Ashes in the Wind
Short poem contest entry51 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Very nicely written Diane. You've eloquently captured the key points of the precious and very vulnerability of life. And nothing we can do will change that impermanence. Your artwork choice pairs perfectly with the delicate foothold.
Great job and I wish you the best in the contest!
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Very nicely written Diane. You've eloquently captured the key points of the precious and very vulnerability of life. And nothing we can do will change that impermanence. Your artwork choice pairs perfectly with the delicate foothold.
Great job and I wish you the best in the contest!
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Gloria,
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
I need to remind myself to appreciate every moment...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from MercurySeven
Nicely done, Mrs. KT. You painted a broad theme but with precise, careful strokes. The four words that illustrate it with common purpose are: precious, precarious, ashes, wind. They convey that feeling of transience, of something not meant to last but worthwhile while it does. Bittersweet. You hit the syllable count too. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Nicely done, Mrs. KT. You painted a broad theme but with precise, careful strokes. The four words that illustrate it with common purpose are: precious, precarious, ashes, wind. They convey that feeling of transience, of something not meant to last but worthwhile while it does. Bittersweet. You hit the syllable count too. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your thoughtful and complimentary review.
Much appreciated, MercurySeven.
diane
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Short Poem' writing prompt.
Your story of the fragile nature of man is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Short Poem' writing prompt.
Your story of the fragile nature of man is clear.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Sharon!
Much appreciated...
diane
Comment from lyenochka
What a striking picture and profound poem that aligns with the message of the fragility of life. Great contrast between the word "foothold" and "ashes in the wind."
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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What a striking picture and profound poem that aligns with the message of the fragility of life. Great contrast between the word "foothold" and "ashes in the wind."
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello lyenochka,
The artwork is, indeed, striking...
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, a thoughtful poem, you've chosen your words carefully and used them to great effect, and the picture suits the poem very well. Thanks, Ana.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello, a thoughtful poem, you've chosen your words carefully and used them to great effect, and the picture suits the poem very well. Thanks, Ana.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Anastasia,
So very pleased you enjoy my poem.
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from friartuck
An excellent look at US! An excellent description of US! And an extra point (should be an endless heap of points) just for being a reading and writing teacher! Those two skills help to stabilize us in those ashes! Thank you for the poem, and for your dedication to your calling.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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An excellent look at US! An excellent description of US! And an extra point (should be an endless heap of points) just for being a reading and writing teacher! Those two skills help to stabilize us in those ashes! Thank you for the poem, and for your dedication to your calling.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello friartuck,
So very honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review!
I retired from teaching in 2016; I truly miss those days...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from Sherman541
Life is very precious and man is not, as cautious as,he could be. Then things happen or our life ends and back to dust we go. Good Luck and Beset Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Life is very precious and man is not, as cautious as,he could be. Then things happen or our life ends and back to dust we go. Good Luck and Beset Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Sherman541,
So very pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
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You are welcome ;)
Comment from trumby
A good entry in the contest. From dust we came and to dust we will return once our mission in this world is fulfilled. He is waiting for us with open arms, to those who believe in Him. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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A good entry in the contest. From dust we came and to dust we will return once our mission in this world is fulfilled. He is waiting for us with open arms, to those who believe in Him. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello trumby,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
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You're welcome..
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
So sad. From dust we came and to dust we will return. But heaven await those who know HIM and it is really just the beginning. Very well done. I do hope you do well with the contest. Lots of contests going on. Very fun. Have a good evening. Roxanna
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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So sad. From dust we came and to dust we will return. But heaven await those who know HIM and it is really just the beginning. Very well done. I do hope you do well with the contest. Lots of contests going on. Very fun. Have a good evening. Roxanna
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Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Roxanna!
So very pleased that you enjoyed my poem.
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Simple statements sometimes evoke such powerful meaning and emotion.
This poem is a fine example of just that.
Each line contributes to the depth of meaning and builds to a climax with the last line.
A perfect image choice.
Good luck.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Simple statements sometimes evoke such powerful meaning and emotion.
This poem is a fine example of just that.
Each line contributes to the depth of meaning and builds to a climax with the last line.
A perfect image choice.
Good luck.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Shirley,
So honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review!
Thank you for your thoughtful and complimentary review!
diane