Flowery Lullaby
Quatrains using flower names80 total reviews
Comment from Phil Kitom
The first thing I found myself doing subconsciously was to start singing this to the tune of Hush little baby don't say a word, mamma's goner buy you a Mockingbird. And it works brilliantly. Well done on this lovely poem from a loving Grandmother.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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The first thing I found myself doing subconsciously was to start singing this to the tune of Hush little baby don't say a word, mamma's goner buy you a Mockingbird. And it works brilliantly. Well done on this lovely poem from a loving Grandmother.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you - I'm not a grandmother yet, but sure look forward to that day :-) Brooke
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Oops so sorry Brooke, but it sound so endearing and you have a delight to come dear friend.
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nothing to be sorry about - I'm old enough to be a granny at 58, just have not had the pleasure yet :-)
Comment from Dave M
Brooke,
This is a terrific poem, and without any problems that I could see. I'd give it a six-star, but Fanstory won't let me do that for a while. You have excellent sense of rhythm and rhyme, the poem is just about the right length, and the picture you borrowed from Fan Art Review is adorable.
I've never heard of these things, at least as names for flowers.
Dave
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Brooke,
This is a terrific poem, and without any problems that I could see. I'd give it a six-star, but Fanstory won't let me do that for a while. You have excellent sense of rhythm and rhyme, the poem is just about the right length, and the picture you borrowed from Fan Art Review is adorable.
I've never heard of these things, at least as names for flowers.
Dave
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Dave - I truly appreciate your lovely comments and your generous impulses :-) Brooke
Comment from ylime
That was cute! I loved how I could read it to the tune of "Hush little baby, don't say a word". I hope that was on purpose :)
Awesome work!
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That was cute! I loved how I could read it to the tune of "Hush little baby, don't say a word". I hope that was on purpose :)
Awesome work!
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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I didn't have that exact lullaby in mind, but I was trying to make it sound like one, and they do all have that similar feel to them :-) Thank you, Emily. Brooke
Comment from mermaids
This is a creative idea, using the flower names in the poem. Gives one food for thought, maybe other parts of nature could be used in the same way. I have a baby grand-
nephew so this is a nice poem to remind me of him.
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This is a creative idea, using the flower names in the poem. Gives one food for thought, maybe other parts of nature could be used in the same way. I have a baby grand-
nephew so this is a nice poem to remind me of him.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you. :-) I bet you're right that there are other parts of nature that could be used the same way :-) Brooke
Comment from sara-beth
I think this needs to be published for children, it is absolutely sweet, and just think of the illustrations that could be done for it! Great job, I really like this idea with the flowers....so pretty.
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I think this needs to be published for children, it is absolutely sweet, and just think of the illustrations that could be done for it! Great job, I really like this idea with the flowers....so pretty.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Sara-beth, thank you!! I would love to publish so much of my poetry with illustrations. I so wish I could paint. Brooke
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You seem like the type who could......with such vivid imagination, I think you should try it! Or if not, just think of yourself as one who paints with words :)
Comment from fictionwriter
Oh you always get me with the flower poems, but it's unfair sticking the flowers with the babies. I love both of them so much. another wonderful poem. Well done.
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Oh you always get me with the flower poems, but it's unfair sticking the flowers with the babies. I love both of them so much. another wonderful poem. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Joy, hey, I'm no fool - if I could have thrown in a rainbow, a kitten and a waving flag without being too obvious, I might have added them too! LOL Thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino
I'm not really qualified, Brooke, as I never heard of any of this BUNCH (pun intended).
Clever rhyme and very cute content. I guess you haven't applied meter here and I confess to finding it a jumpy read. It's your faut for spoiling me with your meter. ;-)
Sure well above the average post I read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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I'm not really qualified, Brooke, as I never heard of any of this BUNCH (pun intended).
Clever rhyme and very cute content. I guess you haven't applied meter here and I confess to finding it a jumpy read. It's your faut for spoiling me with your meter. ;-)
Sure well above the average post I read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Ray, Thanks for your kind comments. Brooke :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Brooke ,
How sett and how colorful is you poem with the names of flowers I have never heard of before
A real pleasure to read
I hope you put all your flower poems in a poem book
Smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Hello Brooke ,
How sett and how colorful is you poem with the names of flowers I have never heard of before
A real pleasure to read
I hope you put all your flower poems in a poem book
Smiles
Gert
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Gert, I do hope to do something with the flower poems :-) Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke
Gert
Comment from Jean Lutz
I could hear the melody to "Hush Little Baby, Don't You Cry" as I read this lovely piece. This could be a lullaby for adults -- drifting off to sleep to soft music and then dreaming of fields of blossoms.
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I could hear the melody to "Hush Little Baby, Don't You Cry" as I read this lovely piece. This could be a lullaby for adults -- drifting off to sleep to soft music and then dreaming of fields of blossoms.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Jean - I'm so glad it sounded so much like an authentic lullaby to you :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
more beautiful flowers in a poem. they are beautiful indeed. made me smile. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. i smell the honey of a mixture of wonderful flowers. :P
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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brooke,
more beautiful flowers in a poem. they are beautiful indeed. made me smile. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. imagery is excellent. i smell the honey of a mixture of wonderful flowers. :P
love,
barbara
Comment Written 02-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2009
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Barbara, thank you. Glad you enjoyed :-) Brooke
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brooke,
you are welcome~
love,
barbara