All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Pull Up a Blue Chair"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Bobbi22
This is a very strong, effective, well-versed poem. Starting with all the problems of the world and deciding to build a wall to keep all that out. And then the better solution - a wall of flowers. Excellent use of metaphors in this very well written poem.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This is a very strong, effective, well-versed poem. Starting with all the problems of the world and deciding to build a wall to keep all that out. And then the better solution - a wall of flowers. Excellent use of metaphors in this very well written poem.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx so much RP!
Comment from Doc Holiday
Wow! Your poem speaks too true about the doom and disaster we don't wnat to think about. Especially when our walls are built yet and the zombies at are the door! Yikes! Praise the Lord and pass the ammunition!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Wow! Your poem speaks too true about the doom and disaster we don't wnat to think about. Especially when our walls are built yet and the zombies at are the door! Yikes! Praise the Lord and pass the ammunition!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Doc - haven't heard that phrase for years! You must have seen "Oh What a Lovely War?"
Comment from ennahanid
You slam and rant so magnificently well and with an honest, in your face, no punches pulled attitude...I always figure it is about time for a revolution, but I like the butterflies and bees and flowers. Thank you so much - I salute you on this - Dinah
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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You slam and rant so magnificently well and with an honest, in your face, no punches pulled attitude...I always figure it is about time for a revolution, but I like the butterflies and bees and flowers. Thank you so much - I salute you on this - Dinah
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Dinah! I was glad to get to the butterflies myself!
Comment from TammyGail
I love it.... this is a style you should play
around with more girlie
it flows just as it should
and steams off the tongue
thanks for sharing and best of luck
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I love it.... this is a style you should play
around with more girlie
it flows just as it should
and steams off the tongue
thanks for sharing and best of luck
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx Tammy - I knew you'd like this one! and a special thanks for the magic '6'!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am not American, I'm English, but your words could easily be of our so called government! The terrible thing is, we have no other party that is any better!! I loved reading this, and you are so right, it is better read rap style. This a really well written poem, and an absolute must to read! xsx
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I am not American, I'm English, but your words could easily be of our so called government! The terrible thing is, we have no other party that is any better!! I loved reading this, and you are so right, it is better read rap style. This a really well written poem, and an absolute must to read! xsx
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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unfortunately I think they describe all governments at the moment! thx Sandy!
Comment from Jendowoz
Love this poem, visionary. You have put a lot of thought into this one and it rings true, the message of blame and responsibility and how people need to own their actions. Well written piece.
Regards, Jen
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Love this poem, visionary. You have put a lot of thought into this one and it rings true, the message of blame and responsibility and how people need to own their actions. Well written piece.
Regards, Jen
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx so much Jen! :) Sharyn
Comment from Taurean Monkey
A rant and a half, political, at that! I couldn't perform slam poetry, but the words were powerful and full of disdain. I like the symbolic blue chair - representing the political party's seat in the election. I have to say I was glad to reach the turn in your final stanza, with flowers, butterflies and bees :-). Good luck in the competition. TM
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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A rant and a half, political, at that! I couldn't perform slam poetry, but the words were powerful and full of disdain. I like the symbolic blue chair - representing the political party's seat in the election. I have to say I was glad to reach the turn in your final stanza, with flowers, butterflies and bees :-). Good luck in the competition. TM
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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hey thanks Tricia - I was glad to get to the flowers myself! a special thx for your magic '6' - made my morning! :) S
Comment from marilyo
What an interesting piece. I like the format with which you constructed your poem. It helped bring strength to the areas you wanted to emphasize and focus on. Indeed, it is wise to turn to nature and enjoy its special blessings!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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What an interesting piece. I like the format with which you constructed your poem. It helped bring strength to the areas you wanted to emphasize and focus on. Indeed, it is wise to turn to nature and enjoy its special blessings!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx marilyo - I feel the same way about nature, believe me!
Comment from rushingwater
Loved way this read and the author notes helped a bit in setting the mood. The internal rhymes ruled and the rhythm rapped out well. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Loved way this read and the author notes helped a bit in setting the mood. The internal rhymes ruled and the rhythm rapped out well. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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thx so muc rw!
Comment from Dustybones
Very well done. I love the rappper's rhythm all too much. I think you have sometime recordable here. REALLY DO THINK YOU DO.
Big Corporations in bed with dead weight ALL TO TRUE, they control. That is why big issues ike health and eating poison sold at the store is not a important as the race card and gay marriage. Obsufication is an old game and the mass of brains out there are willing lemmings. LOL...I like this review....BTW. Cya Doll.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Very well done. I love the rappper's rhythm all too much. I think you have sometime recordable here. REALLY DO THINK YOU DO.
Big Corporations in bed with dead weight ALL TO TRUE, they control. That is why big issues ike health and eating poison sold at the store is not a important as the race card and gay marriage. Obsufication is an old game and the mass of brains out there are willing lemmings. LOL...I like this review....BTW. Cya Doll.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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hey DB - thx!you got it! :)