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Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Hehehe! I've heard of hoarders in my time, but none compare to the hoarder in your poem! Oh my!
I enjoyed this poem...the story and the rhymes. I think it will do well in the contest.
Best wishes!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Hehehe! I've heard of hoarders in my time, but none compare to the hoarder in your poem! Oh my!
I enjoyed this poem...the story and the rhymes. I think it will do well in the contest.
Best wishes!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You're welcome.
Comment from estory
The rhyme scheme here worked up a jingle jangle kind of rhythm and echoe effect and I think it underscored the upbeat, humorous tone of the poem. All the little details of the hot wheels cars, the old t shirts, the jelly jars, the beer cans, the comic books, your mother's afghans...that made the poem for me, made the theme come alive and we feel a connection to you, and the theme comes alive for us too. estory
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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The rhyme scheme here worked up a jingle jangle kind of rhythm and echoe effect and I think it underscored the upbeat, humorous tone of the poem. All the little details of the hot wheels cars, the old t shirts, the jelly jars, the beer cans, the comic books, your mother's afghans...that made the poem for me, made the theme come alive and we feel a connection to you, and the theme comes alive for us too. estory
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Mastery
LMAO I am always condemning hoarders, author.
I just do not understand why they have to save every little thing from newspapers to tie clasps. It certainly made good fodder for this poetry though. It is so funny.
Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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LMAO I am always condemning hoarders, author.
I just do not understand why they have to save every little thing from newspapers to tie clasps. It certainly made good fodder for this poetry though. It is so funny.
Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Bob. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the things we gather over the years, especially when we stay in one house for more than five years. Ithe accumulates until it is just too much.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about the things we gather over the years, especially when we stay in one house for more than five years. Ithe accumulates until it is just too much.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is great and I think it will do well in the contest! I've watched a couple Hoarder shows and realized how sincerely hard it is for some people to let go of things. You represented their...and your plot...with humor. The rhyming is great.
I did have to read the last two lines twice as I didn't catch the rhyme at first. Or better still, The Bulldozer will?...Not sure if that matters, but just in case. The lines are different lengths so you don't quite get that banging finish? Please don't hate me. I like this poem a lot!
Good luck! This is cute and creative!!
Tina
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is great and I think it will do well in the contest! I've watched a couple Hoarder shows and realized how sincerely hard it is for some people to let go of things. You represented their...and your plot...with humor. The rhyming is great.
I did have to read the last two lines twice as I didn't catch the rhyme at first. Or better still, The Bulldozer will?...Not sure if that matters, but just in case. The lines are different lengths so you don't quite get that banging finish? Please don't hate me. I like this poem a lot!
Good luck! This is cute and creative!!
Tina
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Tina. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are very welcome! This poem made me chuckle:)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a well=written contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. Your lined flow well with great rhymes and storyline. You handled the prompt with finesse. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is a well=written contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. Your lined flow well with great rhymes and storyline. You handled the prompt with finesse. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Jan. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
I enjoyed your choice of words and frolic! It is treasure to you and others may not understand their memorable worth! Congratulations on an excellent contest entry.
My best,
Deborah
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Dear Author,
I enjoyed your choice of words and frolic! It is treasure to you and others may not understand their memorable worth! Congratulations on an excellent contest entry.
My best,
Deborah
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you Deborah. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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My pleasure
Comment from Lobber
I think we all can identify with the fact that fifty single socks would become extremely valuable, if not essential, should we lose a leg while on a safari. - Lobber
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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I think we all can identify with the fact that fifty single socks would become extremely valuable, if not essential, should we lose a leg while on a safari. - Lobber
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thanks Lobber. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from victor 66
Doesn't everyone have a spouse that collects, clutters and hordes? That's what love is all about. The trick is, you ask you're spouse if you're going throw something out because you don't have any place to sit. Hopefully, he or she will feel sorry for you and let it go. Just a thought. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Doesn't everyone have a spouse that collects, clutters and hordes? That's what love is all about. The trick is, you ask you're spouse if you're going throw something out because you don't have any place to sit. Hopefully, he or she will feel sorry for you and let it go. Just a thought. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You are most welcome, Earl.
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is an excellent, humorous poem about hoarding. Thanks for sharing this in the contest and best of luck. Good luck with the bulldozer also.
Bill
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is an excellent, humorous poem about hoarding. Thanks for sharing this in the contest and best of luck. Good luck with the bulldozer also.
Bill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much Bill. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.