All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Butterfly Blue"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from vkmack
Oohh yes, I do. This is wonderful. The work is softly questioning and tender while actually asking that we do our homework and think about the difference--what is it that we know or just wish for? The opening makes us hold our breaths as the visual imagery has us feel the bottom drop out. And then it's onward from there and into the void. That third stanza scans beautifully and has such great rhythm and rhyme. This is just wonderful work throughout. Always look forward to reading your poetry. Fantastic.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Oohh yes, I do. This is wonderful. The work is softly questioning and tender while actually asking that we do our homework and think about the difference--what is it that we know or just wish for? The opening makes us hold our breaths as the visual imagery has us feel the bottom drop out. And then it's onward from there and into the void. That third stanza scans beautifully and has such great rhythm and rhyme. This is just wonderful work throughout. Always look forward to reading your poetry. Fantastic.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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bless you vk - so glad you enjoyed this one! :)))Sharyn
Comment from reconciled
Hey Good lookin' ...-smile- the question asked...since forever. I don't know what your beliefs are...I choose to believe in heaven...because...the whole of the story...is the most beautiful....faith....I have ever heard.....and I want it to be true... Alright wonderful read love you Michael
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Hey Good lookin' ...-smile- the question asked...since forever. I don't know what your beliefs are...I choose to believe in heaven...because...the whole of the story...is the most beautiful....faith....I have ever heard.....and I want it to be true... Alright wonderful read love you Michael
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I want it to be true too Michael - who doesn't?? :))))S
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right...-smile- I believe it is.
Comment from mauial
Of all the creatures on this planet we are the only ones that can ask what's next? And that makes man a spiritual being, one in need of answers. Now if that is instilled in us, by a Creator, surely He provides the answer. We just need to look in the right place for the answer. Read the Bible and let it interpret itself, and not man, for the answer.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Of all the creatures on this planet we are the only ones that can ask what's next? And that makes man a spiritual being, one in need of answers. Now if that is instilled in us, by a Creator, surely He provides the answer. We just need to look in the right place for the answer. Read the Bible and let it interpret itself, and not man, for the answer.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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bless you Al! :)S
Comment from Patti R.
Dammit!
Trust, the five-letter-word ...:(
This is plainly and strongly spoken, great read!
Conversational, light but heavy...over coffee.
'one butterfly breath' is an entire poem all by itself, Sharyn.
These gems seem to just trip off your tongue and I admire you immensely.
Have you done it?? Have you been on an actual roller coaster? : That IS the moment of no turning back, sitting for a shred of a second at the tippy top, and down is coming up fast!
Loved this.
Patti
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Dammit!
Trust, the five-letter-word ...:(
This is plainly and strongly spoken, great read!
Conversational, light but heavy...over coffee.
'one butterfly breath' is an entire poem all by itself, Sharyn.
These gems seem to just trip off your tongue and I admire you immensely.
Have you done it?? Have you been on an actual roller coaster? : That IS the moment of no turning back, sitting for a shred of a second at the tippy top, and down is coming up fast!
Loved this.
Patti
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I've bee to Disneyland - Splash Mountain is the one that you ride up, up, up and then suddenly d - o - w - n vertically in your "log" canoe into the water. I just look at people on them and think "ok - it must be okay - no one has died here today." Glad you liked this one Patti! :)S
Comment from J.R Dickinson
There are thousands of things we may never, ever know, but one thing is for sure-this is purely glorious! The topic is just stunning to bring into play and compare it to a butterfly? Excellent choice.
I'm left in wonderment pondering over the questions you've established and it feels somewhat child-like, because it makes you realize just how little you know and when you really stop to think about it, it makes you even smaller. Terrific job to provoke all this.
VISIONARY is a perfect name for you alright.
Sincerely,
J.R
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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There are thousands of things we may never, ever know, but one thing is for sure-this is purely glorious! The topic is just stunning to bring into play and compare it to a butterfly? Excellent choice.
I'm left in wonderment pondering over the questions you've established and it feels somewhat child-like, because it makes you realize just how little you know and when you really stop to think about it, it makes you even smaller. Terrific job to provoke all this.
VISIONARY is a perfect name for you alright.
Sincerely,
J.R
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much JR! :)Sharyn
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI, Sharyn
I enjoyed your free-verse poem this evening. Your poem
prompts the reader to ponder the question. And at the end
of the day, it is all a matter of faith. Otherwise, I think it might
drive one mad.
My I offer one SPAG suggestion:
one butterfly['s] breath
Thanks for sharing,
Ray
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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HI, Sharyn
I enjoyed your free-verse poem this evening. Your poem
prompts the reader to ponder the question. And at the end
of the day, it is all a matter of faith. Otherwise, I think it might
drive one mad.
My I offer one SPAG suggestion:
one butterfly['s] breath
Thanks for sharing,
Ray
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx Ray! actually intentionally written that way, to describe the breath, rather than used as a possessive ... perhaps butterfly-breath so it's clearer?? :)Sharyn
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Ah, my dear- questions that have been asked since time began. What now? This is a beautifully written and thought-provoking poem. Love the presentation. Just gorgeous. I think you might enjoy my 4th chapter in my book 'The Authors of The Greatest Story'...hummm? My characters have just asked your question. Love it, Betty
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Ah, my dear- questions that have been asked since time began. What now? This is a beautifully written and thought-provoking poem. Love the presentation. Just gorgeous. I think you might enjoy my 4th chapter in my book 'The Authors of The Greatest Story'...hummm? My characters have just asked your question. Love it, Betty
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx Betty! I'll go chase your book! :)S
Comment from Opal H.
You bet it comes to trust. Faith is trust. And it is not wondering too much and moving on with life, living each moment.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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You bet it comes to trust. Faith is trust. And it is not wondering too much and moving on with life, living each moment.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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you've got it right Opal! :)S
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Life stand and living grows and comes to an end like than of vanishing into ephemeral butterfly blue, fantastic metaphoric use with orderly allegorical flash, I liked the conviction, sound imagery and vivid visual. 37/034
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Life stand and living grows and comes to an end like than of vanishing into ephemeral butterfly blue, fantastic metaphoric use with orderly allegorical flash, I liked the conviction, sound imagery and vivid visual. 37/034
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx Al! :)S
Comment from Kiki12
I think it is easier to not know when there is some type of trust, but it still won't give us any answers:0)
Love your butterfly metaphors-one butterfly breath apart, ephemeral butterfly blue.
It really expresses the fleeting moments of life.
you have great alliteration/assonance/consonance throughout-
stop/as/spinning/space
vexing/question, etc.etc.
And I just have to mention the internal rhyme going on here- that is always a challenge to me, but you use it fluidly creating an almost lyrical quality.
Not to mention, these are some great questions that are universal to all of humanity...did I miss anything? I could probably go on all night LOL
Nicely penned-
Kiki
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I think it is easier to not know when there is some type of trust, but it still won't give us any answers:0)
Love your butterfly metaphors-one butterfly breath apart, ephemeral butterfly blue.
It really expresses the fleeting moments of life.
you have great alliteration/assonance/consonance throughout-
stop/as/spinning/space
vexing/question, etc.etc.
And I just have to mention the internal rhyme going on here- that is always a challenge to me, but you use it fluidly creating an almost lyrical quality.
Not to mention, these are some great questions that are universal to all of humanity...did I miss anything? I could probably go on all night LOL
Nicely penned-
Kiki
Comment Written 03-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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thx so much kiki! :)S