I'm a Chameleon
no colors of my own ... the worst kind of sad83 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
At first reading I thought this was a bout a reflection in the mirror. The second reading I decided it was someone who was co dependent. I don't know if either is right but it was definitely an interesting poem. Loved the picture. Nice job.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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At first reading I thought this was a bout a reflection in the mirror. The second reading I decided it was someone who was co dependent. I don't know if either is right but it was definitely an interesting poem. Loved the picture. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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I think you could go with either, or both, of those interpretations, my dear ... how often have you looked in the mirror and thought "wow, who is that stranger behind those eyes?" And yes, because of our fear of being "separate" or "alone", how often do we sacrifice our true selves - what an enormous cost ... life is strange, isn't it? Bless you for your thoughtful reviewing!
Comment from hifein
Well done. It's not everyone who is in touch with this kind of duality. You wrote a strong poem addressing a painful subject. This brings the writer much closer to possession of a single face in future days. Many emotions are implied in addition to sadness. i.e. fear and anxiety, An interesting and creative approach in your presentation. You selection of photo and background color added to your entry.
Good work.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Well done. It's not everyone who is in touch with this kind of duality. You wrote a strong poem addressing a painful subject. This brings the writer much closer to possession of a single face in future days. Many emotions are implied in addition to sadness. i.e. fear and anxiety, An interesting and creative approach in your presentation. You selection of photo and background color added to your entry.
Good work.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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thx so much hifein - and yes, thank for you getting that duality - not many people have ... life is not all black & white, is it? Blessings for your careful reading!
Comment from Deorre Leonard
I am a chameleon living within the cellophane of your dark and light, no colors of my own until I die... I blend in perfectly...this is a well written piece. Thanks for sharing. Deorre:)
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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I am a chameleon living within the cellophane of your dark and light, no colors of my own until I die... I blend in perfectly...this is a well written piece. Thanks for sharing. Deorre:)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Deorre!
Comment from expressions9
This is an excellent poem revealing the sad state of a person feeling insecure and inferior, trying to imitate their friend, not confident of their own person or worth. The layout is wonderfully clear and the photo an excellent accompaniment.
Well done and best wishes in the contest! (It's a 6 really, but have run out)
:)Christine
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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This is an excellent poem revealing the sad state of a person feeling insecure and inferior, trying to imitate their friend, not confident of their own person or worth. The layout is wonderfully clear and the photo an excellent accompaniment.
Well done and best wishes in the contest! (It's a 6 really, but have run out)
:)Christine
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Christine - you've got it!
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You're welcome :)
Comment from TOMORAL
This is something I have felt myself being many times in my life. To only see yourself through others eyes makes us chameleons, and that it something we all do from time to time. I love this. Thank you
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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This is something I have felt myself being many times in my life. To only see yourself through others eyes makes us chameleons, and that it something we all do from time to time. I love this. Thank you
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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We do indeed, Tomoral ... ok sometimes, but if all the time, we tend to lose our "selves", yes? and THAT is as sad as it gets! :) thx for your thoughtful reading ...
Comment from DALLAS01
I can really relate to this as my past can testify to that fact. I used to always have to study and imitate others, to hide the fact that I was a flat-liner. But that was then and this is now and that has all changed thanks to recovery and therapy.
If you get a chance to stop by I think there is an old poem in my portfolio called (I Am) that deals with this issue.
This poem was concise and to the point. A hard hitting write.
LOve the visual produced by the word cellophane. I used it once, very effective.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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I can really relate to this as my past can testify to that fact. I used to always have to study and imitate others, to hide the fact that I was a flat-liner. But that was then and this is now and that has all changed thanks to recovery and therapy.
If you get a chance to stop by I think there is an old poem in my portfolio called (I Am) that deals with this issue.
This poem was concise and to the point. A hard hitting write.
LOve the visual produced by the word cellophane. I used it once, very effective.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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Thank heaven that experience USUALLY brings some wisdom and strength with it, don't you think? But if we get stuck in that place ... hmmm ... not something we want to contemplate for long, is it? I'll pop by and check your piece out - thx so much my dear!
Comment from Gungalo
but at least it's a color
that will truly belong
only
to
me
This uses the chameleon well and make a lot of sense that it will only show true colors when you die.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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but at least it's a color
that will truly belong
only
to
me
This uses the chameleon well and make a lot of sense that it will only show true colors when you die.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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yep ... definitely a "sad" scenario, Gungalo, hmm? Fortunately we get older and usually a little wiser!
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Comment from Zinnia48
I loved the way you expressed what I would call "codependence". Some of your phrases are quite powerful and origiinal:
living within the cellophane boundaries
no colors of my own
until I die ...
but at least it's a color
that will truly belong
only
to
me
My only suggestion would be around your questions: Are you happy,.....These weaken an otherwise poem (in my opinion). I'm wondering if you could integrate those thoughts as statements somehow.
thanks for the courage behind this poem. Caroline
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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I loved the way you expressed what I would call "codependence". Some of your phrases are quite powerful and origiinal:
living within the cellophane boundaries
no colors of my own
until I die ...
but at least it's a color
that will truly belong
only
to
me
My only suggestion would be around your questions: Are you happy,.....These weaken an otherwise poem (in my opinion). I'm wondering if you could integrate those thoughts as statements somehow.
thanks for the courage behind this poem. Caroline
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2012
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thx so much Zinnia ... I wanted to add a human touch to the piece with the direct questions ... but I'll certainly go and have another peek - thx so much for your suggestions, and, as always, your detailed and careful readings - always appreciated!
Comment from sunnilicious
The chameleon and muse have plenty in common. Well, this is a playful poem. Good artwork. Fun read. Well thought out. Nicely written. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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The chameleon and muse have plenty in common. Well, this is a playful poem. Good artwork. Fun read. Well thought out. Nicely written. Excellent work.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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thx sunni!
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Happy Holidays
Comment from mystery poet
The chameleon metaphor works perfect to express
one's ability to absorb feelings of those close
to them, soul mate or companion. Or could be a
person whose disguises their own feelings to hide
with in anothers. Nice art and crafted poem.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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The chameleon metaphor works perfect to express
one's ability to absorb feelings of those close
to them, soul mate or companion. Or could be a
person whose disguises their own feelings to hide
with in anothers. Nice art and crafted poem.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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thx so much mystery poet!
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A pleasure!
