2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "haiku (cut down trees)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from ravenblack
Breathtaking ignorance- I really like your satori. Breathtaking as in unbelievable ignorance and breathtaking as in ignorance that is literally robbing us of breath. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Breathtaking ignorance- I really like your satori. Breathtaking as in unbelievable ignorance and breathtaking as in ignorance that is literally robbing us of breath. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the review and feedback. I appreciate you taking the time. to read my haiku. :)
Comment from royowen
So much truth in this fine entry in this Haiku death in nature! This is a worthy entry, the killing and deforestation of trees certainly won't do any good for the pollution around us, perceptive work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
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So much truth in this fine entry in this Haiku death in nature! This is a worthy entry, the killing and deforestation of trees certainly won't do any good for the pollution around us, perceptive work, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the review and feedback. I appreciate you taking the time. to read my haiku. :)
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Most welcome
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
You have constructed a super entry for that writing prompt.
That's an incredible photo that you found to go along with
your poem. I agree with your satori and using "breathe" and
"breathtaking" was good.
Nice job,
Linda
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Poet,
You have constructed a super entry for that writing prompt.
That's an incredible photo that you found to go along with
your poem. I agree with your satori and using "breathe" and
"breathtaking" was good.
Nice job,
Linda
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the review and feedback. I appreciate you taking the time. to read my haiku. :)
Comment from Ben Colder
Oh, the folly of man. Removes oxygen givers, now what? I have a problem with the series of the Axemen destroying. I remove trees on my place for growth but care for the others.
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Oh, the folly of man. Removes oxygen givers, now what? I have a problem with the series of the Axemen destroying. I remove trees on my place for growth but care for the others.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the review and feedback. I appreciate you taking the time. to read my haiku. :)
Comment from JanPerry
Very clever in art and form. The shape of the trees in lungs is unique and stylish.
We need the trees for oxygen but we need the wood to make things like houses, tools etc.
We can't have it both ways I'm afraid. Although, they do replant the trees to replenish the earth too.
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Very clever in art and form. The shape of the trees in lungs is unique and stylish.
We need the trees for oxygen but we need the wood to make things like houses, tools etc.
We can't have it both ways I'm afraid. Although, they do replant the trees to replenish the earth too.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and your feedback. :)
Comment from LIJ Red
To me this means, "Go and cut down all the trees that will not help you breathe."
Is that what you meant? Or was it "Go cut the trees that will help you breathe."
My failure to understand is trivial. Give the judges what they want.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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To me this means, "Go and cut down all the trees that will not help you breathe."
Is that what you meant? Or was it "Go cut the trees that will help you breathe."
My failure to understand is trivial. Give the judges what they want.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
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Hello, I thought the haiku is pretty clear, everybody else is getting it. ALL trees and plants produce oxygent. Cutting too many trees is bad if we want oxyget to breath. Thank you for the review.
Comment from c_lucas
Trees produces oxygen. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
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Trees produces oxygen. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much c lucas. I appreciate your excellent review. :)
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You're welcome.
Comment from seaglass
This is a little poem with a lot of wisdom. Harvesting the rainforests and other helpful tree areas is stupidity. Good play on words with "breathtaking"
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This is a little poem with a lot of wisdom. Harvesting the rainforests and other helpful tree areas is stupidity. Good play on words with "breathtaking"
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from Nosha17
Deforestation has seen so many animals losing their habitat-how foolish is man. Excellent message, we need fresh air, not pollution. Good luck in the contest. faye
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Deforestation has seen so many animals losing their habitat-how foolish is man. Excellent message, we need fresh air, not pollution. Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. :)
Comment from wordspinner314
The image you chose is very powerful and compliments your poem beautifully. I really like your line, "breathtaking ignorance." Although I personally think the trees are more breathtaking than anything achieved by cutting them down, I realize people do it for all sorts of purposes, and many do it to achieve breathtaking views. The way you worded this says it so well!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2015
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The image you chose is very powerful and compliments your poem beautifully. I really like your line, "breathtaking ignorance." Although I personally think the trees are more breathtaking than anything achieved by cutting them down, I realize people do it for all sorts of purposes, and many do it to achieve breathtaking views. The way you worded this says it so well!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent review, I really appreciate it :)