Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Nobody's Child"a place to gather my poetic forms
56 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
A somber sentiment in this nonet Luna.
Excellent word encoment to tell this young girls story.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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A somber sentiment in this nonet Luna.
Excellent word encoment to tell this young girls story.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Janet, thank you and for the good luck wishes!!! ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
Comment from jmcfadden1528
I enjoyed this poem as I enjoy all of your work. It is a sad poem, yet a reality for many. You do a great job of diving into the feelings of such a sad situation and the longing for love felt by women of this type. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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I enjoyed this poem as I enjoy all of your work. It is a sad poem, yet a reality for many. You do a great job of diving into the feelings of such a sad situation and the longing for love felt by women of this type. Keep writing, and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Thank you for your gracious review!
Always,
Luna
Comment from DR DIP
Really well written as usual. Reminds me of a few country music songs Or something that Neil young would write...one of my favourite artist I have been a Neil young Tragic all my life
thanks for posting
I am going to write a poem/song inspired by yours
dip
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Really well written as usual. Reminds me of a few country music songs Or something that Neil young would write...one of my favourite artist I have been a Neil young Tragic all my life
thanks for posting
I am going to write a poem/song inspired by yours
dip
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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What a high compliment, dip!
I'll fan you so I can read that poem when it comes out.
When it comes to Neil, I don't have enough words.. We've got music in common. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
Comment from fafa
In this poem you open your feelings of impeccable form, show the connection that it joins and you demonstrate a rewarded art, greetings and blessings
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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In this poem you open your feelings of impeccable form, show the connection that it joins and you demonstrate a rewarded art, greetings and blessings
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Again I thank you for this review and for your attention to my work!
Comment from Nika2016
Well Luna..I think you are a man writing this as women do not have to look for "lovin'"..it comes to them...Any half way decent looking woman knows this..but often rejects advances.....Now...true love is a different animal ...that often takes much longer...
However...the poem is interesting as a psychological/sociological study...
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Well Luna..I think you are a man writing this as women do not have to look for "lovin'"..it comes to them...Any half way decent looking woman knows this..but often rejects advances.....Now...true love is a different animal ...that often takes much longer...
However...the poem is interesting as a psychological/sociological study...
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Thanks for your read and opinion i have to tell you that I am indeed a woman, and undergoing abuse and neglect in life normally causes women of low self esteem to accept hurtful love and one night stands in the pursuit of what they never had. Only when we can love ourselves can we find a healthy love. That is my and many other women's experience.
Again, thanks and enjoy your day!!! ❤️ ❤️
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Are you saying that truckers are the only option? Because that scenario is hurtful in itself. One sets ones self up for more hurt. Something tells me they have not studied psychology...It would be better to be alone with self-respect and a good therapist..... Many of us have been abused...Choice is personal though....Have a great day...
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I don't want to get into a lengthy back and forth. Some women, like me, who were heavily into substance and suffered significant trauma, 6 years in childhood and twice in adulthood take a little longer to fine that they need therapists and that self-respect wins out. I had no self respect for years and neither did many other women I know. I'm not saying truck stops are the only thing, not at all...I never picked up anyone at a truckstop, that was just my imagination (sort of, as I did know women who did that.).
Let's agree to disagree if we can't come to a resolution on this. I respect your opinion, please have the courtest to respect mine. You are entitled to your opinion just as I am. Cheers!
(by the way, I surely didn't study psychology...I hardly attended high school, I skipped and was messed up in school too much to get anything but just a passing grade. I was, however excellent at typing and at my best could type 113 a min. I worked as an executive legal secretary for 25 years when I got my shit together at long last. Have a great night.
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No back and forth...I do respect the way
you achieved this position...and obviously your poetry shines for readers...Good night...Jeni Smoker..:)
Comment from Craigitar
Very good! This poem conjures images from almost 50 years ago. I worked at a small burger joint at the junction of two highways. Truck drivers and other travelers would stop for gas and food from the several businesses. From my vantage point working the front window, I could keep track of the old gal who "befriended" the truckers. Your poem takes me back to that time. Well done and thanks for the little trip back in time.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Very good! This poem conjures images from almost 50 years ago. I worked at a small burger joint at the junction of two highways. Truck drivers and other travelers would stop for gas and food from the several businesses. From my vantage point working the front window, I could keep track of the old gal who "befriended" the truckers. Your poem takes me back to that time. Well done and thanks for the little trip back in time.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Wow, so you get it. Thanks for reading and reviewing! ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
Comment from LIJ Red
The nonet counts right and has a message, about truckers and truck stops and the lonely people who hang around them...Shel Silverstein was good on painting such places...excellent poetry contest entry, I think.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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The nonet counts right and has a message, about truckers and truck stops and the lonely people who hang around them...Shel Silverstein was good on painting such places...excellent poetry contest entry, I think.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Thanks, Red. I'm thrilled at the mention of Shel Silverstein. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and your kind words of review.
Happy holidays,
jeni
Comment from WalkerMan
The silent anguish of some (too many) lives is painful to contemplate. We all need love -- or, at least, touch -- lest we slowly shrivel up, both emotionally and physically, until we die sooner than we would have. Loneliness is not a crime to be further punished. Whether she stumbles upon a soulmate who will make her lastingly happy, or just finds warm arms for a few hours, it is better than waiting alone for one who'll never return (regardless of the reason). You convey the scene and feelings well.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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The silent anguish of some (too many) lives is painful to contemplate. We all need love -- or, at least, touch -- lest we slowly shrivel up, both emotionally and physically, until we die sooner than we would have. Loneliness is not a crime to be further punished. Whether she stumbles upon a soulmate who will make her lastingly happy, or just finds warm arms for a few hours, it is better than waiting alone for one who'll never return (regardless of the reason). You convey the scene and feelings well.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2016
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Dear Wakeman... Thanks for your review and suggestion. I indeed have a membership with dreamstime, however I've been lackadaisical about crediting the source, I agree. ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
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You are most welcome, Jeni. If you replace that image either with a licensed one or a different one that is free, just tell me and I'll remove that lengthy comment from the review. I like your post, so it would be nice to have only the main review there. -- Mike
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Hi, I've taken your suggestion and changed the art to a pic available on Fanart. Hippie you like it better!
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*hope
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Yes, I see the change and have revised the review. But would she have gone to an abandoned truck stop to find love? (I'm not trying to hassle you, just looking at the logic of the situation.) -- Mike
Comment from mbroyles2
This one has great visualization.
With a great descriptive tone.
Easy to read and follow.
Hopefully she doesn't find more than she bargains for.
Truck stops can do that to you.
Great job!
Michael
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This one has great visualization.
With a great descriptive tone.
Easy to read and follow.
Hopefully she doesn't find more than she bargains for.
Truck stops can do that to you.
Great job!
Michael
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a beautifully sad poem about a nobody's child seeking love in the only places she knows. More than the shape and structure of this poem, it resonated with me because of the pictures and the emotions you paint. They are vivid and I can feel them. This shows her desperation:
"She's nobody's child, walking alone
needs her some good dime store lovin'
ramblin' man's been long, long gone"
This evocative poem is compelling.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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This is a beautifully sad poem about a nobody's child seeking love in the only places she knows. More than the shape and structure of this poem, it resonated with me because of the pictures and the emotions you paint. They are vivid and I can feel them. This shows her desperation:
"She's nobody's child, walking alone
needs her some good dime store lovin'
ramblin' man's been long, long gone"
This evocative poem is compelling.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2016
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Sis Cat, I'm thrilled at what you had to say about my poem, and honored as well Thanks for again taking the time to read my work and your kind words of review.
Happy holidays,
jeni
