cairns school - I am wearing my Education Queensland T-Shirt (Every Day Counts!) - goes well with the general dagginess of the rest of my attire and I have found it handy to wear around the 'farm'.
you know who.
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All Aussies & Kiwis know Queen Elizabeth roses dear, so that narrowed the field considerably. SHAME on you, having to look up Henry Kendall! He's a classic user of dactylic meter! (especially as you went to school in Cairns - double shame - Aussie classic). Cute piccie! Fun write! :)
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Thank you - did I mention Queen Elizabeth roses once before???
To my shame I have had to go and google Henry Kendall - interesting life and possibly ahead of his time with some of the pieces I read - and yes, I found the rhyme/meter interesting.
The photo was a bit of a joke set up for my former colleagues at my Cairns school - I am wearing my Education Queensland T-Shirt (Every Day Counts!) - goes well with the general dagginess of the rest of my attire and I have found it handy to wear around the 'farm'.
you know who.
Comment from Rondeno
Better hold impromptu roll-calls,
search through lockers, drawers and hold-alls,
check the cistern and the space beneath the sink:
if they've held back mouldy 'taters,
you can bet it's not for "laters",
but for printing German passports with false ink!
I have to say, your poem is witty, ingenious and hysterically funny. The use of rhyme and rhythm is masterly, and the mischievous personalities of the two inmates really come across.
This is the most enjoyment I've EVER had on Fanstory. Thank you!
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Better hold impromptu roll-calls,
search through lockers, drawers and hold-alls,
check the cistern and the space beneath the sink:
if they've held back mouldy 'taters,
you can bet it's not for "laters",
but for printing German passports with false ink!
I have to say, your poem is witty, ingenious and hysterically funny. The use of rhyme and rhythm is masterly, and the mischievous personalities of the two inmates really come across.
This is the most enjoyment I've EVER had on Fanstory. Thank you!
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Ah, the rhyming sounds familiar,
Or it could be even sillier.
I'm so glad you let me know just what you think.
Seems these goats are not just zeros
They're the reborn Hogan's Heroes
And as for me I'll just play Colonel Klink.
Glad you didn't enter this contest!~
Steve
Comment from muezza56
a really funny poem, well written and inspired, especially using the colditz type theme, as these cunning devils plan yet another jaunt, have they starting making fake ID's yet?
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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a really funny poem, well written and inspired, especially using the colditz type theme, as these cunning devils plan yet another jaunt, have they starting making fake ID's yet?
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Nope, but I can copy the clever rhyming retort of another reviewer...
Better hold impromptu roll-calls,
search through lockers, drawers and hold-alls,
check the cistern and the space beneath the sink:
if they've held back mouldy 'taters,
you can bet it's not for "laters",
but for printing German passports with false ink!
Thanks for the review
Steve
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your poem is inspiring others, always(well nearly) a good sign
Comment from GWinterwin
Enjoyed this poem very much. Have owned goats before and know just what they can do. Your good word flow and rhyming tell a funny but true story of what goats can and will do to get what they want. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Enjoyed this poem very much. Have owned goats before and know just what they can do. Your good word flow and rhyming tell a funny but true story of what goats can and will do to get what they want. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Leineco
This is so entertainingly funny! A giggle turned into a snort once or twice I think :-))) BUT they are so cute....how could you write about not liking them? Oh! I see, it's not them - it's their escapades. Seriously though....nice poem. I am amazed you could keep up the rhyme scheme so long (AND entertainingly). Good luck in the contest :-) P.S. S2 line 6 I think didn't aught a should be hadn't aught a
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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This is so entertainingly funny! A giggle turned into a snort once or twice I think :-))) BUT they are so cute....how could you write about not liking them? Oh! I see, it's not them - it's their escapades. Seriously though....nice poem. I am amazed you could keep up the rhyme scheme so long (AND entertainingly). Good luck in the contest :-) P.S. S2 line 6 I think didn't aught a should be hadn't aught a
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Oh, yes, they're very cute! Like cute little time-bombs that can explode your garden...
Thanks for the review.
Steve
