Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Slack-Jawed Tide"A collection of free verse poems
67 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
Wow there were some words I had no idea what they meant and that just because of my ignorance of a lot of words in the English language I have never used.
It is a very descriptive write that takes you there to the shore and sucks you in well done
dip
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Wow there were some words I had no idea what they meant and that just because of my ignorance of a lot of words in the English language I have never used.
It is a very descriptive write that takes you there to the shore and sucks you in well done
dip
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Dip, for dropping by to review. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from pipersfancy
Love the entire presentation here, Tony - with a veritable smorgasbord of sounds and images... and a sting at the end. How brilliant!
We've had multiple sightings of the Portuguese man-o'-war just off the Eastern coast of Canada this year, and several people injured at a popular beach in Newfoundland... being previously unfamiliar with the creature, local swimmers have not known to watch out for them. So, they have made their way into Canadian waters... who says global weather patterns aren't changing?
Regards,
pf
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Love the entire presentation here, Tony - with a veritable smorgasbord of sounds and images... and a sting at the end. How brilliant!
We've had multiple sightings of the Portuguese man-o'-war just off the Eastern coast of Canada this year, and several people injured at a popular beach in Newfoundland... being previously unfamiliar with the creature, local swimmers have not known to watch out for them. So, they have made their way into Canadian waters... who says global weather patterns aren't changing?
Regards,
pf
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review, Christina. I always appreciate hearing from you and am delighted that you thought this one worthy of six stars. These stingers are seasonal on the east coast of Australia, mainly coming in between October and May, during our winter months. Sorry to hear that you are getting plagued by them, too. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Wow - watch out for that serene sea - there are all kinds of things lurking underneath! Thanks for the glossary at the end as I didn't know the technical word for the Portuguese man-o-war. They do appear on Hawaiian beaches, too. I like the shape of the poem, too - like the jellyfish creature.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Wow - watch out for that serene sea - there are all kinds of things lurking underneath! Thanks for the glossary at the end as I didn't know the technical word for the Portuguese man-o-war. They do appear on Hawaiian beaches, too. I like the shape of the poem, too - like the jellyfish creature.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review, Helen. I always appreciate hearing from you! I'm not a great fan of swimming in the ocean. Too many hidden dangers lurking! Best wishes, Tony
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I can understand that, Tony. But personally, I'd rather swim in the salted ocean instead of the fresh water lakes which the water fowl have fouled the waters....
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Tony. Before reading a word, the striking image and visual creation of the form are eye catching. It looks like a stingray to me, although the poem is written about the jellyfish and its danger. Theme could be taken as written or a metaphor for something else. Your word choices and alliteration are excellent. The reader is left with a feeling of fatal inevitability. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Hi Tony. Before reading a word, the striking image and visual creation of the form are eye catching. It looks like a stingray to me, although the poem is written about the jellyfish and its danger. Theme could be taken as written or a metaphor for something else. Your word choices and alliteration are excellent. The reader is left with a feeling of fatal inevitability. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review, Marilyn. I always appreciate hearing from you! I hadn't really intended this to be a shape poem when I started. As you say - much more like a stingray than a jellyfish! My drawing skills need developing! LOL Best wishes, Tony
Comment from catch22
Hi T, you've penned an excellent free verse poem about the moon and its effect on the ocean and creatures. Your definition of viscous is one I have not seen before. I always used it to mean thick or resistant to flow. All the other word choices were clever and meaningful for me. Excellent descriptive imagery and good personification of the night scene objects.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Hi T, you've penned an excellent free verse poem about the moon and its effect on the ocean and creatures. Your definition of viscous is one I have not seen before. I always used it to mean thick or resistant to flow. All the other word choices were clever and meaningful for me. Excellent descriptive imagery and good personification of the night scene objects.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review. I always appreciate it when you do! You are right, of course, about the meaning of viscous. I associate it with oil, as being a fluid with a relative high viscosity, and sometimes the ocean, when it is calm and somnolent, a look of oil about it. It just seems thicker than usual. I could probably have expressed that better, but I avoided using 'oily' because of its association with oil slicks.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the liberal use of alliteration to personify the ocean in its ability to let or imaginations wander and than ebb as we come back to reality and leave the shore.
I like how the end shows the pain of loss that can come close to killing some.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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I like the liberal use of alliteration to personify the ocean in its ability to let or imaginations wander and than ebb as we come back to reality and leave the shore.
I like how the end shows the pain of loss that can come close to killing some.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Joan. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Tony
This is an exceptional piece of writing my friend, your bar is continually raised and you always seem to reach it.
Wonderful alliteration and some fantastic words that captures the imagination.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Hi Tony
This is an exceptional piece of writing my friend, your bar is continually raised and you always seem to reach it.
Wonderful alliteration and some fantastic words that captures the imagination.
Mitchell
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Mitchell and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from livelylinda
Tony: fantastic, voluptuous descriptive words, picture awesome and as usual, your words are light when needed and fierce at other times and ending with a 'sting'. I love this one! Linda
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Tony: fantastic, voluptuous descriptive words, picture awesome and as usual, your words are light when needed and fierce at other times and ending with a 'sting'. I love this one! Linda
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Linda, for dropping by to review and for your generous award of six stars. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from amahra
Wow! what a sophisticated tongue twister. I loved it. This is a fantastic poem with a fantastic word choice. I thought the art was very interesting and well appropriate for your written work. Great job.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Wow! what a sophisticated tongue twister. I loved it. This is a fantastic poem with a fantastic word choice. I thought the art was very interesting and well appropriate for your written work. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Amahra, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nancyrabbrose
This is an excellent poem. You painted an image of a beautiful, yet chilling scene with a sting (as you say). Your use of certain words adds richness to the poem and I like the way you wrote "sting" down the poem in a column.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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This is an excellent poem. You painted an image of a beautiful, yet chilling scene with a sting (as you say). Your use of certain words adds richness to the poem and I like the way you wrote "sting" down the poem in a column.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks, Nancy, for dropping by to review and for your generous award of six stars. Much appreciated. Tony