Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Philosophy Jones"A collection of my poems
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Comment from Debbie7
Steve,
Absolutely wonderful. The rhyming, within & ending. Great alliteration throughout, so much fun to read and definitely complimented by the picture. I love O. Henry too. A sure winner of the contest. I loved it. Namaste, Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Steve,
Absolutely wonderful. The rhyming, within & ending. Great alliteration throughout, so much fun to read and definitely complimented by the picture. I love O. Henry too. A sure winner of the contest. I loved it. Namaste, Debbie
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Debbie, thanks for the glowing words and the six stars - this is the contest I most want to win and have never achieved....
Steve
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Steve,
It was great, I hope you win. Debbie
Comment from rouskin
Well written story with good flow rhyme and alliteration throughout the poem I wish you all the best in the contest !
Very strong contestant Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Well written story with good flow rhyme and alliteration throughout the poem I wish you all the best in the contest !
Very strong contestant Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks for your kind words.
Have a great day!
Steve
Comment from skye
Wow. You made him come alive, through the excellent rhymes and lines of your wonderful story poem. I could see him finagling another cot in jail. I could see all the good souls cutting him loose, for the holiday. And then, the light dawns, he's going to repent, and again, lands in jail.
Fun and cute, and probably more true than we can ever imagine.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Wow. You made him come alive, through the excellent rhymes and lines of your wonderful story poem. I could see him finagling another cot in jail. I could see all the good souls cutting him loose, for the holiday. And then, the light dawns, he's going to repent, and again, lands in jail.
Fun and cute, and probably more true than we can ever imagine.
Excellent.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks for your kind words.
Have a great day!
Steve
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, I did like this one, not all the best ones had been written, Steve, this is so good and just in time, I see. I do love this type of story, it is a real story in a poem, lots are not. Good luck in the contest! xsx sandra
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Oh, I did like this one, not all the best ones had been written, Steve, this is so good and just in time, I see. I do love this type of story, it is a real story in a poem, lots are not. Good luck in the contest! xsx sandra
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Sandra.
Yes, I see other entries that may have fine poetry but they are far from being strong 'stories' which I am sure is what the judges are looking for.
Have a great day.
Steve
Comment from livelylinda
kiwisteveh: you've done a wonderful job writing about Philosophy Jones. It has been years since I read O.Henry. You have inspired me to take another peak. Great job here and I believe six star worthy but will have to be virtual today. livelylinda
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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kiwisteveh: you've done a wonderful job writing about Philosophy Jones. It has been years since I read O.Henry. You have inspired me to take another peak. Great job here and I believe six star worthy but will have to be virtual today. livelylinda
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Linda.
The story was called 'The Cop and the Anthem' - easy to find online if you want to read it, but be warned O. henry never used one word when a dozen would do. His character was called Soapy.
Thanks for a wonderful review.
Steve
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. This is a well written entry. It travels along well and keeps up the rythme and rhyme. The picture is good as well. I have the othr pome on the tip of my tongue, or rather like an unheard earworm...
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Hello. This is a well written entry. It travels along well and keeps up the rythme and rhyme. The picture is good as well. I have the othr pome on the tip of my tongue, or rather like an unheard earworm...
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you.
The story was called 'The Cop and the Anthem' - easy to find online if you want to read it, but be warned O. henry never used one word when a dozen would do. His character was called Soapy.
Thanks for a wonderful review.
Steve
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with fingers/lingers...bed/fed...failed/jailed...well/cell. Good internal rhyming. Good alliteration and description. Good storytelling. Good complimentary photo followed by a humorous message.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with fingers/lingers...bed/fed...failed/jailed...well/cell. Good internal rhyming. Good alliteration and description. Good storytelling. Good complimentary photo followed by a humorous message.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the kind review.
Steve
Comment from Rondeno
Terrific rhythm, delightful internal rhymes, skilful touches ("the broken and broke"), and through all of this, a great story! Tremendous work, my friend.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Terrific rhythm, delightful internal rhymes, skilful touches ("the broken and broke"), and through all of this, a great story! Tremendous work, my friend.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Mike.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
And who says all the great stories have been written? Nothing like cutting the legs out from under an aspiring story writer!
I believe Damon Runyon also copped from this story when he named a principle character Sorrowful Jones. Another homage to the great O. Henry.
It's all here, Steve. An interesting rhyme scheme, storng rhymes and meter. O., and a story.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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And who says all the great stories have been written? Nothing like cutting the legs out from under an aspiring story writer!
I believe Damon Runyon also copped from this story when he named a principle character Sorrowful Jones. Another homage to the great O. Henry.
It's all here, Steve. An interesting rhyme scheme, storng rhymes and meter. O., and a story.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Oh, all right, I suppose a writer of your inventiveness can still create something fresh and new - I was talking about us lesser mortals!
I've been reminded that the original story was called 'The Cop and the Anthem' and the original character was Soapy....
Steve
Comment from N.K. Wagner
He either gets arrested or he dies. Maybe he joins a religious order. Lots of twist potential with this set-up, Steve. Beautifully written, an I like the variously tabbed right margin lay-out. Excellent, sir. :D Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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He either gets arrested or he dies. Maybe he joins a religious order. Lots of twist potential with this set-up, Steve. Beautifully written, an I like the variously tabbed right margin lay-out. Excellent, sir. :D Nancy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks, Nancy - O. Henry was a genius at plot twists One of my all-time favourites is 'The Ethics of Pig' - gotta love the title for a start. I reckon it would make a marvellous movie - if I could, I would tackle a screenplay and send it to Spielberg...
Steve