Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

That will show that peepin tom, heheheh. I was not expecting that ending, it was good though and he deserved it. I was wondering today when you were going to write another tiny tale of horror. :)

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Now that's what you call a three dimensional show. And surround sound to follow. Sounds as if that new gal has been staking (no pun intended)her voyeur out.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi Dean I have no been around much lately. Sort of dry in the writing place,
Still, thought I would catch up with my buddies here.
Interesting wee piece...now who the hell is at the door eh..
My door is not being pounded on, that is its own type of hell,,,writers block, angst...
somehow this story makes it real....a twist of my own mind i would say.
padumachitta

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hey, Dean...

_ Uh-oh, he may be the recipient of a black candle or two or three!
_ Heck, I hope he didn't waste the butter and put it on the corn! It could leave a real mess. (*<*)
_ Another great addition to your book.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Oh, oh. Beware of "the new babe across the alley." I put off reading this because you know I do not want to read horror stories just before bedtime. "Just my dumb luck" I could not resist reading this flash fiction on a popcorn munching voyeur who never lived to receive his just deserts. Maybe he did live to receive his just deserts . . . for a few seconds. This is a well constructed flash horror fiction. Now let me return to pleasant dreams instead of screams.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Dean;
-As always being superbly entertaining and fascinating to read. I could do without the F word for I think it diminishes your style.
-I like you how you play to that audience In such a way that you capture their attendance and then scare the daylights out of them with your twisted verbalization of what's coming their way.
-Again thanks were very entertaining piece of reading and may the good Lord be with you always Dean.
Alex

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

I realize the language is a bit...colorful, Alex, to say the least. And while I never utter that word from a personal perspective, many of my characters do, unfortunately. I've know guys just like the peeping Tom in this story, my friend, and let me assure you, their language is usually far more vulgar than this guy's mouth ever thought to be. Hence, my reasons for posting the warnings for language and violence. This guy just screamed vulgarity to me, and there's only one word--a word I will never speak nor write--that is more vulgar to my ears than the "F" word.

Thanks for taking the time to review the story, and I do value your opinions very highly. I hope you understand my point of view on this one.

~Dean :}

reply by krys123 on 28-Jun-2015

I understand exactly what you mean Dean. The language that encompasses my environment is sometimes as bad as it was for you and I try very hard not to raise my blood pressure over it. but it always seems not to work.
Take care my friend and you are so very welcome.
Alex

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

dean, have you been peaking through my window again? what did I tell you about that last time? come on in and i'll be gentle....lol....your stories are gruesome but funny at the same time. I enjoyed reading it

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Okay, you caught me red handed, so to speak, Pam. I apologize. Heh-heh...
I often try to mix horror and humor. It breaks the tension up just a bit. Movies like Return of the Living Dead, Eight Legged Freaks, and that British zombie flick, Shaun of the Dead, are some of my personal faves. They all share one thing in common. They're all very funny, as well as creepy, LOL.
I very much appreciate your review. I promise, I'll stop peeking, at least before you decide to come after me.

~Dean :}

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahaha! Crikey mate! Let's hope she is in a good mood, or should that be a bad one LOL. Great stuff once again cobber, I love these little yarns, they are so cool. Well done, cheers Fez

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

You've done well once again in creating a certain mood to your story. This one has a 'trailer trash' feel to it. I envision your character as a middle age, pot bellied, tank top wearing, greaseball.
I'm curious where the neighbors are or if she still has any neighbors left, to put up with all that screaming night after night.
Very nice ending. As soon as she picked up the candles I figured the popcorn dude was about to get a visit.
Well done. Even the language creates a mental picture.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thanks, Michael, I appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me on this one.

You know how it is in big cities. You can scream bloody murder in some of your seedier parts of town, and no one even bothers to care. As for my protagonist, that's precisely how I envisioned him as well. Looks like this gal is gonna be one full succubus by the time she gets through with this creep, LOL. I guess there's just no accounting for...taste, heh-heh...

Again, I very much appreciate your review, my friend. I'm glad you liked it.

~Dean

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Dean,

Another great entry into the tiny tales of horror collection.

A much more subtle tale on display here. It is really good to have the variations and diversity.

I liked the accent used for the main character, who unfortunately unwittingly, foreshadows his own demise with the words - They never see it comin neither... not until it's too late!

Nice one

Just a couple of quick things -

couple a' black candles - should the a have an apostrophe? or should it be o'? I am not sure just a query.

it comin neither - comin'

she's grabbin her coat and leavin! - she's grabbin' her coat and leavin'!

For consistency.

All the best
G

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 Comment Written 28-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015

Thank you, Gareth. When you're right, you're right, and I'll add those apostrophes for consistencies sake. As for the story itself, you're also right. He foreshadowed his own death while reveling in the pain of others, a pain he would be experiencing himself all too soon.

I very much appreciate your thoughtful review and assistance. Keep 'em honest, that's my motto, LOL.

~Dean :}