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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "haiku suite (gills-gasping fish)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
53 total reviews
Comment from Mary Wakeford
I can't remember if I reviewed it the first time you posted, so to
"Air" in your favor, here you go!
WONDERFUL! So many cliched terms, heir apparent; fly fishing; seafood flown daily...
Loved it, Andrea.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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I can't remember if I reviewed it the first time you posted, so to
"Air" in your favor, here you go!
WONDERFUL! So many cliched terms, heir apparent; fly fishing; seafood flown daily...
Loved it, Andrea.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Mary, for your review. I am glad you found these WONDERFUL!
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
How well written. I love this line 'eagle fly fish towards eaglets gaping beak'
All of us work for our family
Have a nice day
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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How well written. I love this line 'eagle fly fish towards eaglets gaping beak'
All of us work for our family
Have a nice day
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Lova, for your review. I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from robyn corum
gills-gasping fish
swishes against eagle's grip
air apparent
Sis,
This is a great haiku and I really enjoyed it, the trouble is that the fish category is closed. You're just a weee bit late to move this over. But I do love it!
Thank you!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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gills-gasping fish
swishes against eagle's grip
air apparent
Sis,
This is a great haiku and I really enjoyed it, the trouble is that the fish category is closed. You're just a weee bit late to move this over. But I do love it!
Thank you!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Robyn, I entered this not in the fish category but in the air category. My haiku is there in the book now. I already have another fish haiku in that category posted in the book. Other categories do not have enough to make a chapter. Thank you for your review.
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ahhhh.... I see now! Thanks! Which categories don't have enough?
Comment from misscookie
Not only did I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
I love the words that you wrote.
What an amazing thing to see an eagle do such a thing
thank you for sharing.
Cookie.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Not only did I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
I love the words that you wrote.
What an amazing thing to see an eagle do such a thing
thank you for sharing.
Cookie.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Cookie, for your review. I deeply appreciate it. I was amazed to see an eagle with a fish in flight.
You're very welcome.
Have a blessed day.
cookie
Comment from nomi338
I have experienced the feeling of doom this poor fish must have felt. That is if fish are even capable of such feelings. I once faced a desperately afraid and nervous teenaged robber holding a gun aimed at my face. Sensing my impending doom, I engaged in some of my most convincing speak ever. Fortunately I was able to reason with him and I lived to talk and write about it. I was scared as hell though.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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I have experienced the feeling of doom this poor fish must have felt. That is if fish are even capable of such feelings. I once faced a desperately afraid and nervous teenaged robber holding a gun aimed at my face. Sensing my impending doom, I engaged in some of my most convincing speak ever. Fortunately I was able to reason with him and I lived to talk and write about it. I was scared as hell though.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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nomi338, same here. I once had a white shopkeeper hold a gun to my face because he thought I was going to steal his old records. Like you, "I engaged in some of my most convincing speech ever," and lived to tell my story. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The eagle is a great fisherman and usually got the fish he aimed for then he take them for a flight before he feed his chicks.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The eagle is a great fisherman and usually got the fish he aimed for then he take them for a flight before he feed his chicks.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for your review. I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
H friend, this is a great picture that compliments the write very well. I see this picture on Tv almost everyday . This writing tells exactly what is happening ,specially the babies to dvour the fish alive.
It s grim, but it is nature.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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H friend, this is a great picture that compliments the write very well. I see this picture on Tv almost everyday . This writing tells exactly what is happening ,specially the babies to dvour the fish alive.
It s grim, but it is nature.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Yes, Danny Jock, this is grim, but nature. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sis - two very good haiku with, in both cases, lines one and two interconnecting perfectly. Lines 3 in both haiku are good satori. You are so good at this form of poetry. Brilliant and perfectly chosen picture. Interesting author notes and what a thrill to see that bald eagle fly over with its catch. Well done - worthy entry to the book. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Hi Sis - two very good haiku with, in both cases, lines one and two interconnecting perfectly. Lines 3 in both haiku are good satori. You are so good at this form of poetry. Brilliant and perfectly chosen picture. Interesting author notes and what a thrill to see that bald eagle fly over with its catch. Well done - worthy entry to the book. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Dorothy, for your review. of "two very good haiku." I appreciate your warm regards.
Comment from DR DIP
I like the pun on heir (air) apparent very witty. What an amazing creature an eagle is. amazing vision. Great photo to go with your descriptive words.
dip
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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I like the pun on heir (air) apparent very witty. What an amazing creature an eagle is. amazing vision. Great photo to go with your descriptive words.
dip
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Dip, for your review. I deeply appreciate it. I am glad you like the pun.
Comment from bookishfabler
Another wonderful poem. Actually two poems. Do you see the photo first and then come up with the Haiku? or do you write them and hunt down the photo on Google? Either way it is very creative
hug
Heidi
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Another wonderful poem. Actually two poems. Do you see the photo first and then come up with the Haiku? or do you write them and hunt down the photo on Google? Either way it is very creative
hug
Heidi
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017
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Heidi, I write my haiku first based upon my observations, and then I search for a picture that approximates my vision. My poems written from life and personal experience are always better than ekphrastic poems based on someone else's picture. Thank you for your review.
