Genuflected Reflections
Free Verse: Little Punctuation55 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your repetition of the refrain makes your point so well of the repetition of the confession process over time and how things become so much more difficult and complex as time wears on and sins become bigger and more regular and mistakes are repeated right along with the confessions - the tone of despair and longing for simpler, more innocent times is most effectively conveyed
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Your repetition of the refrain makes your point so well of the repetition of the confession process over time and how things become so much more difficult and complex as time wears on and sins become bigger and more regular and mistakes are repeated right along with the confessions - the tone of despair and longing for simpler, more innocent times is most effectively conveyed
Comment Written 12-Jan-2009
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem is wonderful. Beautifully written with a message that leaves one ponering about their own souls. I found no errors. Good job.
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Your poem is wonderful. Beautifully written with a message that leaves one ponering about their own souls. I found no errors. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2009
Comment from mermaids
An interesting piece of writing that shows the progession from child to adult and how one can change. I like the question "where does that child go", it is a valid question we can ask ourselves.
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An interesting piece of writing that shows the progession from child to adult and how one can change. I like the question "where does that child go", it is a valid question we can ask ourselves.
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2009
Comment from mmichelle97219
Life is never as simple as when it began, but that is because we humans tend to complicate things. I really adored this poem. It is a gret piece of work.
Michelle
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2009
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Life is never as simple as when it began, but that is because we humans tend to complicate things. I really adored this poem. It is a gret piece of work.
Michelle
Comment Written 12-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2009
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Oh Michelle! Do we humans ever complicate things!!!! Thank you so much for your exceptional review. I am honored and humbled by your rating, but more importantly, I am thrilled that you appreciate my offering...diane
Comment from EllenV
For me, this beautifully written piece is talking about the next generation and their disregard for that which is sacred and meaningful to parents and grandparents and God. They take it all so lightly.
The lines that especially struck at my heart were these:
Saturday morning
Mantilla is forsaken
Rosary is misplaced
Prayer book is rejected
His name is remembered
But only spoken now
In vain
In anger
In the quest to impress
Where did that child go?
Does she even remember?
Who forgives her now?
Does she even care?
Maybe future life experiences will bring our children to their senses.
blessings,
ellen
blessings,
ellen
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For me, this beautifully written piece is talking about the next generation and their disregard for that which is sacred and meaningful to parents and grandparents and God. They take it all so lightly.
The lines that especially struck at my heart were these:
Saturday morning
Mantilla is forsaken
Rosary is misplaced
Prayer book is rejected
His name is remembered
But only spoken now
In vain
In anger
In the quest to impress
Where did that child go?
Does she even remember?
Who forgives her now?
Does she even care?
Maybe future life experiences will bring our children to their senses.
blessings,
ellen
blessings,
ellen
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2009