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Viewing comments for Chapter 61 "African Wind"possible selections for inclusion in book project
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Great poem, and great presentation, which always adds to the pleasure of reading your work. And of course, a certain sense of humor, even in the most serious of offerings. Thanks for another fine read. :-)
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Great poem, and great presentation, which always adds to the pleasure of reading your work. And of course, a certain sense of humor, even in the most serious of offerings. Thanks for another fine read. :-)
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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For once, I like my own poem. Glad you do to. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Lovely entry, Mikey. Beautiful presentation, too. What is rare? The African wind or the lady? Or maybe both. Your poems are often hard to understand, but they sure have a wonderful sound/feel/tone. :)
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Lovely entry, Mikey. Beautiful presentation, too. What is rare? The African wind or the lady? Or maybe both. Your poems are often hard to understand, but they sure have a wonderful sound/feel/tone. :)
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Oh, the lady I would say, but yes, both. The sound/feel/tone is what I'm after, so I think you do have it. It doesn't really mean anymore than that. Ha! Just as cryptic as the poem. LOL mikey
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Free Verse Poem, the African wind is blowing right now outside my window, I clearly understand and hear the African wind. Lol.
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A very well-written Free Verse Poem, the African wind is blowing right now outside my window, I clearly understand and hear the African wind. Lol.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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I adore the way you put things. I'm so pleased to hear you say, "the African wind is blowing now, outside my window." That is so very cool. Thank you, mikey
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Thank you, I just say what your poem made me feel to say. One of my weaknesses.
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It's a strength. We love to hear how our work makes someone feel and you are soooo good at describing it. The BEST! mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
I think this is an excellent free verse poem. It sings to me and that is what the wind - anywhere's wind should do. I can see what you are are trying to do with the monochrome effect and I I have looked at it both on tablet and lap-top in both the standard and classic view but it is not quite working - at least not all of it. The middle bit that highlights the piano keys where the written line is extented. that is where I am losing the words.
Obviously when I struggle they are there but they don't stand out. They should here because the idea of you all around me is central to the poem. Perhaps, after the word listen there mightr be several lines break so that the long, spread out line might come against a darker ground.
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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I think this is an excellent free verse poem. It sings to me and that is what the wind - anywhere's wind should do. I can see what you are are trying to do with the monochrome effect and I I have looked at it both on tablet and lap-top in both the standard and classic view but it is not quite working - at least not all of it. The middle bit that highlights the piano keys where the written line is extented. that is where I am losing the words.
Obviously when I struggle they are there but they don't stand out. They should here because the idea of you all around me is central to the poem. Perhaps, after the word listen there mightr be several lines break so that the long, spread out line might come against a darker ground.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Hmm. It seems to show up well on my equipment. But I will take a look at that. Yes, anywhere's wind will do, exactly right. I was hoping that would be perceived. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from Linda Engel
I know, for me, that music inspires me the most to write, It boosts my creative juices and takes me to places of my desires. This is what hubby and I call our alternative music.. We have about a dozen or more CD's of this type. Beautiful mood music. Makes you just want on sit on a pillow out in a field in lotus position and drink in God's wonder. (In my case I'd be sitting on a huge porch of a cabin in the mountains.) Thank you for sharing. There ins't enough soothing music in the world.
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I know, for me, that music inspires me the most to write, It boosts my creative juices and takes me to places of my desires. This is what hubby and I call our alternative music.. We have about a dozen or more CD's of this type. Beautiful mood music. Makes you just want on sit on a pillow out in a field in lotus position and drink in God's wonder. (In my case I'd be sitting on a huge porch of a cabin in the mountains.) Thank you for sharing. There ins't enough soothing music in the world.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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I must admit, strangely enough, as a musician, this is the very first time I have ever written to music. Isn't that strange? I so enjoyed the experience. I really like this piece myself and I don't like any of my work. I understand everything you're saying and I bet I wouldn't have before I wrote this. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from Sanku
I saw a pianist,perhaps pouring out his soul. The silhouette suggested a kind of sadness or it could be my current mood reflecting on my reading. "African wind "-was it with a special emphasis on African sunset because most of the scenes accompanying the music were that of sunset.The free verse flowed beautifully, dense with unsaid emotions and it felt like a gentle trip on a magic carpet over the clouds.The music was very evocative and i felt as if i was listening to the strains of a forgotten melody. I am coming to the site quite some time and this is the first poem I chose to read.I thought of a man saying these words to his woman- an invitation to understand him (or is it a plea?) I enjoyed reading and analysing it.Thanks for posting.
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I saw a pianist,perhaps pouring out his soul. The silhouette suggested a kind of sadness or it could be my current mood reflecting on my reading. "African wind "-was it with a special emphasis on African sunset because most of the scenes accompanying the music were that of sunset.The free verse flowed beautifully, dense with unsaid emotions and it felt like a gentle trip on a magic carpet over the clouds.The music was very evocative and i felt as if i was listening to the strains of a forgotten melody. I am coming to the site quite some time and this is the first poem I chose to read.I thought of a man saying these words to his woman- an invitation to understand him (or is it a plea?) I enjoyed reading and analysing it.Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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This is one of the most insightful and rewarding reviews I've ever received. Your words resonate beautifully with me and make me so pleased I wrote this. Thanks so much for paying so much regard to my efforts. I'm truly humbled by your response. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from DR DIP
Nice really nice and a very appropriate song by Enya goes so well when you read it Nice accompanying photo underlaying the poem
dip
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Nice really nice and a very appropriate song by Enya goes so well when you read it Nice accompanying photo underlaying the poem
dip
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Hey, Dip, nice to see you in this neck of the woods.
She's terrific, isn't she?
Glad you liked this one. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from mfowler
This is a great free verse because it is free, free as an African wind. There's love and music and night, and that warm African win stirring the emotions. Your use of line, sparse wording, emotional invitation and colour really lift this. I'm glad you kept it short, not because I'm lazy, but because it says exactly what is needed to create the mood, tell the story, and draw the reader in. Really loved your approach here.
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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This is a great free verse because it is free, free as an African wind. There's love and music and night, and that warm African win stirring the emotions. Your use of line, sparse wording, emotional invitation and colour really lift this. I'm glad you kept it short, not because I'm lazy, but because it says exactly what is needed to create the mood, tell the story, and draw the reader in. Really loved your approach here.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 20-May-2016
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Hi, Mark
Exactly what I was hoping to here. This is the first time I ever wrote something to the music I was listening to. I liked the experience and I actually like this myself. RARE.
I'm delighted with your response. Yes! mikey
Comment from dmt1967
I love the music and the pictures of all those sunsets. I never saw a woman but I did feel calm and the music moved me. I liked the picture of the pianist and the poems words. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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I love the music and the pictures of all those sunsets. I never saw a woman but I did feel calm and the music moved me. I liked the picture of the pianist and the poems words. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi. Wonderful review. Oh, I would expect everyone to see something different, their own visions. Mainly feelings like you describe, a mood. I'm pleased you enjoyed. Thanks for listening and reading. I appreciate it. mikey
Comment from Mary Wakeford
In addition to being a beautifully written free verse, the artful presentation is stunning! "You are all around me, free to be" favored line as I think of the piano's music surrounding the lovely lady as love would. Good luck in t he contest!
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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In addition to being a beautifully written free verse, the artful presentation is stunning! "You are all around me, free to be" favored line as I think of the piano's music surrounding the lovely lady as love would. Good luck in t he contest!
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi. Mary.
So pleased you enjoyed that particular line. It's the one that pleases me the most when I'm listening to this. I actually like this myself which is most unusual for me. Big smiles, mikey