Pet Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Leo Time"...musings on the pets I've had
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Comment from smerryman3
Nice poem but not my favorite. However, I think it was the structure more than the writing that I founf unappealing. I did like how the cat wished the dog had never been born. Very true to life. You could name the dog George Bailey.
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reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Nice poem but not my favorite. However, I think it was the structure more than the writing that I founf unappealing. I did like how the cat wished the dog had never been born. Very true to life. You could name the dog George Bailey.
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Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for the review of this poem about Leo. I revived this in order to honor Leo's memory. He has been gone from my life for about five years now, but never gone from my heart. I think we all come across a piece of writing that just doesn't do it for us,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
What an interresting form and one that still tells the story but in an entirely different way. The piece is perfectly done according to the notes and of course you had me with Leo...i love cats
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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What an interresting form and one that still tells the story but in an entirely different way. The piece is perfectly done according to the notes and of course you had me with Leo...i love cats
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Hi Barb; thank you so much for the lovely review of this poem about Leo. I revived this in order to honor Leo's memory. He has been gone from my life for about five years now, but never gone from my heart,
~patty~
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They never are gone
Comment from Teri7
This is a very sweet poem about Leo's time. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I love the words you used describing him. Great job. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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This is a very sweet poem about Leo's time. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I love the words you used describing him. Great job. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Hi Teri; thank you for dropping by to read this little poem about a wonderful cat. He has been gone for almost five years, and I have so many wonderful memories of him.
~patty~
Comment from Thal1959
Another interesting form, Patty. You certainly are open-minded about trying new forms. The poem almost sounds like sibling rivalry. I have a feeling "dog" might feel he could do without "Leo," too!
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Another interesting form, Patty. You certainly are open-minded about trying new forms. The poem almost sounds like sibling rivalry. I have a feeling "dog" might feel he could do without "Leo," too!
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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LOL!! Thank you so much for reading. Yes - I love trying new forms, and it keeps me challenged. The years I shared with Leo and Harley in the house were very interesting. Leo never did trust him.
~patty~
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Sooooo, Harley is a dog! I just reviewed your other Leo poem and guessed Harley was another cat!
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LOL! I just replied to your other review. Thank you for reviewing and putting up with the 'names.'
~p~
Comment from Anio
Yes, 'animal business' portrayed in a lovely form. I like the 'diminished Hexaverse' to convey the message: which I relate to so much. Animals DO talk to us and to each other. You just have to be a lover of them and listen and watch them interact with each other and you. There is nothing like looking into your pet's eyes when he/she is loving or hating or feeling whatever about you. You have obviously experienced all this and captured it in your work. Thanks. I would share this poem with animal lover friends.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Yes, 'animal business' portrayed in a lovely form. I like the 'diminished Hexaverse' to convey the message: which I relate to so much. Animals DO talk to us and to each other. You just have to be a lover of them and listen and watch them interact with each other and you. There is nothing like looking into your pet's eyes when he/she is loving or hating or feeling whatever about you. You have obviously experienced all this and captured it in your work. Thanks. I would share this poem with animal lover friends.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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thank you so much for your very thoughtful review. Yes, I love to use the relationships I have with my animals to portray their emotions in my work,
~patty~
Comment from pbomar1115
Ha-Ha. Leo is patient. Cats are so independence from what I've noticed. They go and come, out in the wild, as they please. They don't let others get close unless they trust you. Leo trusts you but I think he is selfish as well.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Ha-Ha. Leo is patient. Cats are so independence from what I've noticed. They go and come, out in the wild, as they please. They don't let others get close unless they trust you. Leo trusts you but I think he is selfish as well.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Leo was a good boy. He has been gone since 2012, and I miss his beautiful face. Thank you for reading and commenting,
~patty~
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I'm sorry to hear that, Patty.
~Phillip~
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
How many types of poetry do you know? Wow, I l never heard of a hexaverse. Your pets must be spoiled :) it sounds like you really care about them. Good job.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Hello my friend
How many types of poetry do you know? Wow, I l never heard of a hexaverse. Your pets must be spoiled :) it sounds like you really care about them. Good job.
Gypsy
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Hey Gypsy; I simply 'collect' them from other writers. When they post the requirements of a form in their author's notes, I cut and paste to this multi-page document I have called 'Poetry forms.' I then consult shadowpoetry.com to see if it is a known form - usually not, and then when I'm bored, I follow the directions.
I love the challenging ones best,
~patty~
yes, my pets are spoiled - but currently, I only have Howie and Bernie to treat to whatever they want
Comment from lyenochka
This is a very interesting format. It works well to describe a waiting process as one gets more and more impatient the syllables decrease and anticipation increases and finalizes in monosyllabic lines. Fun!
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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This is a very interesting format. It works well to describe a waiting process as one gets more and more impatient the syllables decrease and anticipation increases and finalizes in monosyllabic lines. Fun!
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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thank you so much for your lovely review of this fun to write piece. I loved using this poetic form and you have picked up on the impatience factor - great!
~patty~
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Leo Time" is an extremely well written piece. It's descriptive passages are excellent.
It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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"Leo Time" is an extremely well written piece. It's descriptive passages are excellent.
It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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thank you so much for this thorough and thoughtful review of this work. This poem was a great poetic form to work with,
~patty~
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~patty, you're more than welcome.
Best wishes, the Duchess
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~patty~ it was a truly entertaining piece to review. I look forward to reading your next post.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from WalkerMan
This pleasant story-in-a-poem of Leo's patient wait for his turn works well as a diminished hexaverse. Yes, it is quite plausible that Leo resents the time given to the dog, but knows his own time will come. Nicely done, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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This pleasant story-in-a-poem of Leo's patient wait for his turn works well as a diminished hexaverse. Yes, it is quite plausible that Leo resents the time given to the dog, but knows his own time will come. Nicely done, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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thank you so much for this warm and thorough review of the poem. I loved using this type of poetry to tell the tale of Leo. It was a fun write,
~patty~
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You are welcome, Patty. I enjoyed reading it too. -- Mike