Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Easy to guess who wrote this! I picked up on the misspelling right off. Neat foreshadowing with words like
skeletal, tricks and sleight of hand. What a scary picture!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2015

Thanks, Shari. I appreciate your review and I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading this short story. I'm very grateful for the review. :)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This one definitely scares me with the creepiest video clips ever. The eerie music, gloomy Ferris wheel, and intriguing story make this one stand out.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thank you very much for the positive feedback and comments for this write, Bill. All are deeply appreciated. :}

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

What great creativity employed here.
Love the tragic twist at the end
Stunning presentation and a strong entry in the contest.
As usual us write the best horror stories and poems
Good luck

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for the positive feedback and complimentary comments, EM. I really appreciate your review. :}

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A huge crowd can hide a successful kidnapping. An evil being could easily hide his misdeeds. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thank you very much for the positive feedback, Charlie. I greatly appreciate it, my friend. :}

reply by c_lucas on 18-Apr-2015

You're welcome

Comment from kriver

Exceptional

Hi,
Whoa! Now that is really creeeeeeeeeppppppy including the weird picture of the clown.
A very descriptive write.
A very effective twist at the end.
Excellent scene descriptions.
Very good suspense build up. I think it would be a good start to a horror thriller type story.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Hey, thanks a bunch for checking this one out for me, kriver. I really appreciate your very generous rating and positive feedback. I'm also very glad that you enjoyed reading the story. :)

Comment from mauidux1963

Excellent

Thanks for the nightmares I will no doubt have tonight.....Clowns scare the crap outa me!! Well written.....I wish you well in the contest. Now I have to go watch "I love lucy" to try and wash this scarey story outa my head!!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Heh-heh...don't mention it, mauidux1963, it was my pleasure, and thank you very much for reading my story and offering up your opinions. I've always felt that Lucille Ball's make-up -- those bright red lips and eye shadow -- looked a bit clown-like myself. Perhaps Archie and Edith Bunker would be a better fix?

Thanks so much again for your review. :)

Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

Wow! This piece was very well written. It was interesting and it held my attention like quicksand. I enjoyed the narration of the story too. I enjoyed reading this cute but scary little story.

Always with respect,

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thank you, Eigle Rull. I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. I very much appreciate your positive feedback, my friend. :}

Comment from Mands

Excellent

Great story! In 148 words you created a world filled with noise and smells and I felt I was there. Loved the twist at the end and you just know those kids are not laughing anymore. Loved it :-)

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thanks for your kind words and encouraging comments, Mands. I sincerely appreciate it. :)

Comment from Debbie Noland

Excellent

This is macabre, with its sinister clown character once again spiriting away the innocents. The irony here is fierce, with something so diabolical occurring against a backdrop of merriment and carnival frivolity. That last sentence is a gut-clenched, as what has happened becomes horribly clear without actually being stated. Just for fun, you might check "sleight" of hand and the use of grim as a noun.


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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thanks, Debbie, I'll do just that. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and the suggestion. Thanks you very much for reading this. ~Anonymous

reply by Debbie Noland on 17-Apr-2015

Ok, I meant gut-clencheR. Geez.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

The true grim. At first I thought a typo, then I wasn't so sure! The mask of the clown conceals hidden depths within us all. Carnevil, carnivale, carnival - each has its aftertaste of evil. Farewell to meat.

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 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Clowns scare so many, Tony. I was never afraid of them as a kid myself, however all of my friends were and wouldn't go near them. Me, I was the crazy kid who'd crawl right up in their laps. It's a wonder I'm still here, heh-heh.

Much obliged for the review... Anonymous