Comment from kahpot

Excellent

And Joan often longs for a lay, what a wonderful ending to an excellent poem and what a story you have told, very well written and best wishes in your competition ****kahpot

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thanks Kahpot. So glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from Old Soldier

Excellent

Good and funny. Keep the reader looking ahead. A really nice flow. Thanks for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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 Comment Written 05-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Many thanks for the review.

Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux

Excellent

This is a well written story /poem that rhymes and flows beautifully. The way you describe the similarities and differences between the two is presented very well. I like this humorous and well written story /poem. Well done! You should do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Many thsnks Jeffrey. Glad you liked it.

Comment from Air Spirit

Excellent

Your poem/commentary on twins is airy and light --- you use humor, cleverness and wit. You point out that despite being identical twins, you can have significant and vastly different goals and visions about your life. DNA helps bind and bond us together with our siblings, and twins more so, but it can't eliminate some pretty significant and vast differences in their positive character traits, as well as in their defects. I have known several different pair of twins, and sometimes their similarities in expressions, humor, laugh, or frown, can be eerily the same --- but then turn around and shock you with how vastly different they are --- almost questioning how they could come out of the same mold/family, when they seem to be so many differences. That is because the human spirit is unique, cannot be contained or literally defined --- it is too expansive and unique... God granted us each and every one the spark of our very own essence and soul --- and our challenge, should we decide to accept it, is to navigate through life's waters, looking for safe harbors, and avoiding those who will wage war ... you use your humor to eloquently point out these things, and so much more... very enjoyable poem!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thank you so much for your very detailed review. Much appreciated.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hahahaha!
Well, if these two looked enough alike perhaps they could pull off an old switcheroo every now and again.
Who would be the wiser save for the two twin sisters?
This was hilarious--I truly enjoyed it.
Best of luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thanks Dean. I am so glad that you liked it.

reply by Dean Kuch on 05-Jul-2018

You are very welcome. :)

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello Mystery Writer!
What a hoot! I attended Catholic school for eight years, and it is difficult for me to imagine any of the sisters there doing anything untoward! Or even thinking of "a lay." But...now that I think of it, it would have done some of them good! :)

Wish to point out two nits. Ignore if needed or you find offensive:
Neither regrets their choice in life, (;)
they each tackle the chores of the day (,) or (.) and capitalize the following "But"
but sometimes Jane longs for peace and quiet (,)
and Joan often longs for a lay.


Thanks for sharing!

diane

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thank you so much for your great review. Much appreciated.

Comment from Tootie

Excellent

Oh my...this story poem made me chuckle. Love the last line! This is really well done. I enjoyed reading it. Flows perfectly. Creative and fun. Wishing you the best in the contest. Blessings, Cathy

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thank you so much for your great review.

Comment from Nanny 6

Excellent

This is quite a contrast in the sister's lives. I like the last sentence... gave me a chuckle. I'm sure that the two do envy each other's lifestyle a bit. Good story in poem...good luck in the contest.
Judy

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Hi Judy. Thanks for the review, i am glad you got the humour. Would you beleive some reviewers obviously didn't

reply by Nanny 6 on 04-Jul-2018

Those are the reviewers that aren't paying attention to the talent...they just want the member cents...It's their loss! ; )

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story poem about twin sisters who are totally the opposite of each other in character and preferences in life. We all are human and we all have our own personality even when we look alike.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Many thanks for the review Sandra. Much appreciated

Comment from Senyai

Excellent

Goodness! This is like night and day meeting at dawn and sunset to compare notes..
Very well written, strong sentiment but in controlled undertones. Direct, honest...
refreshing. This is quite a story.

Well crafted and best to you, Anon, in the story poem contest!

Lynn

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thanks Lynn. Much appreciated