All Those Puzzling Pieces
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Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi visionary123
It is perhaps as well that I always remind myself that "Revenge is mine says the Lord" - otherwise my temper would have ensured the population would be several idiots short of its quota, including myself by now.
Loved the poem, it sums it up very well, those darl emotions can overwhelm us and lead to 'revenge' which is all to often regretted at leisure some time later, if not immediately.
Patrick
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Hi visionary123
It is perhaps as well that I always remind myself that "Revenge is mine says the Lord" - otherwise my temper would have ensured the population would be several idiots short of its quota, including myself by now.
Loved the poem, it sums it up very well, those darl emotions can overwhelm us and lead to 'revenge' which is all to often regretted at leisure some time later, if not immediately.
Patrick
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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absolutely! remember the old saying: repent at leisure!
Comment from Eric Corsten
I guess everything you touch turns to gold, visionary. The way you wrote this out was perfect, it gave it such a great affect and this was one of my favorites.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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I guess everything you touch turns to gold, visionary. The way you wrote this out was perfect, it gave it such a great affect and this was one of my favorites.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Bless you, Eric! I'm so glad you "got" this write - not exactly Valentine's material but hey, you know by know I'm a drama queen, right? I really appreciated your lovely six!
Blessings,
Sharyn
Comment from fastdigits
A beautifully constructed poem on
a range of emotions that dances
down the screen in black and white
to artistically bring out the full
flame of the cauldron of the flames
of your feelings.
Well done
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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A beautifully constructed poem on
a range of emotions that dances
down the screen in black and white
to artistically bring out the full
flame of the cauldron of the flames
of your feelings.
Well done
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much, fd! :)Sharyn
Comment from words
You have captured the emotions of anger and rage well here.
If I were that "king" I would think long and hard before I crept into your bed. LOLbest think ahead
my king
outside the limits
of your black and white squares
take care tonight
my king
when you creep into my bed
queen takes all
kings fall
when they least
expect it
I can see a Loraina Bobbet scenario happening. LOL
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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You have captured the emotions of anger and rage well here.
If I were that "king" I would think long and hard before I crept into your bed. LOLbest think ahead
my king
outside the limits
of your black and white squares
take care tonight
my king
when you creep into my bed
queen takes all
kings fall
when they least
expect it
I can see a Loraina Bobbet scenario happening. LOL
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)S
Comment from ZBaron
And you explored our darkest emotions well in this. The poem really flows well, with the alliteration and rhyming. It sort of has a rolling feel to it, like a tongue unraveling with sharp words revealed line to line and stanza to stanza. I very much enjoyed this and good luck with this entry.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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And you explored our darkest emotions well in this. The poem really flows well, with the alliteration and rhyming. It sort of has a rolling feel to it, like a tongue unraveling with sharp words revealed line to line and stanza to stanza. I very much enjoyed this and good luck with this entry.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thx so much ZB - didn't win, but good to explore the dark on occasions, yes? :)Sharyn
Comment from LadyCosgrove
I could not have put it better! A round of applause!
Who of us can say we have never felt this way at some point - we all have some of this in there somewhere.
Brilliantly portrayed - Now, take a bow :o)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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I could not have put it better! A round of applause!
Who of us can say we have never felt this way at some point - we all have some of this in there somewhere.
Brilliantly portrayed - Now, take a bow :o)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much Lady C.! :))
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Ohh, how dark- how dramatic coming from our light-hearted Visionary1234. Wouldn't want to be THAT king who awaits in your bed. Bad, bad King!! Well done, my friend. Best of luck in the contest. LOVE the presentation of this. Betty
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Ohh, how dark- how dramatic coming from our light-hearted Visionary1234. Wouldn't want to be THAT king who awaits in your bed. Bad, bad King!! Well done, my friend. Best of luck in the contest. LOVE the presentation of this. Betty
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thx so much, Betty! :)Sharyn
Comment from God's Writer
A very interesting. I agree one hundred percent. You have to sleep sometimes. I am glad it is just a story line. Thank you for this awesome write.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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A very interesting. I agree one hundred percent. You have to sleep sometimes. I am glad it is just a story line. Thank you for this awesome write.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thx so much Erick! :)Sharyn
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You're welcome.
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
an excellent write, Sharyn. very well
considered, penned and presented,
as always. it flowed with ease, as i've
too come to expect of your musings.
thank you for sharing, and good luck!
(if i'm not too late!)
warmly, xx, eph.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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an excellent write, Sharyn. very well
considered, penned and presented,
as always. it flowed with ease, as i've
too come to expect of your musings.
thank you for sharing, and good luck!
(if i'm not too late!)
warmly, xx, eph.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thx eph! Didn't win with this one, but it's not exactly a sweet Valentine's write! :)))
Comment from misscookie
Good luck
Youy express those emotions very well I like how you made me think at frist you were talking about a chess game, than real life.
My Mama always said don't go to bed mad because the Queens eyes may be close but not her mind or painful heart
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Good luck
Youy express those emotions very well I like how you made me think at frist you were talking about a chess game, than real life.
My Mama always said don't go to bed mad because the Queens eyes may be close but not her mind or painful heart
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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you've got that right misscookie!
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Until next time.