All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Beach Sleep"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from thecoe
great descriptive words that play well together. i liked the presentation and the cadence and the interaction between the words. good job
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great descriptive words that play well together. i liked the presentation and the cadence and the interaction between the words. good job
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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thx the coe!
Comment from Cornetist
This poem can take one down many diverse avenues of thought...Deep love...Contemplation...or just simply a pleasant vacation respite! R4eader's choice.
Well written. Your style of formatting is interesting...you create different points of view with your "pillar of words."
Intriguing!
Cornetist
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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This poem can take one down many diverse avenues of thought...Deep love...Contemplation...or just simply a pleasant vacation respite! R4eader's choice.
Well written. Your style of formatting is interesting...you create different points of view with your "pillar of words."
Intriguing!
Cornetist
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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all your choice, absolutely ... thank you so much Cornetist! (are you really??) :) Sharyn
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ultra-relaxing poem is very well-written. Alliteration is effectively used.
For some reason, I'm thinking of those old commercials--"Calgon, take me away"! In this case--Sea breeze, take me away! LOL
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Your ultra-relaxing poem is very well-written. Alliteration is effectively used.
For some reason, I'm thinking of those old commercials--"Calgon, take me away"! In this case--Sea breeze, take me away! LOL
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
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thx Janice ...
Comment from squid152
Beautiful poem about the beaches of Hawaii. I loved the doppled kisses, ocean rollers smoothly sinking into sweet sea sleep.-Gary
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Beautiful poem about the beaches of Hawaii. I loved the doppled kisses, ocean rollers smoothly sinking into sweet sea sleep.-Gary
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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thx Gary ... plenty of room on the beach, my friend ... come on over! :) Sharyn
Comment from wordsareus
I always enjoy reading your poems. You have such a creative way of expressing yourself. I love the format that you often use. It is so eye-catching.
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I always enjoy reading your poems. You have such a creative way of expressing yourself. I love the format that you often use. It is so eye-catching.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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thx words ... glad you enjoyed! :) Sharyn
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Sharyn, We are so blessed to live in Hawaii. I love your poem describing our paradise so well. I'm sure all the people on the east coast would love to be here. Thank you for sharing and reminding me to be grateful.. Have a blessed day. Aloha, Ginger
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Aloha Sharyn, We are so blessed to live in Hawaii. I love your poem describing our paradise so well. I'm sure all the people on the east coast would love to be here. Thank you for sharing and reminding me to be grateful.. Have a blessed day. Aloha, Ginger
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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Aren't we though ... nice just to stop sometimes and realize where we are, isn't it? :) Sharyn
Comment from Joannforsberg
This morning in this cold and rain, this poem sounds like Heaven.
Living in Michigan, we are called the "Mitten State" as we are surrounded by water on most sides. Today the waves in Lake Huron, to our East, the waves are 32 ft high.... The winds from Sandy.
Blessings, Jo
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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This morning in this cold and rain, this poem sounds like Heaven.
Living in Michigan, we are called the "Mitten State" as we are surrounded by water on most sides. Today the waves in Lake Huron, to our East, the waves are 32 ft high.... The winds from Sandy.
Blessings, Jo
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
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wow! there's plenty of room on my beach, Jo ... come on over! :) Sharyn
Comment from PedrosA5LeggedDonkey
That's a relaxing visual. Great calmer for a beach bum like me. I go alot, but more to be the pack mule for 2 little girls determined to pick up every broken shell they find. Even with my role being the labor, I get lost in the sound of the waves and staring out into the water.
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That's a relaxing visual. Great calmer for a beach bum like me. I go alot, but more to be the pack mule for 2 little girls determined to pick up every broken shell they find. Even with my role being the labor, I get lost in the sound of the waves and staring out into the water.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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plenty of room at the beach here donks ... but every so often I have to REMEMBER to sit still and enjoy it!! :) Sharyn
Comment from Earl of Oxford
The picture looks like paradice, Sharyn, and if you spent your afternoon there, you're a lucky lady.
I really like 'warm honey sun'. Also the alliterated 'wind' line - sure beats rotten eggs. LOL.
Top 's' alliteration throughout and relaxing and dreamy images conveyed.
Nice one.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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The picture looks like paradice, Sharyn, and if you spent your afternoon there, you're a lucky lady.
I really like 'warm honey sun'. Also the alliterated 'wind' line - sure beats rotten eggs. LOL.
Top 's' alliteration throughout and relaxing and dreamy images conveyed.
Nice one.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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thx Ray ... you'll have to visit one day ... :)
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I doubt my Pensioners Bus Pass (had it for 2 years and only used it 3 times - I HATE buses) will get me that far, Sharyn. Maybe I could pay for the flight with 'Fanstory Lucky Leprachaun Certificates'? LOL xx
Comment from juliedickson55
Hmmm, at the beach? Napping in the warm sun?
Letting soft breezes waft over you as the sun caressed your skin?
Love the "soft scented salty" line you used here.
The smell of the salt water, beach shorelines is always so refreshing and appealing.
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Hmmm, at the beach? Napping in the warm sun?
Letting soft breezes waft over you as the sun caressed your skin?
Love the "soft scented salty" line you used here.
The smell of the salt water, beach shorelines is always so refreshing and appealing.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2012
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indeed it is, Julie - just have to remember to stop for long enough to realize it sometimes! :) Sharyn