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Comment from Mark D. R.
Yes, George was likely misaligned for this particular battle action on that lonely ridge. But you gave him credit for this historic event. Should we blame the scouts for not checking a bit further down the valley below or Custer for being too blind about his superior military ability? Patton had flaws too. Your story works better with George. Both dressed flamboyantly.
Your rhymes worked throughout.
muster ... Custer
smidge ... ridge
rue ... Sioux (someone totally unfamiliar with the English language might have trouble pronouncing this name and getting your rhyme!)
are among my favorites
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Yes, George was likely misaligned for this particular battle action on that lonely ridge. But you gave him credit for this historic event. Should we blame the scouts for not checking a bit further down the valley below or Custer for being too blind about his superior military ability? Patton had flaws too. Your story works better with George. Both dressed flamboyantly.
Your rhymes worked throughout.
muster ... Custer
smidge ... ridge
rue ... Sioux (someone totally unfamiliar with the English language might have trouble pronouncing this name and getting your rhyme!)
are among my favorites
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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Comment from LIJ Red
Different sources paint Custer as a fool-hardy reckless commander who dug his own grave, but no one ever called him timid...and the upper millstone, Crazy Horse, and the lower millstone, Sitting Bull, did some serious grinding by the Little Big Horn...excellent poem for the prompt...
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Different sources paint Custer as a fool-hardy reckless commander who dug his own grave, but no one ever called him timid...and the upper millstone, Crazy Horse, and the lower millstone, Sitting Bull, did some serious grinding by the Little Big Horn...excellent poem for the prompt...
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha Custer easier to rhyme...Patton ....sat in ...satin yep doesn't reallysuit a General of his ilk...neither does silk..
I enjoyed it but I did think he rued the day he fought against Crazy horse
God bless
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Ha ha ha Custer easier to rhyme...Patton ....sat in ...satin yep doesn't reallysuit a General of his ilk...neither does silk..
I enjoyed it but I did think he rued the day he fought against Crazy horse
God bless
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I'm loving those closing lines which give great impact to your poem which is a joy to read and a little big of American history here, those battles set the boundaries, love Dolly x
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I'm loving those closing lines which give great impact to your poem which is a joy to read and a little big of American history here, those battles set the boundaries, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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Comment from 24chas
This was a good write. I like the subject matter. I remember studying and being fascinated with Custer when I was younger. I liked the flow of this one and it told a good story. Good job.
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This was a good write. I like the subject matter. I remember studying and being fascinated with Custer when I was younger. I liked the flow of this one and it told a good story. Good job.
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Comment from Ross E Silke
This flows very well, is easy to read, and has a solid style structure that meets the expectations of a good poem with all the criteria met. I like the name, "Custer," it works very well with your rhyming. The picture is has a nice effect too. Well written and has a good meter. The rhythm is solid and it sounds out quite nicely. Enjoyable! I like the theme. Good images and descriptions. Easy to read and follow. Good ideas. Best,
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This flows very well, is easy to read, and has a solid style structure that meets the expectations of a good poem with all the criteria met. I like the name, "Custer," it works very well with your rhyming. The picture is has a nice effect too. Well written and has a good meter. The rhythm is solid and it sounds out quite nicely. Enjoyable! I like the theme. Good images and descriptions. Easy to read and follow. Good ideas. Best,
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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Comment from humpwhistle
History often depends on point of view.
George Armstrong Custer made his name during the Civil War.
After that, though, his record is spotty at best.
He lost his entire command at Greasy Grass
because he strove for glory and ignored input from his scouts.
In fact, it was Custer's Last Blunder.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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History often depends on point of view.
George Armstrong Custer made his name during the Civil War.
After that, though, his record is spotty at best.
He lost his entire command at Greasy Grass
because he strove for glory and ignored input from his scouts.
In fact, it was Custer's Last Blunder.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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Comment from royowen
General George A. Custer would have to be one of the most revered of all American generals, to fight and die like he did, was a certainty of him becoming immortalised in history. A beautifully written upbeat poem, nicely rhymed, deftly scribed, and boldly presented, well done, blessings, Roy.
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General George A. Custer would have to be one of the most revered of all American generals, to fight and die like he did, was a certainty of him becoming immortalised in history. A beautifully written upbeat poem, nicely rhymed, deftly scribed, and boldly presented, well done, blessings, Roy.
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
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most welcome