Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Roy. Your poem is a reminder that everything has its time under Heaven. There is a heyday for everything, birth, maturity, and finally death. It's just the way of things. Well composed and rhymed. Marilyn

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks Msrilyn. for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, thank you! blessings, Roy

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

A warning unheeded.
A history repeated.
Life thought invincible.
People in for a rude awakening.
You have captured it all, but still we cant listen

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks Barb, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, thank you! blessings, Roy

Comment from catch22

Excellent

Hi Roy, I like the thoughts in this write about humility before the big picture. I think arrogance and complacency are dangerous qualities for a nation to have. Excellent smooth flowing poem outlining your thoughts on the rise and fall of nations.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, thank you! blessings, Roy

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Roy,
I enjoyed your poem. You did a great job with the rhyme, smooth flow, & great examples to prove your point.

You are right. One cannot walk with God if his heart & soul are elsewhere in material things.

The US is so far from its original beliefs & ideas that many do not know or care to know what they were/are. It is a scary time we live in today.

Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks Jan, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, thank you! blessings, Roy

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Found a mistake in spelling, In the third line of the third stanza, you have spelled the word as "bibpld" when it should be "Bible" - not sure it is capitalized. Lovely poem Roy.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thanks Alan, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, and the nit, blessings, Roy

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Every democracy has folded after a few hundred years. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Error
The bibple (Bible)says walk humbly with

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thanks Charlie, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Remember, God can build you up but also tear you down; and if your pride has been misplaced, you'll wear a tarnished crown...... so true. I agree with you. Since the beginning of time, many great cultures and empires have risen and fall... due to immorality

Good job, Roy,
gypsy

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thanks Gypsy, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy

Comment from Lisa Deverick

Excellent

This is a powerful piece that strongly states what is at hand when pride becomes prevalent in ones life- individually and also as a nation. One nation under God... what happens when we move from under His protection??
Note- spelling error in your last stanza (bible) Let me know if you correct it and I will remove this note

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thanks Like, for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, I've corrected the spelling glitch, thank you! blessings, Roy

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hi Roy;
-In the 11th line you wrote the word "bibple", did you mean to write Bible?
-Your writing of your poem was effectively written in heptameter and with some lines were in iambic with a well rhyming format written in couplets. Not only was the technique excellent butcher writing's Theme was effectively not exaggerated lately and plainly clear when you are specially wrote the words: "Remember God can build you up but also tear you down," And since we have abandoned him with our countries own private pride with animosity towards others in these times when terrorism and conquests loom about.
-I believe you wrote we are heading in the wrong direction with a horrible legacy for our children every continue to escape the reality of how this country was created and forgetting what stands in the harbor from New York and hold the torch welcoming the outsiders who are suppressed and in need for a warm hand and recognition to save them.
-You compared us to the nations who have become great and fallen because of their pride and a reduced faith in a power greater than themselves that originally held their country together. If we continued on our high horse and fanciful pride we will fall off the horse and lose sight what brought us to our greatness.
-When you wrote the last two lines in that read ...."The Bible says walk humbly with your God 'cause He promotes and you will find if you wear pride.... You wear waste tattered coat."
-Thanks so much for sharing and take care and have a good one Roy.
Alex

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thanks Alex for these insightful in depth words and great review I appreciate it, I've corrected the glitch, blessings, Roy

reply by krys123 on 29-Jul-2016

You are so very welcome Roy.
Alex

Comment from Delahay

Excellent

There have been innumerable great civilizations that have risen and fallen throughout history. It seems as if each forgets its original purpose.

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2016

Thanks for these insightful words and great review I appreciate it, blessings, Roy