Where Jenny Lies
Ghost of a little girl57 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
There is a sweetness woven into the sadness of this verse, whether you believe in ghosts or not. But if there are ghosts who need to be comforted, I would hope that we could do so. Really nice poem.
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There is a sweetness woven into the sadness of this verse, whether you believe in ghosts or not. But if there are ghosts who need to be comforted, I would hope that we could do so. Really nice poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Aussie
I really loved your poem about the little girl lost. Sometimes a violent death leaves the person wandering, looking for her life as she knew it. They often reach out to the living to seek rest and family for help. In life, I have experienced this from a friend who died a violent death and her question was, "why did I have to die like this?" K XX
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I really loved your poem about the little girl lost. Sometimes a violent death leaves the person wandering, looking for her life as she knew it. They often reach out to the living to seek rest and family for help. In life, I have experienced this from a friend who died a violent death and her question was, "why did I have to die like this?" K XX
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very interesting poem, and it's well written and well rhymed. I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and your new book. Patricia.
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This is a very interesting poem, and it's well written and well rhymed. I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and your new book. Patricia.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from JSD
Ooh. Spooky and yet rather beautiful. The rhyme and rhythm are perfectly natural and controlled. I like the way she disappeared on being put straight about her situation. Clever!
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Ooh. Spooky and yet rather beautiful. The rhyme and rhythm are perfectly natural and controlled. I like the way she disappeared on being put straight about her situation. Clever!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You were inspires by a ghost in your dream here Willie and this is such a wonderful heartfelt poem and I enjoyed your fine invention here, love Dolly x x x
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You were inspires by a ghost in your dream here Willie and this is such a wonderful heartfelt poem and I enjoyed your fine invention here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Lisasview
Good morning Willie from Spain,
I loved your poem for oh so many reasons.
First the rhyme although not always perfect is wonderful .... the story is really good and the entire poem written in a nice and dark font, which makes it super easy to read, is great...
Oh yes, and the photo really is the type that makes a reader want to read your poem...
Lisasview, new to this site
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Good morning Willie from Spain,
I loved your poem for oh so many reasons.
First the rhyme although not always perfect is wonderful .... the story is really good and the entire poem written in a nice and dark font, which makes it super easy to read, is great...
Oh yes, and the photo really is the type that makes a reader want to read your poem...
Lisasview, new to this site
Comment Written 23-Jun-2023
Comment from Gypsymooncat
I sure hope Jenny found her family. I was very touched by this poem, and loved the structure and flow as well. I guess I'm wondering - and I wouldnt be alone - is this biographical? Did you actually have this dream about Jenny? If so, wow, what an experience! And a successful one, as it appears she went towards the light and (presumably) found her kin.
A truly fabulous write!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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I sure hope Jenny found her family. I was very touched by this poem, and loved the structure and flow as well. I guess I'm wondering - and I wouldnt be alone - is this biographical? Did you actually have this dream about Jenny? If so, wow, what an experience! And a successful one, as it appears she went towards the light and (presumably) found her kin.
A truly fabulous write!
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your review. Yes, this is a dream I have quite often. Some of my dreams are good, some not so good. Dreams are my main source for my poetry.
Comment from 24chas
I liked this read, Willie P Smith. It was a nice ghost story that was entertaining to read. It had a good rhyme scheme which made it smooth and easy. Nice job.
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I liked this read, Willie P Smith. It was a nice ghost story that was entertaining to read. It had a good rhyme scheme which made it smooth and easy. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a very well-written narrative poem. The form/style lends itself
to the type of plot you created. Unlike some ghost stories, yours
is moving, heart-wrenching, and sweet.
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This is a very well-written narrative poem. The form/style lends itself
to the type of plot you created. Unlike some ghost stories, yours
is moving, heart-wrenching, and sweet.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a little girl's ghost who doesn't know she is dead and still roam to find her family. When she is told that she is dead, she will go towards the light.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about a little girl's ghost who doesn't know she is dead and still roam to find her family. When she is told that she is dead, she will go towards the light.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thank you! This Is a real dream I had many years ago. My wife woke me and sad I was crying in my sleep. I have had many such dreams. I keep pen and paper next to my bed. I get much of my poetry from dreams.