Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Grampus Saves the World"A collection of my poems
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Comment from fairy77
I don't know what it was but it didn't hold my attention.It was too long.The subject maybe.It almost like a children's book.I like the rhyme it was real good.You don't need to use such big words.Sorry Just my opinion.beth
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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I don't know what it was but it didn't hold my attention.It was too long.The subject maybe.It almost like a children's book.I like the rhyme it was real good.You don't need to use such big words.Sorry Just my opinion.beth
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the review - sorry it didn't catch you...
Comment from TammyGail
Oh that is so cute I loved this poem and your picture is a perfect fit.... This is my fav part in your poem "Now the pride of the cetaceans
Leads the great United Nations,
A million minions at his beck and call.
'THE WORLD HAS HALVED EMISSIONS!'
Scream the latest news editions,
And 'GRAMPUS IS THE ONE WHO SAVED US ALL!'"
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Oh that is so cute I loved this poem and your picture is a perfect fit.... This is my fav part in your poem "Now the pride of the cetaceans
Leads the great United Nations,
A million minions at his beck and call.
'THE WORLD HAS HALVED EMISSIONS!'
Scream the latest news editions,
And 'GRAMPUS IS THE ONE WHO SAVED US ALL!'"
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review. Glad you enjoyed my greeny whale...
Comment from WRITER1
This is a fun piece. I guess every animal must have some sort of opinion of his counterparts. I enjoyed this little jaunt through the ocean.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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This is a fun piece. I guess every animal must have some sort of opinion of his counterparts. I enjoyed this little jaunt through the ocean.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review. Glad you enjoyed my greeny whale...
Comment from Des Beirne
I do like this wonderfully funny poem with a very serious undertone.
Nothig to complain about, just a very clever and funny read.
A great message too.
Good luck in the contest.
Des
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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I do like this wonderfully funny poem with a very serious undertone.
Nothig to complain about, just a very clever and funny read.
A great message too.
Good luck in the contest.
Des
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thanks, Des
Glad you rnjoyed my greeny whale...
Comment from Debasish Datta
Top order creation. Very poetic, full of humour, apt for the age, contemporary. The rhyme and imagery are pure fun. An aspiring Leacock or Caroll. This genre suits the poet eminently. Not all established poets can write good humour poetry. Wish the poet more success.
Debasish
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Top order creation. Very poetic, full of humour, apt for the age, contemporary. The rhyme and imagery are pure fun. An aspiring Leacock or Caroll. This genre suits the poet eminently. Not all established poets can write good humour poetry. Wish the poet more success.
Debasish
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from chita
Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your poem-this poem is funny but it contains some truth as far as the earth--I like where you write(Now the climate's getting warmer) a true and powerful statement that you wrote here--a well penned write-great job.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your poem-this poem is funny but it contains some truth as far as the earth--I like where you write(Now the climate's getting warmer) a true and powerful statement that you wrote here--a well penned write-great job.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thanks for your kind words!
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent, with quite an important message to it. Your rhythm and rhyme sccheme are great. Images are very well described. A Whale of a good job!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Excellent, with quite an important message to it. Your rhythm and rhyme sccheme are great. Images are very well described. A Whale of a good job!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review. Glad you enjoyed my greeny whale...
Comment from l.raven
And here we stand.Great poem Face it the mammals in the sea can only improve on what we have done to the world and our waters.Love the picture and the poem. Has a good flow when reading.good job
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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And here we stand.Great poem Face it the mammals in the sea can only improve on what we have done to the world and our waters.Love the picture and the poem. Has a good flow when reading.good job
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
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Thank you for the kind words!
Comment from tomprato
Very fanciful, very witty, very sweet.
I find man is no animal, he is only a beast.
I just want to know how Grampus 'saved the world'.
Of that we have no explanation, not even a word.
Except a slogan to 'cut emissions by half'.
If we are saved by slogans, then let us all laugh.
Grampus reminds me of the great Twitter whale -
The story of that cetacean is another tall tale.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Very fanciful, very witty, very sweet.
I find man is no animal, he is only a beast.
I just want to know how Grampus 'saved the world'.
Of that we have no explanation, not even a word.
Except a slogan to 'cut emissions by half'.
If we are saved by slogans, then let us all laugh.
Grampus reminds me of the great Twitter whale -
The story of that cetacean is another tall tale.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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I know that Grampus saved us but I don't know how he did it.
I think he gained the world's top spot and then said I will rid it
Of polluters and emitters and other evil-doers
Like kiddy-pervs and rapists and wide-mouth-open chewers.
I'll only tell you that the world enjoyed his spell as Top Cetacean;
And I'm afraid the rest is down to your imagination!
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Well, you made me sob and weep, or cry and wail,
'Cos you never said a word about the great Twitter whale.
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That's because I have no clue
What you are referring to
I know a whale called Migaloo
And Moby Dick is well-known too
'Beached As' Whale's on Tube of You
But Twitter Whale I'll have to Goo
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OK I googled - I am such a pop culture slowby!
I did find a nice youtube of Hitler getting a fail-whale!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the destruction by the human animal, i enjoyed reading this and i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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this is very well written, mystery writer, a great job writing this poem about the destruction by the human animal, i enjoyed reading this and i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your review. Glad you rnjoyed my greeny whale...