All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Back and Forth"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from GWHARGIS
DAMN IT. I so very much wanted to give this a six. It was such a commentary. At fifty one, I am starting to see visions of my parents and then going over the slow decline to when they passed away. I hold on to the fact that they would be proud of me, and then think about my children and how they will never know those wonderful people. Your poem brought me a bitter sweet comfort.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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DAMN IT. I so very much wanted to give this a six. It was such a commentary. At fifty one, I am starting to see visions of my parents and then going over the slow decline to when they passed away. I hold on to the fact that they would be proud of me, and then think about my children and how they will never know those wonderful people. Your poem brought me a bitter sweet comfort.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Well DAMMIT, thank you for your virtual '6', no worries and I'm really glad you thought this one was worth it because it's a special write for me. :)S
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sharyn, WOW!!! What a wonderful write. This is so very well expressed. Love the feel of you rolling on the river. Sometimes it's wonderful to go back to old memoies. Where could be a better place. Very welll written Sharyn. Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Hi Sharyn, WOW!!! What a wonderful write. This is so very well expressed. Love the feel of you rolling on the river. Sometimes it's wonderful to go back to old memoies. Where could be a better place. Very welll written Sharyn. Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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thx so much Linda! :)S
Comment from wordsareus
I love this poem. I wish I could have given you six stars because I don't have any left. Aside from the lovely memory of rowing with your father my favorite part was the last line
I wish my son could see him
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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I love this poem. I wish I could have given you six stars because I don't have any left. Aside from the lovely memory of rowing with your father my favorite part was the last line
I wish my son could see him
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Bless you my dear! :)S
Comment from kiwisteveh
Sharyn, there' lots to like about this touching piece. It is true that particular actions can revive memories of thos we associate with them - as here where the very action of rowing brings such vivid recall of your father.
Touch of the tearjerkers in your final line - wouldn't we all like to keep that connection going across the generations, impossible though it may be.
Not so much of your dazzling wordplay here but the touch is delicate.
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Sharyn, there' lots to like about this touching piece. It is true that particular actions can revive memories of thos we associate with them - as here where the very action of rowing brings such vivid recall of your father.
Touch of the tearjerkers in your final line - wouldn't we all like to keep that connection going across the generations, impossible though it may be.
Not so much of your dazzling wordplay here but the touch is delicate.
Steve
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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thx for seeing the 'delicate' touch here Steve ... and thank you for your lovely six on this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from MizKat
Sharyn - This is another nice poem. I take it that your father was a picture in your mind. Anyway that's what it sounds like to me. Kat
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Sharyn - This is another nice poem. I take it that your father was a picture in your mind. Anyway that's what it sounds like to me. Kat
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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absolutely! thx so much Kat! :)S
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Sharyn
This poetry paints a beautiful image. The way that the
words are arranged on the page gives the reader the
sense of a rowing motion. The attached photo is a
befitting accent the helps the reader to visualize the
message. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Well Done ~ Sharyn
This poetry paints a beautiful image. The way that the
words are arranged on the page gives the reader the
sense of a rowing motion. The attached photo is a
befitting accent the helps the reader to visualize the
message. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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and again thank you Ron! :)S
Comment from Gungalo
What a nostalgic write this is and for you to wish your son could see him to is just perfect. Your presentation mimics the back and for movement of your write. Makes the reader feel they are there.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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What a nostalgic write this is and for you to wish your son could see him to is just perfect. Your presentation mimics the back and for movement of your write. Makes the reader feel they are there.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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And that is the intention, Gungalo - thx so much girrrrlie! :))S
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Thanks sweetie.
Comment from Peter Mansson
Sharyn, this is brilliant. You effortlessly transitioned from your work-out in the gym to reminiscing of your childhood and your dear departed father,then back to the present with a generational shift. The rowing theme and the rhythm you created with it just worked a treat. This thing won't let me give you a six, but I was enchanted, cheers Peter
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Sharyn, this is brilliant. You effortlessly transitioned from your work-out in the gym to reminiscing of your childhood and your dear departed father,then back to the present with a generational shift. The rowing theme and the rhythm you created with it just worked a treat. This thing won't let me give you a six, but I was enchanted, cheers Peter
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Bless you Peter - thanks so much for reading & enjoying this one! :)Sharyn
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer tells this story clearly from beginning to end. The writer does a good job of leading the reader where the reader needs to go. The photo selected is good for the words in this piece. Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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The writer tells this story clearly from beginning to end. The writer does a good job of leading the reader where the reader needs to go. The photo selected is good for the words in this piece. Good job.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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thx so much RR! :)Sharyn
Comment from MelissaBickel
There is nothing like those vivid memories to reflect upon when were doing something that another person enjoyed too. A shared moment in time perhaps..
I enjoyed reading this and the touching ending. Sometimes we can't share with our kids what we would have loved for them to experience too.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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There is nothing like those vivid memories to reflect upon when were doing something that another person enjoyed too. A shared moment in time perhaps..
I enjoyed reading this and the touching ending. Sometimes we can't share with our kids what we would have loved for them to experience too.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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indeed Melissa ... thank you so much my dear! :)Sharyn