Mushroom Circles
ABAB quatrains68 total reviews
Comment from Daniel Silverhawk
A very eerie poem. Something different to be sure. I wonder how you find the right picture to go with the selected writing.
I learned a couple new words in reading this. Fey: adjective
giving an impression of vague unworldliness.
And bacchanal: noun
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an occasion of wild and drunken revelry.
2.
a priest, worshiper, or follower of Bacchus.
What a terrible way to go
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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A very eerie poem. Something different to be sure. I wonder how you find the right picture to go with the selected writing.
I learned a couple new words in reading this. Fey: adjective
giving an impression of vague unworldliness.
And bacchanal: noun
1.
an occasion of wild and drunken revelry.
2.
a priest, worshiper, or follower of Bacchus.
What a terrible way to go
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Daniel, for your kind review. Most affirming and appreciated.I generally find my pictures by googling for the subject including the words 'creative commons', as those pictures are either copyright free or free of charge. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from LIJ Red
The swift appearance of a mushroom from an invisible spore has always been viewed through lenses tinted with magic. Excellent rhymes and meter, and an interesting thought.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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The swift appearance of a mushroom from an invisible spore has always been viewed through lenses tinted with magic. Excellent rhymes and meter, and an interesting thought.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Red, for your review and kind comments about the rhymes and meter. I imagine that eating the fungi that grow in rings is more dangerous than stepping inside the circle! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
-I am bewitched by your progressive and demonstratively descriptive wording that echoes imagery throughout the writing, "Let Lambert leaves of oak shake off the shade, Let wind and withy spindles spin and sway, But in the faerie circle all things fade." I found that this to me was the heart of the poem in which you describe that all things within the fungi circle seemed to not grow or fade away and die. Botanically this is due because of the residue from the spores , but in actuality, it's the faerie tales that keep it alive in poem and song and writings that belong just like yours.
-What a better picture to use in the when you have chosen to support and give relativity to the poem and conceptual theme.
-Again I cannot stress enjambment more than anything in any type of poem and this one is truly exceptionally done without a hiccup or a syntactical break in any meaning or understanding of the poem.
-Smoothly your poem reads along with such fluidity that is totally in enjoyment to read.
-Thank you for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one and I don't know if you'll see the eclipse in this area but be careful if you do.
Alex
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Cheers, Tony;
-I am bewitched by your progressive and demonstratively descriptive wording that echoes imagery throughout the writing, "Let Lambert leaves of oak shake off the shade, Let wind and withy spindles spin and sway, But in the faerie circle all things fade." I found that this to me was the heart of the poem in which you describe that all things within the fungi circle seemed to not grow or fade away and die. Botanically this is due because of the residue from the spores , but in actuality, it's the faerie tales that keep it alive in poem and song and writings that belong just like yours.
-What a better picture to use in the when you have chosen to support and give relativity to the poem and conceptual theme.
-Again I cannot stress enjambment more than anything in any type of poem and this one is truly exceptionally done without a hiccup or a syntactical break in any meaning or understanding of the poem.
-Smoothly your poem reads along with such fluidity that is totally in enjoyment to read.
-Thank you for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one and I don't know if you'll see the eclipse in this area but be careful if you do.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Alex. I'm glad you enjoyed this excursion into folklore, and particularly the description of the willows and oak trees with sunlight and soft breezes playing upon them. No. we shan't be seeing the eclipse down here in Australia, but I imagine it will be quite a buzz for those who do. As you say, care needs to be taken to shield the eyes. All the best to you and yours. Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony, and take care and have a good one. We couldn't see the eclipse because were too much and fog, being close to the ocean.
Alex
Comment from misstory9197
You spun seductive and other-worldly images extremely well with this piece. Some of the words were obscure for me....I needed to look up the meaning of "bacchanal" and "lambent", but vocabulary lessons can be good. I remembered first reading about fairy circles years ago, and their mystery is fascinating. You conjured up an eerie mood and glimpse into a magical world - very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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You spun seductive and other-worldly images extremely well with this piece. Some of the words were obscure for me....I needed to look up the meaning of "bacchanal" and "lambent", but vocabulary lessons can be good. I remembered first reading about fairy circles years ago, and their mystery is fascinating. You conjured up an eerie mood and glimpse into a magical world - very well done.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
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Very many thanks for this supportive review. I'm glad you enjoyed this excursion into myth and folklore - a magical world indeed. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from apky
The first thing I thought of while reading this was a childhood belief at Uni when someone said that Christ and his disciples has some sort of magic muchroom they ate to make them venture into what we called then as Fantasialand. Your poem gives magic mushrooms a totally "The Revelations" of the New Testament a whole new lease.
Thanks for posting this.
Have a fab weekend.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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The first thing I thought of while reading this was a childhood belief at Uni when someone said that Christ and his disciples has some sort of magic muchroom they ate to make them venture into what we called then as Fantasialand. Your poem gives magic mushrooms a totally "The Revelations" of the New Testament a whole new lease.
Thanks for posting this.
Have a fab weekend.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, apky, for your review and interesting comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from sharonlshelley
nice little poem i enjoyed reading this poem lots of detail, the picture a good reflection on your work, thank you for sharing your work with us Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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nice little poem i enjoyed reading this poem lots of detail, the picture a good reflection on your work, thank you for sharing your work with us Sharon
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Sharon, for your review and comment about the attention to detail. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Liberty Justice
Mushroom Circles by tfawcus a very dramatic display of work with spicy alterations Moody personification making very mesmerizing enchanting rhymes. liberty justice WELL DONE!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Mushroom Circles by tfawcus a very dramatic display of work with spicy alterations Moody personification making very mesmerizing enchanting rhymes. liberty justice WELL DONE!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, LJ, for your review and six star award. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from R.A.Partin
A poem with much whimsy, based on the idea of faerie circles. The descriptive language is beautiful and the alliteration and rhyming makes this poem a lot of fun to read. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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A poem with much whimsy, based on the idea of faerie circles. The descriptive language is beautiful and the alliteration and rhyming makes this poem a lot of fun to read. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for dropping by to review and for your comments about the alliteration and rhyming. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from F. Wehr3
Nice work! This is terrific in the use of alliteration and strong word choice. I was a little confused in the last stanza. Were you referring to an orgy of sorts with the use of bacchanal. Or is there another definition.
Well done,
Russell
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Nice work! This is terrific in the use of alliteration and strong word choice. I was a little confused in the last stanza. Were you referring to an orgy of sorts with the use of bacchanal. Or is there another definition.
Well done,
Russell
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Russell, for your review and six star award. Much appreciated. The last stanza was intended as a connection with the woodland sprites of Roman mythology. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from DR DIP
t you have a wonderful way with words and your rhyming is exquisite. Wonderfully descriptive and flowing , the photo enhances the words beautifully Thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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t you have a wonderful way with words and your rhyming is exquisite. Wonderfully descriptive and flowing , the photo enhances the words beautifully Thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017
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Many thanks, Dip, for your review and kind comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony