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Comment from Praise000
Hie PANTYGYNT,
You have carefully chosen your picture / image to go hand
in hand with your title. The poem makes a lot of sense after reading
your notes. Best wishes.
From Praise000
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Hie PANTYGYNT,
You have carefully chosen your picture / image to go hand
in hand with your title. The poem makes a lot of sense after reading
your notes. Best wishes.
From Praise000
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I thought I had answered this one but here it is again! So very many thanks again.
Comment from walbc
The Sestina is an exceptionally difficult poem to write. You have done so with great talent and artistry. Your choice of words is beautiful. Your words evoke amazing imagery. A wonderful tribute to your daughter and her craft. Warm regards, Wendy
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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The Sestina is an exceptionally difficult poem to write. You have done so with great talent and artistry. Your choice of words is beautiful. Your words evoke amazing imagery. A wonderful tribute to your daughter and her craft. Warm regards, Wendy
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thank you so much for your understanding and complimentary review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I like to paint on wood that is left on the beaches where I live, and on the sea glass that washes up. Broken shells are my canvases. It is very true about turning the sea rubbish into the truth. Most artist love the act of turning something dismissed or ordinary into something that will be cherished. Beautifully written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I like to paint on wood that is left on the beaches where I live, and on the sea glass that washes up. Broken shells are my canvases. It is very true about turning the sea rubbish into the truth. Most artist love the act of turning something dismissed or ordinary into something that will be cherished. Beautifully written. Gretchen
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Many thanks for your review and comments
Comment from Joan E.
I have written only one sestina since the form is so difficult--what a lovely tribute to your daughter. I admired your compelling envoi and the notion "from those lies, she crafts the truth she seeks". MoonWillow's artwork parallels your theme well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I have written only one sestina since the form is so difficult--what a lovely tribute to your daughter. I admired your compelling envoi and the notion "from those lies, she crafts the truth she seeks". MoonWillow's artwork parallels your theme well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I'm sure the key to this form is getting the right six words. I realised early on that you don't want six nouns! Many thanks for your great review.
Comment from Dom G Robles
Written in Sestina, the writer explains what it is and asks to read the notes
before reading the poem. Yes, indeed, she made her point and her explanations
well. The poem paints a beauty of a scenery that is magnificent and admirable. The poem is in iambic pentameter. To appreciate the it, you really have to read the notes to have a better concept of the stanzas written. It is, to me, a little complicated, but I think, overall the poem is excellent. Dom
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Written in Sestina, the writer explains what it is and asks to read the notes
before reading the poem. Yes, indeed, she made her point and her explanations
well. The poem paints a beauty of a scenery that is magnificent and admirable. The poem is in iambic pentameter. To appreciate the it, you really have to read the notes to have a better concept of the stanzas written. It is, to me, a little complicated, but I think, overall the poem is excellent. Dom
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thasnk you for taking your time to read an dreview this poemn. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Notes informative. Picture adds illustration to this poem. Action flows smoothly. Verses fit together nicely. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Notes informative. Picture adds illustration to this poem. Action flows smoothly. Verses fit together nicely. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thanks for staying with us Brett and for a complimentary review.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Lovely poem about things crafted with driftwood etc. collected after beachcombing. Iambic pentameter maintained throughout the piece, except the penultimate line in each of the five stanzas and then again in the sixth, as you mention in your author notes. Objet trouvé in one of your lines has four syllables but without the French accent it looks like three. Readers may pick you up on this which would be a pity. I like, in your fifth stanza 'a tide, which, taken at the flood' - reminds me of a line from a speech Julius Caesar made and happens to be one of my favourite quotes. A very well written poem, beautifully written and a joy to read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Lovely poem about things crafted with driftwood etc. collected after beachcombing. Iambic pentameter maintained throughout the piece, except the penultimate line in each of the five stanzas and then again in the sixth, as you mention in your author notes. Objet trouvé in one of your lines has four syllables but without the French accent it looks like three. Readers may pick you up on this which would be a pity. I like, in your fifth stanza 'a tide, which, taken at the flood' - reminds me of a line from a speech Julius Caesar made and happens to be one of my favourite quotes. A very well written poem, beautifully written and a joy to read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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As I explained in my notes I can't get the acute accent on the e. And blow me down - neither can you! So far you are the only one to mention it. I must have a word with Tom about it I think. Man y thanks for your kind review.
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Hi - normally a word without the accent would not matter, but with the rigid syllable count that seems to be the norm on FS it could be picked up and give criticism. I should have read your author notes more carefully LOL. Dx
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Apparently I have to use the advanced editor - something else I have to come to grips with. I entirely agree with you, in this instance it is important.
Comment from jennifdrake
Amazing work! You stayed so true to form. From the first line, you drew me in -- I could almost feel the wet sand and smell the salty air. I am a fan, sir, and look forward to reading more from you. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Amazing work! You stayed so true to form. From the first line, you drew me in -- I could almost feel the wet sand and smell the salty air. I am a fan, sir, and look forward to reading more from you. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I am honoured that you liked it so much. There is plenty more where this came from. Thanks for your great review and that sixth star.
Comment from lakeport
Drifting sculptress, indeed some natural treasures from the sea. I enjoyed reading it, very nice flow, like the sea. I enjoyed reading it, God bless you. Lakeport.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Drifting sculptress, indeed some natural treasures from the sea. I enjoyed reading it, very nice flow, like the sea. I enjoyed reading it, God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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Thanking you for reading it - so glad you enjoyed it and many thanks for youyr review.
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you are very welcome, Lakeport.
Comment from sgalletti
I am extremely impressed with this wonderful sestina. You are so right that it is a very difficult form to execute due to the requirements you explain so well in your author notes. I've written a few, so my appreciation is based on experience. Wonderful, consistent meter, consonance and rhyme throughout. But, what particularly impressed me was the content. Your daughter must have been thrilled. It is a pleasure to read such an excellent piece of poetry on this site. Sue
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I am extremely impressed with this wonderful sestina. You are so right that it is a very difficult form to execute due to the requirements you explain so well in your author notes. I've written a few, so my appreciation is based on experience. Wonderful, consistent meter, consonance and rhyme throughout. But, what particularly impressed me was the content. Your daughter must have been thrilled. It is a pleasure to read such an excellent piece of poetry on this site. Sue
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
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I am overwhemed. Many thanks indeed for this wonderful review ans the sixpack of stars.