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A Parent's Nightmare57 total reviews
Comment from CD Richards
What an absolutely awful situation for any parent to find themselves in. As well as conveying extremely well the horror and despair of the situation, the poem exhibits perfect structure and form. Excellent work, and thanks for sharing. Craig
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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What an absolutely awful situation for any parent to find themselves in. As well as conveying extremely well the horror and despair of the situation, the poem exhibits perfect structure and form. Excellent work, and thanks for sharing. Craig
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Craig, thank you so much for such a wonderful review. I'm deeply honoured by your comments. Take care Debbie
Comment from Ginda Simpson
What a sad story this is, but I like the way you reflect on it from not only the parents who suffer and mourn their loss, but from the point of view of the young man. Sensitive and lonely, what did he need so desperately that his family nor his community could not see and provide? A beautiful poem.
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What a sad story this is, but I like the way you reflect on it from not only the parents who suffer and mourn their loss, but from the point of view of the young man. Sensitive and lonely, what did he need so desperately that his family nor his community could not see and provide? A beautiful poem.
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Ginda! Your review and words are deeply appreciated. It's such a sad and dreadful situation for the parents - the not knowing would drive me mad I think. Take care Debbie x
Comment from nonajmoss
This is a beautiful poem that makes me feel deeply sad for your loss. Your feelings seep through the words. I'm sorry that is something you had to deal with but I appreciate that you shared it
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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This is a beautiful poem that makes me feel deeply sad for your loss. Your feelings seep through the words. I'm sorry that is something you had to deal with but I appreciate that you shared it
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much for your exceptional review which is so kind and deeply appreciated! Fortunately it's not me but a friend going through all this. But trying to put myself in his position over the months has been nigh on impossible. Such a cruel punishment for anyone to suffer, not to mention the anguish and sense of hopelessness of the son, whatever his fate. Take care and thanks again, Debbie
Comment from Paul Manton
Thank you, Debbie for this very harrowing story.
If you knew the parents, as I assume you did, this must have been a very painful process.
4-3-4-3 iambic and abab thyme scheme sustained so well for nine quatrains, with a very well chosen b/w picture, pointing up the bleakness of the story.
Emotive language ramps up during the poem, showing the increasing desperation - 'dread' 'enshrouds' nightmare' - the story is so painful, and especially since it is still unresolved.
Thank you for making us aware of this family tragedy, Debbie.
A real need for prayer.
Paul
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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Debbie for this very harrowing story.
If you knew the parents, as I assume you did, this must have been a very painful process.
4-3-4-3 iambic and abab thyme scheme sustained so well for nine quatrains, with a very well chosen b/w picture, pointing up the bleakness of the story.
Emotive language ramps up during the poem, showing the increasing desperation - 'dread' 'enshrouds' nightmare' - the story is so painful, and especially since it is still unresolved.
Thank you for making us aware of this family tragedy, Debbie.
A real need for prayer.
Paul
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Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Paul, for your kind review and thoughtful comments, all much appreciated. Take care Debbie
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Welcome, Debbie.
Love from Paul
Comment from Lisasview
Dear Debbie,
The flow of this tragic event is perfect. And, although so painful to read about such sadness, because of the flow I found it easy to read.
Your gift for writing is fabulous.
My heart goes out to those parents and I can only hope that their son, that they love, comes home someday.
Lisa
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Dear Debbie,
The flow of this tragic event is perfect. And, although so painful to read about such sadness, because of the flow I found it easy to read.
Your gift for writing is fabulous.
My heart goes out to those parents and I can only hope that their son, that they love, comes home someday.
Lisa
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Lisa for this exceptional review which is deeply appreciated! Your lovely words are treasured. Take care Debbie x
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You are so welcome Debbie... I can not stop thinking of your poem...
Lisa
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I love the way you tell this story with words such as "They focused then on parents more and put them in the frame". Yes, that's what the police do, as they should.
This is such a tragic story - the pain of not knowing where he is - or even if he is still alive - must be killing the parents inside.
I pray this family will finally discover what happened to their son. Be it good news or bad, closure is needed. I'm sure they pray for that.
Please let us know if anything comes to light.
This "story" is so well told through your usual practiced and perfect poetry.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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I love the way you tell this story with words such as "They focused then on parents more and put them in the frame". Yes, that's what the police do, as they should.
This is such a tragic story - the pain of not knowing where he is - or even if he is still alive - must be killing the parents inside.
I pray this family will finally discover what happened to their son. Be it good news or bad, closure is needed. I'm sure they pray for that.
Please let us know if anything comes to light.
This "story" is so well told through your usual practiced and perfect poetry.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Pam, for this exceptional review which is deeply appreciated. It's almost impossible to imagine what this must feel like for the parents and, as you suggest, the not knowing is the worst part of all. He was a very reserved young man and must have had a lot of issues that he simply couldn't share. Sometimes, people just disappear like this because they want anonymity but the father believes he may well have taken his life. Tragic. But thanks so much for your kind words. Debbie xo
Comment from JSD
Moving and brilliantly executed Debbie. The rhyme and rhythm perfect. The sad unknowable story compelling and adding such a dark level to your words. Well done. X
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Moving and brilliantly executed Debbie. The rhyme and rhythm perfect. The sad unknowable story compelling and adding such a dark level to your words. Well done. X
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, John! I really appreciate this especially as I know metered verse isn't always your preference. You're very kind and generous here. Debbie x