And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Mercy's Rain"A collection of Spirtual poems
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Comment from TAB_that's me
Very nice flow and good use of the ABC poem. The rhymes are good without muddying up the poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Very nice flow and good use of the ABC poem. The rhymes are good without muddying up the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thanks for the wonderful review and the best wishes. Carolyn
Comment from beccabootie123
a nice write and way of stating to put people out of their misery and take them home to you, the picture and color palate add alot here, and bring a calmness to the piece, I am sure was the intent. well done
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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a nice write and way of stating to put people out of their misery and take them home to you, the picture and color palate add alot here, and bring a calmness to the piece, I am sure was the intent. well done
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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What a nice review. Thank you so much. Carolyn
Comment from Righteous Riter
The talent and creativity is put on display with this style of poetry. This piece rhymes well. This piece has a smooth flow. The harmony is where it needs to be as my attention is captured by the photo and held by the words. Nice work.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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The talent and creativity is put on display with this style of poetry. This piece rhymes well. This piece has a smooth flow. The harmony is where it needs to be as my attention is captured by the photo and held by the words. Nice work.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you Righteous Riter (I love your pen name) I appreciate the insightful review. Carolyn
Comment from Gungalo
Wonderful girl. I think you have misspelled Mercy's because there can't be a Mercies. You would have to put in an apostrophe somewhere for the possessive. It's a good write.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Wonderful girl. I think you have misspelled Mercy's because there can't be a Mercies. You would have to put in an apostrophe somewhere for the possessive. It's a good write.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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I will fix right now, thanks and have a great day. Carolyn
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Okay girl.
Comment from ChrisGarrett
Pretty solid flow over all, I'd re look at the spacing for the first paragraph, currently 'Live no more ' is it's own paragraph, and without other single lined paragraphs it feels really out of place.
Good job bringing it full circle back to the title, and very good job on showing WHAT they are praying to stop (he "Monstrous greed and evil lurking")
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Pretty solid flow over all, I'd re look at the spacing for the first paragraph, currently 'Live no more ' is it's own paragraph, and without other single lined paragraphs it feels really out of place.
Good job bringing it full circle back to the title, and very good job on showing WHAT they are praying to stop (he "Monstrous greed and evil lurking")
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the critique and the wonderful comments. Carolyn
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend so much felling expressed using this form you have done well good luck in the contest regards Jill
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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend so much felling expressed using this form you have done well good luck in the contest regards Jill
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2013
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Thanks Jill, I always appreciate your comments. Happy day to both of you, Carolyn