By the Garden Shed
A Swap Quatrain: Of Love and Remembrance69 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Eight well-planted quatrains as an ode to hollyhocks and female relatives: mother, grandmother. It makes me feel guilty for landscaping over our hollyhock patch last year (but it is easier for the cats to get back in the house, now).
Favorite line: Through generations their joy will live on;
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Eight well-planted quatrains as an ode to hollyhocks and female relatives: mother, grandmother. It makes me feel guilty for landscaping over our hollyhock patch last year (but it is easier for the cats to get back in the house, now).
Favorite line: Through generations their joy will live on;
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a beautiful poem well executed in swap quatrain style, Mrs KT. Your topic is expressed in a loving way with precious memories of your grandmother and her love of flowers. The hollyhocks are amazing. Your 'swp' lines work perfectly in your poem as do the great rhymes. I enjoyed reading this. The video was interesting with some beautiful hollyhocks to be seen. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is a beautiful poem well executed in swap quatrain style, Mrs KT. Your topic is expressed in a loving way with precious memories of your grandmother and her love of flowers. The hollyhocks are amazing. Your 'swp' lines work perfectly in your poem as do the great rhymes. I enjoyed reading this. The video was interesting with some beautiful hollyhocks to be seen. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello Jan!
So pleased you enjoyed my offering.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
Take Care!
diane
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem is truly excellent in every respect. It is touching, conveying a powerful message about how and why we remember people, in this case, very fondly. Also, it is skillfully and creatively composed--a great swap guatrain poem!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This poem is truly excellent in every respect. It is touching, conveying a powerful message about how and why we remember people, in this case, very fondly. Also, it is skillfully and creatively composed--a great swap guatrain poem!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello Janice!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
So pleased my offering resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Exceptional! That is just what I can say. Your rhymes are just wonderful. This is very beautiful. Reading this reminded me of my late dad; I hope he is happy in the Elysian Fields right now.
A very grand cover image you've got. Thanks for sharing this very beautiful piece.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Exceptional! That is just what I can say. Your rhymes are just wonderful. This is very beautiful. Reading this reminded me of my late dad; I hope he is happy in the Elysian Fields right now.
A very grand cover image you've got. Thanks for sharing this very beautiful piece.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello Precious!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
So pleased my words resonated with you, and equally pleased that my words reminded me of your late father.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Bill Schott
This set of eight swap quatrains, By the Garden Shed, have the proper formatting and tell a loving story of a generational gift of life, in the form of these glorious pink hollyhocks.
Through generations their joy will live on;
Grandmother's hollyhocks greeting the dawn.
Delicate but firm, such regal foundations.
Their joy will live on through generations...
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This set of eight swap quatrains, By the Garden Shed, have the proper formatting and tell a loving story of a generational gift of life, in the form of these glorious pink hollyhocks.
Through generations their joy will live on;
Grandmother's hollyhocks greeting the dawn.
Delicate but firm, such regal foundations.
Their joy will live on through generations...
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello Bill!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
So pleased my words resonated with you!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from bob cullen
Wow, that is so good and I love how you reverse the first line on the final line of each verse without losing the flow. That is so very clever. I also like the imagery your words created. When I closed my eyes I saw beautiful colour.
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Wow, that is so good and I love how you reverse the first line on the final line of each verse without losing the flow. That is so very clever. I also like the imagery your words created. When I closed my eyes I saw beautiful colour.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from Susan X Smith
Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. The rhyme scheme and the near rhyme of "sure" and "her" both work well. The picture is uplifting. I can almost smell the flowers.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Thanks for sharing this lovely poem. The rhyme scheme and the near rhyme of "sure" and "her" both work well. The picture is uplifting. I can almost smell the flowers.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2020
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Hello Susan,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
I must admit that I was puzzled when you referenced the "near rhyme" of "sure" with "her." I am born and raised in northern Michigan and I/we pronounce "sure" as "sher;" thus it is a definite rhyme to me. However, I quizzed my structural engineering husband by asking him to pronounce both words = definite match. But then, I phoned my British son-in-law and asked him to put our daugher on speaker phone and asked them to pronounce both words. Our daughter pronounced "sure" as "sher," while our son-in-law (graduate of Oxford) pronounced "sure" as "shoor." We had quite a laugh. Truly, I never would have questioned the rhyming compatibility of "sure" with "her" until you pointed it out to me. So thank you!
As an aside, my mother-in-law grew up in Ohio = "Oh-hi-oh" to all of us; however, she pronounced it as "Oh-hi-er." Amazing!
Thank you again!
Hoping you are safe and well!
diane
Comment from June Sargent
This is a beautiful and nostalgic tribute to generations of lovely ladies and their lovely hollyhocks. I really enjoyed the video of that garden in Saginaw! The flowers were amazing!
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This is a beautiful and nostalgic tribute to generations of lovely ladies and their lovely hollyhocks. I really enjoyed the video of that garden in Saginaw! The flowers were amazing!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from BeasPeas
This is an exceptional post, Diane. Loved this. Hollyhocks are one of the gorgeous flowers I grew up with and think they are one of the most impressive and showy flowers. Great job. Also watched the video. Nice job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is an exceptional post, Diane. Loved this. Hollyhocks are one of the gorgeous flowers I grew up with and think they are one of the most impressive and showy flowers. Great job. Also watched the video. Nice job. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello Marilyn!
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
So pleased that my words resonated with you. Hollyhocks are, indeed, beautiful...filled with memories for me...
Thank you from snowy Michigan this evening!
diane
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Beautiful memories beautifully written. Impressive author notes too. I enjoyed the read with rhyme and comfortable flow. No edits or adjustments are necessary.
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Beautiful memories beautifully written. Impressive author notes too. I enjoyed the read with rhyme and comfortable flow. No edits or adjustments are necessary.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020