All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "We'll Take Two!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Aaron James
Hi the poem meets the form requirement well and it certainly carries an appropriate sentiment for summers end. Yes, why not head for the sun when at home it disappears.
I wasn't too keen on the line containing "adieu" because I didn't immediately catch the rhyme to "two". I thought the pronunciation was ad-yur. I did check it out and it seems it is appropriate after all. Still it remains that it made me stumble and it may make others also.
Other than that small issue it was a strong poem which I very much enjoyed reading. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hi the poem meets the form requirement well and it certainly carries an appropriate sentiment for summers end. Yes, why not head for the sun when at home it disappears.
I wasn't too keen on the line containing "adieu" because I didn't immediately catch the rhyme to "two". I thought the pronunciation was ad-yur. I did check it out and it seems it is appropriate after all. Still it remains that it made me stumble and it may make others also.
Other than that small issue it was a strong poem which I very much enjoyed reading. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Aaron! no, "adieu" is always pronounced "ad-you" - I'd originally put in something about "I do" but thought it too corny!
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Yep! I stand corrected. French was never my strongest subject lol. Anyway I am taking the advice and hitting Jamaica at the end of the month. We went to Oz in March but hey why not take two? ;)
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my philosophy exactly!
Comment from Inky Cat
A very nice sentiment! Yes, why not ... double the sun. I like the fun, relaxed 'we'll take two'- it's gives a lightness to the poem. 'Tell winter we're not done' is also really nice.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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A very nice sentiment! Yes, why not ... double the sun. I like the fun, relaxed 'we'll take two'- it's gives a lightness to the poem. 'Tell winter we're not done' is also really nice.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Inky!
Comment from tallahasseesmiles
Oh gosh can relate to not wanting the summers to diminish, it is my most favorite time of year and always be. Your poem flowed so well, I was in the beach in my mind. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Oh gosh can relate to not wanting the summers to diminish, it is my most favorite time of year and always be. Your poem flowed so well, I was in the beach in my mind. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx t!
Comment from misscookie
The artywork kis lovely
A place like thjat fits your poem perfectly
your words can invited me to to saty longer. you had my attention all the way.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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The artywork kis lovely
A place like thjat fits your poem perfectly
your words can invited me to to saty longer. you had my attention all the way.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Miss Cookie!
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My pleasure.
Comment from gifted$1
When I lived in Minnesota, this is exactly how I felt. I didn't want to let summer go as we all knew that fall would be short-lived..if even at all..and then the winds and cold would begin to blow. It's like the world would shut down in the winter. Now, in a warmer climate, I can hang onto summer a little longer. Great write! :)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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When I lived in Minnesota, this is exactly how I felt. I didn't want to let summer go as we all knew that fall would be short-lived..if even at all..and then the winds and cold would begin to blow. It's like the world would shut down in the winter. Now, in a warmer climate, I can hang onto summer a little longer. Great write! :)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx gifted!
Comment from Poetic Friend
After reading your poem, I never want summer to end (although autumn is my favorite season). Your poem creatively expresses the reasons we love summer.
The rhyme and meter are flawless.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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After reading your poem, I never want summer to end (although autumn is my favorite season). Your poem creatively expresses the reasons we love summer.
The rhyme and meter are flawless.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx so much my dear - glad you're a summer lover too (and I'm afraid I don't have autumn where I am ... but I do love to visit it occasionally in other places!)
Comment from bonnie composanto
Two summers works for me. I lived in New York all my life, the snow and ice, don't want it. I moved to North Carolina 4 years ago, it stays summer weather into the fall season. Nice poem and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Two summers works for me. I lived in New York all my life, the snow and ice, don't want it. I moved to North Carolina 4 years ago, it stays summer weather into the fall season. Nice poem and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx bonnie!
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you are welcome
Comment from Glasstruth
What a wonderful goodbye to summer. Love the line you repeat, "One Summer's gone, so we'll take two" Sounds good to me. Wish we could do that. Your rhyming, meter is all right on track. Has a great sound to it. Superb! Les
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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What a wonderful goodbye to summer. Love the line you repeat, "One Summer's gone, so we'll take two" Sounds good to me. Wish we could do that. Your rhyming, meter is all right on track. Has a great sound to it. Superb! Les
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Les!
Comment from J. Dark
I absolutely loved this and think is is extremely worthy of six stars! A pure delight - wish you well for the contest.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I absolutely loved this and think is is extremely worthy of six stars! A pure delight - wish you well for the contest.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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and another thank you my dear!! :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job wriiting this quatern poem about wanting more summer, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in this contest...
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job wriiting this quatern poem about wanting more summer, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in this contest...
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx sweets! always a pleasure to hear from you!