Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

A haunting artwork. Definitely, the likes of the renowned author (Dean Kuch). The narrative, the description, the suspense, the thrill. You involve the reader's mind in the process of writing. Very refreshing.
Jack had come home.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, Daniel, I appreciate it. I could have written ten times this amount on such a topic. But, it is a fifty-word contest, so...

Thanks so much again.

reply by DanielEkine on 02-Jul-2014

I can imagine. Smiles.

Comment from babylonia

Exceptional

Dean,
I really, REALLY like your take on Jack & Jill. The picture is great too. Easy to read and follow. No spaggies do I see. Best of luck with this one.
Love,
Barbara

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks a bunch, Barbara. I've missed you around here lately. I hope to see some new work posted by you very soon.

Respectfully,

Dean~

reply by babylonia on 02-Jul-2014

Dean,
You're so welcome. Yeah, I was actually going to post something the other day for a contest but was told I was too late. Sigh. I hope to have some new work up soonest.
Love,
Barbara

reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

I keep a lookout for it. :]

reply by babylonia on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks

Comment from a.w.brooks

Exceptional

Jake and Jill went up the Hill
Jill threw Jack in the Well
Jake came up from the pit and grab Jill's arm
and Jill Shouted Awww What the Hell

Lol great 50 words man loved it this is a number one in my book I hope you win. Thanks for writing and hope you like my little poem there. Not as good as you but I thought it was funny. Thanks again Happy Writing

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Hah, that was g-r-r-r-r-r-e-a-t stuff there, a.w.! You shoulda' posted it, LOL. Of course, you may get blasted for meter and rhythm by the poetic police, but who's countin' syllables here?

Thanks so much for your poetic response (that was fun!), and your six star rating. Both are truly appreciated.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Dean - LOL I am not surprised at your take on it. But I did think your descriptive pen was powerful and screaming all on its own....till mine came along that is.
Great job,
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, Maureen, my dear. I appreciate that! :)

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I guess Jack isn't a cute little furry bunny, is he? Oh well, you wrote an entire story is just fifty 50 words. That's more than I can do. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Ah, I'm quite certain you're more than capable of pulling it off, Barbara, especially as talented a writer as you are. It is challenging. However, I've no doubt you would do just fine.

Thanks for the read & review.

Comment from mjac777

Excellent

Ha ha ha ha ha .......

Nicely done! I liked the double spacing - it helped add to the suspense.

Horror and humor (am I the only one who felt this way?)

Interesting read. More amazingly, it was amply told in 50 words!

Well done.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, mjac777. No, you aren't alone pertaining to horror and humor. Take author Stephen King, for example. If he weren't a highly successful author, he'd certainly have a gig in some obscure comedy club somewhere as a stand-up comedian. He's friggin' hilarious!

I appreciate you kind review.

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Dean Kuch,

No, I can't say I had ever wondered ... Well, Jill wouldn't be the first to dispose of the victim down a well.

Patrick

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Yeah, the wench!

Thanks, Patrick.

Comment from TheWriteTeach

Excellent

Hey, Dean!

Just checking out the competition for this 50 word story, and have to say this is pretty good, my friend.
Boxing gloves are on! Good luck in the contest. May the best man, er, ah . . . woman win! LOL!!!

Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch a pail of water
Jill tumbled and almost broke her crown; she had an emotional scene
Her antics Jack scoffed, but her eyes showed murderous slaughter
Apologetic words didn't appease, today she was just plain mean
Head first Jack went, down the well; for unhappy Jill was a plotter
Don't be sad, this soggy lad got his revenge with a little help from Dean
You see, he resurrected Jack for a contest to see which author was better.

Good thing this contest is prose and not poetry. I'd come in last for sure.
Suzanne

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Yeah, I took put 'em on after losing this last contest, Suzanne, and they ain't comin' off, either, LOL! I really loved your poetic reply. I thought it was pretty darn good...:}

Thanks for your wonderful review, my friend. Best of luck to you, although I doubt very much that you'll need it.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

You are such a wicked person. LOL Your mind goes to some scary places, my friend :-)
So, Jack has crawled out of the well where Jill had tossed him, I suppose LOL
I love the vision of the gnarled hands as I imagine he is about to wrap them around her pretty little neck :-) A fantastic story in 50 words. This one should be a contender. Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Thanks, Brooke, truly. I could really use a break in these contests.

I appreciate your review of this silly thing, my friend.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Eeeeek! Well, Dean, we're certainly doing our best to re-visit these kiddie stories with our special angles, lol. I'd love you to explore Jack and Jill further in another posting, if you ever get the urge. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2014

Ha ha, I just might take you up on that, Lou. We've only heard Jill's side of the story about what happened to poor old Jack but I tell the truth, LOL. Well, my version of it, anyway.

Thanks so much for your encouraging review, my friend.